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2021-10-0162
13 April 2018
A Critique on “Give childhood back to children: if we want our offspring to have happy,
productive and moral lives, we must allow more time for play, not less”
In his article “Give childhood back to children”, Dr. Peter Gray records his response to
the 2014 news regarding the prospective developments, which would be made after the ‘School
Teachers Review Body’ reports back to the Education Secretary. Anticipating how this event
would lead to the increase in school hours, author elaborates the importance of ‘play’ and the
detrimental effects the lack of it would have on children, given that the school timings increase.
Having conducted several researches on child psychology, Dr. Gray has considerable insight into
the issue at hand. And it is with that knowledge and experience, he impregnates his article with
relevant examples and evidence, all the while maintaining a highly conversational tone, which
helps the reader in connecting with him. Also, the way he has organized the progression of his
argument, and the manner in which he effectively uses the Aristotelian appeals and add weight to
his claim. However, the credibility of the researches he mentioned is dubious, since he fails to
Since Dr. Gray strived to bring in an idea which is against the current norms of the
educational systems and the mindsets of people, he had to do so in a way which resulted in
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consideration, not retaliation. Introducing such a thing requires extreme deliberation. The flow of
arguments and claims should be fluent and smooth. One should not just bombard the audience
with the claim, rather build a large, steady base and gradually culminate it. This is exactly what
the author has done. He does not begin directly with his claim. Instead, to make his argument
more effective, he first reminisces on his past, allowing people to make a connection with him.
By mentioning how ‘real problems’ (Gray) he faced could not have been solved using ‘formulae
or memorized answers’ (Gray), he allows the readers to also delve into their own lives and think
of similar instances, where their experiences, and not schooling, helped them. Having this
connection made, he ensures that the reader and he are on the same page.
To make one’s claim more impactful, it is necessary that one first exposes the
shortcomings of the opposing, but predominant and existing notion. Dr. Gray employs this tactic
very efficiently. Since the general masses’ opinion regarding the East Asian educational system
is highly positive, and since the author wants to negate the ideology this system was based on, he
first attempts to shatter its façade. He clearly establishes how idealizing the Chinese system is a
fallacy in itself, since the concerned government is itself realizing the shortcomings of its
educational plan, and is attempting to reverse it by issuing reports calling for ‘less time in
school’ (Gray). Stating how the ‘educators’ in these nations have increasingly being identifying
the ‘massive failure of their educational systems’, and mentioning the term ‘gaofen dineng’
(‘good at tests and bad at everything else’), he manages to tear away the veil which hid the flaws
of the said system (Gray). It was his reference to the ‘scholar and author Yong Zhao’, which
provoked the audience into thinking if it was right to blindly follow the Chinese system (Gray).
Having this done, he has created a vacuum for novel ideas in the brains of people, which he then
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masterfully fills in using his claim and relevant examples. This smooth progression of ideas
It is evident that the author wanted his public to connect with him. For that he has
employed a conversational tone, personal stories and imagery throughout his article. An informal
writing style builds an instant rapport with his audience, and this is something Dr. Gray
understands. His usage of first person language (‘I’), phrases like ‘my bet is that…’ and ‘keeping
my head…’, and simple language not only make the piece quite enjoyable and easily
understandable, but also helps him convey his idea in an efficient way (Gray).He has also
allowed the audience to develop a shared relation with him by mentioning some anecdotes, like
the death of his first wife. Combined with the vivid imagery (‘wrestled on the school grounds’,
‘climbed trees’) used in certain parts of the article to narrate some of these stories, these traits of
the article make the author appear as a more relatable person (Gray). This being done, the readers
feel that there is a shared ground, and therefore become more prone to accept the author’s theory.
The employment of this strategy has yielded a very positive effect, as it enables the author to
sprinkles these appeals throughout his article, increasing the persuasive nature of its content.
Establishing his expertise in the very beginning, by mentioning his credentials (‘research bio-
psychologist with a PhD.’) (Gray), he makes it clear that he is an expert in his field and has the
right experience to be commenting on the issue at hand. But this is not all. Throughout the
article, the author complements to this initial effort, by mentioning several researches, including
his own, to emphasize on the considerable knowledge he has in this field. It shows that the
author is not making unfounded claims, and gives the audience the impression that the he is, in
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fact, highly competent. Moreover, he develops his argument using deductive reasoning, which is
essentially him building his logos. He uses facts to deduce results that relate to children. By
correlating the results from several experiments with his argument- ‘those who have to learn the
most, play the most’ with ‘human children who have to learn the most’ (Gray) - and by drawing
parallels between results of the observations on animals and their relationships with the human
offspring, e.g. ‘goat kids romp along the edges of cliffs’ and ‘young humans also play in such
ways’ (Gray), the writer makes the link between evidence and his claim crystal clear. This
technique of analogy, in the concerned article, proves to be very useful in terms of aiding the
audience understand the point Gray is striving to put forth. Since the comprehension has been
facilitated by the author, the readers naturally feel more drawn to the content.
