Professional Documents
Culture Documents
1. Verbs
Exercise:
1. Theoretical science began when the Greeks ______
(start) to ask question about things
_____ (make) of and where they ______ (come) from.
2. Ptolemy believed that the sun _____ (revolve) around
the sun.
3. Ptolemy did not realize that the earth ______ (revolve)
around the sun.
4. Vesalius named every bone, every muscle, and most of
the blood vessels in the human
body, but he did not know how the body ______
(function).
5. Johannes Kepler was the first to show how a planet
______ (move).
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B. Choppy sentences.
Choppy sentences are sentences that are too short.
They are the result of using too many simple
sentences.
Choppy:
We must find new sources of energy. The
earths natural sources of energy are dwindling. Solar
energy is a promising new source of energy. Solar
energy is energy from the suns radiation.
Choppy:
Government and industry are spending huge
sums of money to develop solar energy. Research
scientists are working hard to develop economical
means of converting the suns ray into usable energy.
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B.Choppy sentences.
Choppy sentences are easy to correct. Just
combine two or three simple sentences to
make one compound or complex
sentence. Your decision to make a
compound or a
complex sentence should be based on
whether the ideas in the simple sentences
are equal or whether one sentence is
dependent on the other.
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B. Choppy sentences.
1. If the simple sentences are equal, make a
compound sentence, using a coordinating
conjunction (and, or, but, so, yet, nor, for FAN
BOYS) or a conjunctive adverb (moreover,
otherwise, however, therefore, etc.)
2. If one sentence depends on the other, make a
complex sentence, using a subordinating
conjunction (who, which, when, although,
because, since, if, etc.)
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Exercise: Correct the following run-on/comma splice sentences using the method
indicated.
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2.
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4.
5.
A foreign student faces many problems for example he has to cope with a new culture.
(a) (Add a period.) _____________________________________________________.
(b) (Add a semicolon.) __________________________________________________.
San Francisco is a very cosmopolitan city, there are people from many cultures and
ethnic groups living there.
(a) (Add a period.) _____________________________________________________.
(b) (Add a semicolon.) __________________________________________________.
(Add a subordinating conjunction.) ______________________________________.
(d) (Add a coordinating conjunction.) ______________________________________.
Learning a new language is like learning to swim it takes a lot of practice.
(Add a coordinating conjunction.) _________________________________________.
Ask for assistance at the reference desk in the library, there is always a librarian on
duty.
(Add a semicolon.) _____________________________________________________.
Hang-gliding is a dangerous sport you can easily break your leg.
(Add a subordinating conjunction.) ________________________________________.
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D. Stringy sentences
Another type of problem that students sometimes
create is the stringy sentence. This is a sentence with
too many clauses usually connected with and, but, so,
and because, forming one very long sentence. The
result is a sentence that seems endless.
Stringy Sentence: Many students attend classes all
morning and they work all afternoon and then they
have to study at night so they are usually exhausted by
the weekend.
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D.
Stringy sentences
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(weak):
An investigation of the different options was
performed.
(strong):
The different options were investigated.
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Revising
Think of this stage of the writing process as quality
assurance at a macro level. You need to make sure that
the results of your writing achieve the intended purpose(s)
as effectively as possible.
Try to read your writing from the perspective of
your reader. You might even want to sit in a different
chair and to read your words aloud. Youll find out if
your copy is conversational and natural. Also, mistakes
are more likely to stand out. If you used a computer, you
should print out a copy and read your words from the
paper, as your reader will be reading them.
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Editing
When you edit your writing, youre checking it
over for accuracy, grammar, spelling, and punctuation.
You may want to have someone else edit your writing
(after youre done your best). If thats not an option, you
can try the old trick of reading the paragraphs in reverse
order. Reading your work from finish to start may disrupt
the flow of your words enough for you to catch some
errors.
A final word of advice here: dont trust your
computer. Those tools that check grammar and spelling
are very helpful. But theyre limited, because human
language is simply too complex for machines (at least for
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now).
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Clarity
If your message has more than one meaning,
its not clear. Dont use long words where short
ones will do; it makes your writing dense and
difficult to understand. Use precise words and
phrasings to make your writing clear. Make sure
the words you choose have the right meaning and
dont allow for misinterpretation. For example,
dont use the vague term health organization when
you mean the American Red Cross.
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Economy
When it comes to words, more is not usually better. When
you use too many words, you may lose the reader or at least
make the reader lose interest. Take the following paragraph, for
example.
For the purposes of this policy, sexual harassment may
be defined as unsolicited nonreciprocal behavior by an employee
who is in a position to control or affect another employees job or
who uses the power or authority of that position to cause that
employee to submit to sexual activity or to fear that he or she
would be punished for refusal to submit to such activity. Sexual
harassment also includes any employee conduct reasonably
interfering with another employees work performance by creating
an intimidating, hostile, or offensive working environment.
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Economy
Its easy to get lost in that jungle of words. How
effective will that policy be when the clarification is so
dense? The following sentence provides another
example of uneconomical writing.
Parking in the lot adjacent to the building will be
restricted by space allocation designation for workers
vehicles and the four outermost spaces will be reserved
for supervisors of the construction crew so employees
should make other arrangements for parking during that
time frame and consider implementation of vehicular cotransportation.
