ILP Written Communication_LAAP_Exercise Set One_Achieving Cohesion in Writing

Writing Skills: Exercise Set One: Achieving Cohesion in Writing

Order of Tasks 1 Tasks to be performed Click this link: http://owl.english.purdue.edu/handouts/general/gl_pgrph2.html to read the Purdue University Online Writing Lab (OWL) Handout on Paragraph Writing 2 Exercise A: 1) Find the lead sentence in this paragraph Ex. A(1) 10 minutes Approx. Time 30 minutes

2) Unscramble the order of sentences in the paragraph to Ex. A(2) 15 minutes obtain correct logical flow. 3 Exercise B: 1) Find the lead sentence in this paragraph Ex. B(1) 10 minutes

2) Unscramble the order of sentences in the paragraph to Ex. B(2) 15 minutes obtain correct logical flow. 4 Exercise C: 1) Break up the passage given into three separate paragraphs. Ex. C(1) 10 minutes Ex. C(2) 10 minutes

2) Find the logical bridges or transitions between each of

these three paragraphs 5 Exercise D: 1) Place each of the linking words given into the appropriate column according to its function. 2) Use appropriate linking words to fill in the blanks in the given essay 3) Try to find a word in the essay which has a similar meaning 4) Provide the right forms of the words given 6 Attempt the quizzes available in the link provided here: http://www.flo-joe.co.uk/cae/students/writing/linking/ Total Approximate Time

Ex. D(1) 10 minutes Ex. D(2) 10 minutes Ex. D(3) 10 minutes Ex. D(4) 10 minutes 15 minutes 150 minutes

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Exercise A:
Procedure: 1. The table below presents a series of sentences from a single paragraph. 2. The order of sentences in this paragraph has been scrambled. 3. Read this table carefully.

Sentence Marker A

Sentences As the best-preserved temple at the site, it is the only one to have remained a significant religious centre since its foundationfirst Hindu, dedicated to Vishnu, then Buddhist.

B C D E F G Assignment

The temple is the epitome of the high classical style of Khmer architecture. It has become a symbol of Cambodia, appearing on its national flag. The Angkor Wat temple was built for the king Suryavarman II in the early 12th century. It was his state temple and capital city. Angkor Wat is a temple complex at Angkor, Cambodia. It is also the country's prime attraction for visitors.

Ex. A (1): Identify and write down the lead sentence in this paragraph. Recommended Time: 10 minutes Ex. A (2): Unscramble the order of sentences in the paragraph to obtain correct logical flow. Write down the paragraph in the correct logical order. Recommended Time: 15 minutes

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Solution to Exercise A
Solution to Ex. A (1): The Sentence Marker alphabet for the lead sentence in this paragraph is indicated in enlarged blue font. Recommended Time: 5 minutes

Sentence Marker A

Sentences As the best-preserved temple at the site, it is the only one to have remained a significant religious centre since its foundationfirst Hindu, dedicated to Vishnu, then Buddhist.

B C D E

The temple is the epitome of the high classical style of Khmer architecture. It has become a symbol of Cambodia, appearing on its national flag. The Angkor Wat temple was built for the king Suryavarman II in the early 12th century. It was his state temple and capital city. Angkor Wat is a temple complex at Angkor, Cambodia. It is also the country's prime attraction for visitors.

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G

Solution to Ex. A (2): The paragraph is presented below in the right logical order. Recommended time: 5 minutes Angkor Wat is a temple complex at Angkor, Cambodia. The Angkor Wat temple was built for the king Suryavarman II in the early 12th century. It was his state temple and capital city. As the best-preserved temple at the site, it is the only one to have remained a significant religious centre since its foundation first Hindu, dedicated to Vishnu, then Buddhist. The temple is the epitome of the high classical style of Khmer architecture. It has become a symbol of Cambodia, appearing on its national flag. It is also the country's prime attraction for visitors. Note: This exercise is adapted from Wikipedia. To read the complete article visit: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Angkor_Wat

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Exercise B:
Procedure: 1. The table below presents a series of sentences from a single paragraph. 2. The order of sentences in this paragraph has been scrambled. 3. Read this table carefully.

