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Sanika Walimbe
Mrs. Mann
10 February 2019
transitioning them from one environment to another. By the main character in the excerpt using
an elevator to be exposed to her new environment, it symbolizes that the elevator is transitioning
her to different “levels” - or different places- in her life, creating unfamiliar changes in her
environment. In the excerpt by Jamaica Kincaid, a girl details her struggles adjusting to life in
her new home. Though the girl is learning more about the world and gaining knowledge in her
new home, she is nostalgic for her past life, longing to be surrounded by familiarity.
The main character vividly describes the awe she experiences in her new but unfamiliar
home. When describing her first experiences in her new environment she states, “I got into an
elevator, something I had never done before, and then was in an apartment and seated at a table,
eating food just taken from the refrigerator.” In this description of her sequence of events,
Kincaid purposely makes the syntax in the sentence run on, lengthening it by the use of commas,
to show how overwhelmed she felt by taking in new information about the world around her.
Furthermore, she states she slept soundly because she “didn’t want to take in anything else”,
proving how she was learning so much in such a short period of time about different customs
that she felt overwhelmed and needed sleep as a break from learning. In addition, the narrator
explains her fascination with how “the sun was shining but the air was cold” by exclaiming
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“What a feeling that was! How can I explain?” . Through her excitement and wonder of this
phenomena, Kincaid demonstrates that the narrator is in awe of the new sensory experiences.
The narrator's new encounters result in her processing her new environment to learn more than
The narrator also craves to relive her old life. Through Kincaid’s use of juxtaposition of
colors, by describing her old life with happy colors such as “pink”, “green” and “bright
sun-yellow” while describing her new life with dark colors such as “pale yellow” and “black”,
showing the narrator’s preference for her old life and the happiness associated with it. In
addition, the main character utilizes a metaphor of describing her life as a river with two paths.
She illustrates her old life as “the path that was so predictable and familiar that even my
unhappiness made me happy” and her new life as being “a gray blank overcast seascape… no
boats were in sight”. Through contrasting the beneficial qualities of the first path and the
negative qualities of the second, Kincaid demonstrates the narrator’s realization that she
cherishes her past life, and is nostalgic for it’s simplicity and familiarity whereas she is cold
towards the emptiness and loneliness she feels in her new environment. Furthermore, by the
narrator saying that her “unhappiness” in her old home made her happy, it illustrates her
understanding that her old home was better than previously thought even though she was
dissatisfied there, demonstrating her underappreciation for the life she now cherishes. The main
character’s overall negative disposition towards her current surroundings and longing for her old
one shows her realization that there truly is no place like home.
Kincaid shows that the narrator is challenging her sense of self through encountering new
experiences and learning new information while also longing for the simplicity and predictability
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of her past life. Through the narrator’s internal struggle while transitioning from familiarity to a
foreign land, Kincaid wants the audience to realize that the process of adjustment is difficult, and
Account of Revisions
The Writer’s Workshop experience really helped me improve as a writer. I got lots of great
feedback on all of my essays on how to more effectively illustrate my arguments. Overall, I
learned that I need to be more concise and use fewer pieces of textual evidence and develop
my ideas more fully. Gina gave me great advice when she told me I needed to provide more
context before citing a quote, which I agreed with since I thought I was just stating the
evidence without describing what it was. Gina also recommended that I be more concise with
my evidence and not use as much of it because quality trumps quantity which I also agreed
with because I could sense my second body paragraph loosing it’s message underneath all the
evidence. Esther recommended that I provide a better transition between my introduction
metaphor and summary of the text in my introduction paragraph which I agreed with since I
thought it was too abrupt and lacked explanation. Overall, through these sessions I have
improved as a writer through the constructive criticism given to me.
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