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Weak words
You can make your writing clearer by deleting words that
dont add meaning. For example, pay close attention to the
following words:
actually
basically
certain
definitely
different
generally
given
individual
kind of
particular
practically really
various
very
virtually
These words are not bad, but people tend to use them
unnecessarily. Example: Actually, I generally kind of enjoy
typing practically any specific type of communication. These
words weaken the sentence because they add nothing to it but
length.
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How can you keep your writing lean and strong? When you might
use one of the following phrases, try the shorter equivalent instead.
in the event that
= if
subsequent to
= after
prior to
= before
the possibility exists for
= might
in order to
= to
in the neighborhood of
= around, about
from time to time
= occasionally
in reference to
= about
it is necessary that
= must
due to the fact that
= because
in the amount of
= for
Heres another example of fat writing found in a typical memo.
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Close proximity
Proximity means close.
Provide with information
Use the verb inform.
Cooperate together
Cooperate means work with others, so
its necessarily together.
Completely full
Full means totally or completely
unless its not.
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Sufficient enough
Sufficient means enough.
Other alternative
Alternative means another choice, so other
alternative makes sense only if there are at least
three options.
New innovation
Innovation means new.
Past experience
Experience usually refers to the past, so you
would modify it only to refer to the present or future.
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Recurring habit
A habit is recurring behavior.
Past memories
What else can we remember but the past.
Initial preparation
Preparation implies initial, because its
done before something.
More preferable
Preferable means more desirable.
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Important essentials
Essential means important.
Various different
Various means different. Also different after numbers
is usually redundant: e.g., We considered seventeen different
locations or I called her five different times.
Future plan
Plan implies future unless specified otherwise.
Free gift
A gift is something given voluntarily, without payment in
returen.
Continue to remain
Remain means to continue to be.
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Straightforwardness
You can write in a more straightforward
manner when you place the subject and the verb
close together. Use subject-verb-object order with
strong action verbs.
If you write clearly, economically, and in a
straightforward manner, people will find your
writing more readable.
Why is it important to keep the subject near
the verb? This next announcement shows what
can happen when you dont.
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Straightforwardness
The executive managers of Acme Anvils, in
their meeting April 5, called for the purpose of
discussing problems encountered in negotiating a
contract with their principal iron ore supplier,
Ferrous Ingots, which has recently undergone
substantial personnel changes, have decided, in
consideration of the extreme importance of our
iron ore supply, to arrange, as soon as possible
within the limitations of their individual
schedules, a meeting with the executive managers
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of Ferrous.
Straightforwardness
How many times did you have to read that
announcement to understand what was
happening? Not only is too much crammed into a
single sentence, but the subject-verb-object order
(executive managers have decided to arrange a
meeting) is interrupted by clauses that confuse
the reader. The following revision seems more
straightforward:
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Formal
All employees are herewith instructed to return the
appropriately designated contracts to the undersigned.
Conversational Please return your contracts to me.
Formal
Pertaining to your order, we must verify the sizes
that your organization requires prior to consignment of your order
to our shipper.
Conversational Well send your order as soon as we confirm the
sizes you need.
Formal
The writer wishes to inform the above-referenced
individual that subsequent payments may henceforth be sent to the
address cited below.
Conversational
Chicago.
Precise verbs
Effective writing creates meaningful images
in the mind of the reader. Such writing is sparked
by robust, concrete, and descriptive words.
Ineffective writing is often dulled by insipid,
abstract, and generalized words. The most direct
way to improve lifeless writing is through
effective use of verbs. Verbs not only indicate the
action of the subject but also deliver the force of
the sentence. Select verbs carefully so that the
reader can visualize what actually is happening.
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General
Our salesperson will contact you next week.
Precise
Our salesperson will (telephone, fax, e-mail,
visit) you next Monday.
General
The CEO said that we should contribute.
Precise
The CEO (urged, pleaded, demanded) that
we contribute.
General
We must consider this problem.
Precise
We must (clarify, remedy, rectify) this
problem.
General
The newspaper was affected by the strike.
Precise
The newspaper was (crippled, silenced,
demoralized) by the strike.
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Weak
Acquisition of park lands was made
recently by the city.
Strong
The city acquired park lands recently.
Weak
The webmaster and the designer had a
discussion concerning graphics.
Strong
The webmaster and the designer
discussed graphics.
Weak
Both companies must grant approval of
the merge.
Strong
Both companies must approve the
merge.
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Concrete nouns
Nouns name persons, place, and things. Abstract
nouns name concepts that are difficult to visualize, such
as automation, function, justice, institution, integrity,
form, judgment, and environment. Concrete nouns name
objects that are more easily imagined, such as desk, car,
and lightbulb. Nouns describing a given object can range
from the very abstract to the very concrete for example,
object, motor vehicle, car, convertible, Mustang. All of
these words or phrases can be used to describe a Mustang
convertible. However, a reader would have difficulty
envisioning a Mustang convertible when given just the
word object or even motor vehicle or car. In business
writing, help your reader see what you mean by using
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concrete language.
Concrete nouns
General a change in our budget
Concrete a 10 percent reduction in our budget
General that companys product
Concrete NECs Ultra Express pager
General a person called
Concrete Ms. Swain, the administrative assistant,
called
General we improved the assembly line
Concrete we installed 26 advanced Unimate
robots on the assembly line
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