Sentence Marker A B C D E F G H

Sentences Saffron has also been used as a fabric dye, particularly in China and India, and in perfumery. Saffron, a spice derived from the flower of the saffron crocus, is very versatile. It also has a strong role in medicine. It is widely used in Iranian (Persian), Arab, Central Asian, European, Indian, Turkish, and Cornish cuisines. Confectioneries and liquors also often include saffron. Saffron has a long history as part of traditional healing. Modern medicine has also discovered saffron as having anticarcinogenic ,antimutagenic , immunomodulating, and antioxidant-like properties. Early studies show that saffron may protect the eyes from the direct effects of bright light and retinal stress apart from slowing down macular degeneration and retinitis pigmentosa.

Assignment Ex. B (1): Identify and write down the lead sentence in this paragraph. Recommended Time: 10 minutes Ex. B (2): Unscramble the order of sentences in the paragraph to obtain correct logical flow. Write down the paragraph in the correct logical order. Recommended Time: 15 minutes

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Solution to Exercise B
Solution to Ex. B (1): The Sentence Marker alphabet for the lead sentence in this paragraph is indicated in enlarged blue font.Recommended Time: 5 minutes Sentence Marker A Saffron has also been used as a fabric dye, particularly in China and India, and in perfumery. Saffron, a spice derived from the flower of the saffron crocus, is very versatile. It also has a strong role in medicine. It is widely used in Iranian (Persian), Arab, Central Asian, European, Indian, Turkish, and Cornish cuisines. E F G H Confectioneries and liquors also often include saffron. Saffron has a long history as part of traditional healing. Modern medicine has also discovered saffron as having anticarcinogenic ,antimutagenic , immunomodulating, and antioxidant-like properties. Early studies show that saffron may protect the eyes from the direct effects of bright light and retinal stress apart from slowing down macular degeneration and retinitis pigmentosa. Solution to Ex. B (2): The paragraph is presented below in the right logical order. Recommended time: 5 minutes Saffron, a spice derived from the flower of the saffron crocus, is very versatile.It is widely used in Iranian (Persian), Arab, Central Asian, European, Indian, Turkish, and Cornish cuisines. Confectioneries and liquors also often include saffron. It also has a strong role in medicine. Saffron has a long history as part of traditional healing. Modern medicine has also discovered saffron as having anticarcinogenic (cancer-suppressing),anti-mutagenic (mutation-preventing), immunomodulating, and antioxidant-like properties. Early studies show that saffron may protect the eyes from the direct effects of bright light and retinal stress apart from slowing down macular degeneration and retinitis pigmentosa. Saffron has also been used as a fabric dye, particularly in China and India, and in perfumery. Note: This exercise is adapted from Wikipedia. To read the complete article visit: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Saffron For ILP Internal Use Only Sentences

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Exercise C:
Procedure:

1) The passage below comprises three distinct and consecutive paragraphs that have been fused
together into a single large paragraph.

2) Read the passage carefully.

Annelies Marie "Anne" Frank (12 June 1929 early March 1945) was a Jewish girl who was born in the city of Frankfurt am Main in Weimar Germany, and who lived most of her life in or near Amsterdam, in the Netherlands. By nationality, she was officially considered a German until 1941, when she lost her nationality due to the German Nazi anti-Semitic policies. She gained international fame posthumously following the publication of her diary which documents her experiences hiding during the German occupation of the Netherlands in World War II. Anne and her family moved from Germany to Amsterdam in 1933, same year as the Nazis gained power in Germany. By the beginning of the 1940 they were trapped in Amsterdam due to the German Nazi occupation of the Netherlands. As persecutions of the Jewish population increased in July 1942, the family went into hiding in the hidden rooms of her father Otto Frank's office building. After two years, the group was betrayed and transported to concentration camps. Seven months after her arrest, Anne Frank died of typhus in the Bergen-Belsen concentration camp, within days of the death of her sister, Margot Frank. Her father Otto, the only survivor of the family, returned to Amsterdam after the war to find that her diary had been saved, and his efforts led to its publication in 1947. It was translated from its original Dutch and first published in English in 1952 as The Diary of a Young Girl. The diary, which was given to Anne on her 13th birthday, chronicles her life from 12 June 1942 until 1 August 1944. It has been translated into many languages, has become one of the world's most widely read books, and has been the basis for several plays and films. Anne Frank has been acknowledged for the quality of her writing, and has become one of the most renowned and most discussed victims of the Holocaust. Assignment Ex. C (1): Break up the passage given into three separate paragraphs. Write the first sentence of each paragraph in your notebook. Ex. C(2) : Find the logical bridges or transitions in the concepts raised in the text passage, between each of the three paragraphs.