Dr. Gray also adds factors which add to the emotional appeal of his argument. He uses
emotion to grasp attention in the beginning, and employs the same technique while ending, so
that he has his audience fully convinced. The author evokes the emotions of his readers in a
number of effective ways. Firstly, he begins with personal anecdotes. By mentioning how he has
to ‘unblock the toilet’, and how he faces ‘moral’ and ‘emotional’ problems (Gray), he attempts to
make his target public feel an association with him. With this, he is actually attempting to present
himself as normal a human being, as the people reading his article are. This allows him to build a
strong relation between himself and his audience. Secondly, the way he nostalgically
reminiscences on his childhood is quite intelligent as well. He prefers the use of ‘we’ as he
mentions his childhood so that the readers can imagine themselves playing with the author, or
with their friends, while he creates beautiful and vivid imagery of his school’s recess. With this,
he does two things: 1. He further strengthens the bond he had created earlier with his audience;
and 2. He shows how ‘childhood’ has evolved for the worse for the modern generations. He
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creates a contrast, which allows one to actually ponder over the huge differences, and their
potential outcomes. Thirdly, just before he ends his article, Dr. Gray feeds the relevant public
with a powerful dose of emotional manipulation. He lightly mentions, and agrees with, how
people often regard experiments involving isolated bringing up of animals as cruel. But right
after that, he hits the audience with the strong reminder that this is exactly what humans have
been doing to their progeny for ‘over the past 50-60 years’ (Gray). This leaves a strong
emotional effect on the readers, and has the potential to persuade the unconvinced. Combined
with logos and ethos, the author cleverly stimulates the desired cognitive and emotional
responses.
Gray has infused several relevant examples and evidence throughout his article.
reasonable example. The types of evidence he has used to validate his claim are various. While
proving how flawed the Chinese educational system is, he shrewdly quotes a Chinese expert
(Yong Zhao) to stress on his argument, because generally, a person, outlining the defects of a
system he/she is integrated in, has the ability to move people more strongly (Gray). In addition to
this, while pointing out how the Chinese are now attempting to improve their schooling system,
he inserts the name of the relevant report which demanded a decrease in school timings and
dependence on test scores to evaluate school performance. All this strengthens his assertion.
Then in order to advocate his stance regarding more play for young children, he uses
evidence from a different array. The examples he presents are not very difficult to understand.
He communicates instances from everyday life, which are not alien or novel to the reader’s
mind. The examples are so ubiquitous that people often tend to ignore them. By bringing in those
facts, and by drawing links between them and the advantages of children’s play, he makes the
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reader realize that all play is not meaningless. For example, he demonstrates how ‘dangerous’
play in reality is a means with which children ‘dose themselves with maximum fear’ so that later
in their lives they can ‘tolerate it without panicking’ (Gray). Also, Gray elaborates the
advantages of ‘socio-dramatic play’ which is a great tool for teaching the young how to ‘control
impulses and behave in accordance with social expectations’ (Gray). In addition to this, to
disprove the fallacious claim, regarding ‘school’ being the center of all knowledge, he reminds
the audience of Albert Einstein, a world renowned scientist, who claimed to have his ‘interest in
Lastly, as Gray contends on how the ‘dramatic decline in children’s opportunities in play’
various surveys and researches to stress on this (Gray). All of these distinct forms of evidence
contribute to add power, and grow the convincing element of his stance.
which outweighs the numbers, and the quality can only be maintained by providing sources of
the stated proof. Despite the fact that Dr. Gray has included the results of a lot of researches, he
has provided citation for only one, and that was his own. The rest of the studies and
investigations were merely quoted as ‘clinical assessment questionnaires’, ‘other research’ and
‘research using…’ (Gray). This reduces the overall credibility of the argument, since it appears
that the author is just incorporating unsubstantiated claims in an attempt to have his readers agree
with him. Instead, the author should have cited all the researches he has mentioned clearly, so
that the effect he created by building his argument using all the previously stated techniques and
Over all, the suggestion proposed by Dr. Gray is a plausible one. It is around us that we
can see the adverse effects limiting children to the confines of schools and academics, and
denying them leisure time are yielding. The sharp increase in teenage suicide rates, depression
and narcissism are testimonies of this. Dr. Gray’s argument, based on his knowledge and
expertise, has incorporated different aspects of this issue, and has also offered considerable
solutions, with benefits, for it. He has used various stylistic elements, like maintaining a
conversational tone, creating smooth flow of ideas, utilizing Aristotelian appeals, and mentioning
examples and evidence to build up on his claim. His article proves that academic pressure,
leading to lack of play opportunities, should be considered as a global issue, and concerned
institutions should come together and focus on ways to improve the current situation and make
Works Cited
Gray, Peter. “Give childhood back to children: if we want our offspring to have happy,
productive and moral lives, we must allow more time for play, not less.” (2014): web.