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QUESTION 2
As time goes by, the world is changing rapidly; so are its people
and the technology itself. Technology brings about a lot of
amendments in people’s life. It is getting more advanced from day
to day especially when it comes to Information Technology or in
this case; electronic communications. Back then, mailing was
seemingly to be one of the most vital ways of communication
especially for the world communication. In contrast, nowadays
people are more prone to communicate the easier ways; by staring
on their electronic accounts on their computers or through their
iPods and sending short messages from their iPhones or
Blackberries. Why is it so? In my slight opinion, this growing trend
gives a lot of dominances in today’s life, which are helping people
to save their time and money, create borderless communication
and make it easy for people to gain prominent information.
Feedback
The student introduces technology as a whole, looking at its
history, from how it has grown from a simple form of
communication through letters to today’s extensive choice of
communication through electronic gadgets. This is a great
way to start your introduction. Based on the question, explain
what the issue is and give a brief background of its past and
present. State your opinion as to why such situation arises.
First and foremost, the world today is turning more to electronic
communications like e-mail, Facebook and Short Message System
(SMS) and other electronic communications is because they will
prevent people from wasting their time and money. How do these
work? As we all know, sending a letter to someone will take a lot of
processes and will eventually take a long time and waste a lot of
money. On the contrary, electronic communications entail only the
tip of our fingers so as an electronic device to work with. Then, what
is left for us to do is just, typing! Has that not taken a much lesser
time and money? For instance, an e-mail only requires us to turn
on our laptops, open our accounts on the website and then, you
can start write your letter and send them through e-mails. In short,
with the very unstable economy nowadays, having these kinds of
communications will ease everyone’s burden especially on their
daily expenses and also their valuable time will not be wasted.
Feedback
State, Explain and then Illustrate. Remember SEI. First, state
the topic that’s been mentioned. In this case, it’s the rise of
electronic communications. Then explain. Explain what
electronic communications entail. Next, illustrate. This means
give examples based on your explanation. The student
illustrates by giving a scenario of the use of emails.
Feedback
Structure your subsequent paragraphs like the first one. Add
a new point in the second paragraph and repeat the SEI
format. It’s important to have a mind map of your points before
you start writing.
Feedback
To indicate that your essay is coming to an end, use words
like ‘in conclusion, in a nutshell, in short or to wrap up.
Summarise your opinion based on all your previous
paragraphs and emphasise your point through words like ‘I
believe’.