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Solution to Exercise C:
Solution to Ex. C (1): The passage is presented below in the correct logical sequence. The first sentence of each paragraph is displayed in blue bold face. Recommended Time: 5 minutes Annelies Marie "Anne" Frank (12 June 1929 early March 1945) was a Jewish girl who was born in the city of Frankfurt am Main in Weimar Germany, and who lived most of her life in or near Amsterdam, in the Netherlands. By nationality, she was officially considered a German until 1941, when she lost her nationality due to the German Nazi anti-Semitic policies. She gained international fame posthumously following the publication of her diary which documents her experiences hiding during the German occupation of the Netherlands in World War II. Anne and her family moved from Germany to Amsterdam in 1933, same year as the Nazis gained power in Germany. By the beginning of the 1940 they were trapped in Amsterdam due to the German Nazi occupation of the Netherlands. As persecutions of the Jewish population increased in July 1942, the family went into hiding in the hidden rooms of her father Otto Frank's office building. After two years, the group was betrayed and transported to concentration camps. Seven months after her arrest, Anne Frank died of typhus in the Bergen-Belsen concentration camp, within days of the death of her sister, Margot Frank. Her father Otto, the only survivor of the family, returned to Amsterdam after the war to find that her diary had been saved, and his efforts led to its publication in 1947. It was translated from its original Dutch and first published in English in 1952 as The Diary of a Young Girl. The diary, which was given to Anne on her 13th birthday, chronicles her life from 12 June 1942 until 1 August 1944. It has been translated into many languages, has become one of the world's most widely read books, and has been the basis for several plays and films. Anne Frank has been acknowledged for the quality of her writing, and has become one of the most renowned and most discussed victims of the Holocaust.

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Solution to Ex. C (2)

The logical bridges / transitions between the paragraphs are displayed below: Recommended Time: 5 minutes Position Between Paragraphs 1 and 2 Logical Bridges/Transitions Logical bridges in the concepts presented: The first paragraph gives a brief outline on Anne Frank. The paragraph ends with mention of World War II. The second paragraph talks in more detail about Anne's life during the time of war Between Paragraphs 2 and 3 Logical bridges in the concepts presented: The second paragraph ends with a mention of Anne Frank's diary. The third paragraph elaborates on that.

Note: This exercise is adapted from Wikipedia. To read the complete article visit: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Anne_Frank

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Exercise D
Linking Words in Writing (From Coherence and Cohesion in Writing - Eva Mansell)
Introduction: Linking words and expressions are important because they connect ideas between sentences in a logical way. They help to make the writing more cohesive.

Ex. D (1)
Instructions: Place each of the linking words below into the appropriate column according to its function. As an example, two of the linking words have already been entered in the correct columns Recommended Time: 10 minutes

nevertheless as a result of because (of)

in addition to begin with furthermore

as a rule For instance in general

due to however as well as

on the whole in conclusion

Adding Information in addition

Contrasting information

Reason or result

Time or sequence in conclusion

Giving examples

Making generalizations

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Ex. D (2)
Instructions: Read the following essay. Choose an appropriate linking word for each space marked **********. Recommended Time: 10 minutes Many young people choose to continue their education at colleges or universities in English-speaking countries such as Britain, Australia or America. **********, while studying overseas has clear advantages, it is not without its problems. In this essay, both points of view will be considered.

*********, studying overseas has significant academic benefits. *********, the standard of education is very high ********* the up-to-date equipment and resources that are available in colleges and universities. *********, the quality of teaching is also high, as teachers and lecturers are well-qualified professionals who are aware of all the latest developments in their fields of interest. *********, the qualifications which a student obtains are usually valid anywhere in the world. ********* the obvious academic benefits, students also gain experience of another culture, improve their language skills and meet many new people. *********living away from their families, they become more independent, tolerant and emotionally mature, all of which aids their personal development.

*********, in some cases, studying abroad can have quite negative effects. *********, if students are insufficiently prepared academically, they might have difficulties understanding lectures or writing assignments. *********, young students may have problems adjusting to a different culture with its unfamiliar climate, food and lifestyle. ********* this, they may experience much loneliness and home sickness. A final problem could be that some students adapt so successfully to Western culture that they have problems readjusting when they finally return home.

*********, although there can be problems in studying abroad, most students, with appropriate preparation and support, should be able to overcome these obstacles. *********, the advantages of an overseas education far outweigh any of the disadvantages described above.

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Ex. D(3)
Instructions: To avoid repeating vocabulary, the essay above uses words which are very close or similar in meaning. Try to find a word in the essay which has a similar meaning to each of the words in the first column and type it in the second column below. Recommended Time: 10 minutes

Word advantages standard abroad adjust problems different

Word with similar or same meaning benefits

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Ex. D(4)
Instructions: When using vocabulary in your writing, it is important to choose the correct word form (or part of speech).The next exercise will help you think about using words correctly and is a good way to increase your vocabulary. In the chart below, there are some more words from the essay. Complete the chart, adding nouns, verbs, adjectives where appropriate. Not all of the words will exist in all four forms. If you see a line ( ) in the space, it means that this form of the word does not exist.

Recommended Time: 10 minutes

Noun e.g.(im)maturity (in)tolerance benefit

Verb mature tolerate

Adjective (im)mature (in)tolerant significant valid independent

Adverb (im)maturely tolerantly

insufficiently unfamiliar adapt successfully

If you want to check the form, meanings or spellings of any of these words, use an on-line dictionary

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Solution to Ex. D (1):

The linking words have been placed into the appropriate column according to their function. Recommended Time: 5 minutes

Adding Information in addition as well as furthermore Time or sequence in conclusion to begin with

Contrasting information nevertheless however

Reason or result as a result of because of due to

Giving examples for instance

Making generalizations as a rule on the whole in general

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Solution to Ex. D(2):

Here is a complete version of the essay with the linking words restored. Recommended Time: 5 minutes Many young people choose to continue their education at colleges or universities in English-speaking countries such as Britain, Australia or America. Nevertheless, while studying overseas has clear advantages, it is not without its problems. In this essay, both points of view will be considered.

To begin with, studying overseas has significant academic benefits. In general, the standard of education is very high due to the up-to-date equipment and resources that are available in colleges and universities. As a rule, the quality of teaching is also high, as teachers and lecturers are wellqualified professionals who are aware of all the latest developments in their fields of interest. In addition, the qualifications which a student obtains are usually valid anywhere in the world. As well as the obvious academic benefits, students also gain experience of another culture, improve their language skills and meet many new people. As a result of living away from their families, they become more independent, tolerant and emotionally mature, all of which aids their personal development.

However, in some cases, studying abroad can have quite negative effects. For instance, if students are insufficiently prepared academically, they might have difficulties understanding lectures or writing assignments. Furthermore, young students may have problems adjusting to a different culture with its unfamiliar climate, food and lifestyle. Because of this, they may experience much loneliness and home sickness. A final problem could be that some students adapt so successfully to Western culture that they have problems readjusting when they finally return home.

In conclusion, although there can be problems in studying abroad, most students, with appropriate preparation and support, should be able to overcome these obstacles. On the whole, the advantages of an overseas education far outweigh any of the disadvantages described above.

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Solution to Ex. D(3):

The words and words with similar meanings are presented below: Recommended Time: 5 minutes Advantages Benefits Standard Quality Abroad Overseas Adjust Adapt Problems Difficulties or obstacles Different - Unfamiliar

Solution to Ex. D(4)

Here is the complete chart, with different forms of the words: nouns, verbs, adjectives where appropriate.
Recommended Time: 5 minutes

Noun e.g.(im)maturity (in)tolerance significance benefit validity Independence (In)sufficiency familiarity adaptation success

Verb mature tolerate benefit validate familiarise adapt succeed

Adjective (im)mature (in)tolerant significant beneficial valid independent (in)sufficient unfamiliar Adaptable successful

Adverb (im)maturely tolerantly significantly - Independently (in)sufficiently --successfully

Thank you for completing these exercises on Achieving Cohesion in Writing!

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