This I Believe​ Peer Edit Guide

Directions: Please type in this sheet using ​Blue ​or ​Red ​font. Make sure you ALSO make
at least 5 comments INSIDE the actual Essay using the Suggestion or Comment
Functions. When finished, make a copy of this to share with the writer, and please attach
a copy for your teacher and submit in Google Classroom.

Writer: ​Josh Perkin Editor: ​Caleb Fiero

Creative Title:​Death Penalty in America Type of Statement:

ESSAY
Your responsibility as Editor is to read and respond to your Partner’s Paper. Please use the
scale of 1 (worst) through 5 (best) to identify the quality of writing. Also, please make comments
to provide the writer with a valid edit for their use in a strong revision. Do your best!

Writer: Use as your guide in writing Editor: Use for comments on edit

Tell a Story: ​Is it your own? Does it tell of 1 2 ​3​ 4 5

the things you know that no one else does? Suggestions:
People can definitely learn from it but it’s not
your own story

Tell a Story: ​Does the story tie to the 1 ​2​ 3 4 5

essence of your daily life philosophy and the Suggestions: ​story doesn’t go with “the
shaping of your beliefs? essence of life” it just says the death penalty
is bad and here’s why. More depth needed

Tell a Story:​ Does the story have an 1 2 3 ​4​ 5

Anecdote or Personal Experience readers Anecdote​ _______ Personal Experience
can connect with? ____

Be Brief:​ Is it between 500-600 Words? Word Count: ​296

Be Brief:​ Can the belief be named in a Name Belief Statement: ​yes, it’s the death
sentence? penalty for a crime is bad

Be Brief: ​Does it focus on ONE core belief? Name the Core Belief: ​yes, death penalty is
bad.

Be Positive: ​Does the piece preach or 1 2 ​3​ 4 5

editorialize? Cite ​[1]

Be Positive:​ Is it about what they believe, 1 2 3 ​4​ 5

not what they DO NOT believe? (ie. I believe Cite Where: ​[2] [3] [4]
vanilla is the best. NOT I believe that
chocolate is not the best because. . .)
Be Personal: ​Is it written in words and 1 2 3 4 ​5
phrases that are comfortable for the writer to Cite Three Specific Words/Phrases: 1.
speak? (Read it aloud; does it sound like 2.
you/them?) 3.

Be Personal:​ Do the words, tone, and story 1 2 3 4 5

truly echo the writer’s belief and the way Cite Three Specific Words:1.
he/she speaks? 2.
3.

Style:​ Does the piece use stylistic elements 1​ 2 3 4 5

(such as dialogue, rhetorical questions, Cite Three Specific Examples:
metaphors/similes, muscled verbs, active Doesn’t show anything “stylistic”
voice) to enhance the quality of writing?

Sensory Experience:​ Does the writer “take 1​ 2 3 4 5

the reader there” by other senses besides Cite Three Examples: ​no senses
sight (touch, hearing, smell, taste)?

Introduction: ​Is it engaging? 1 ​2​ 3 4 5

Suggestion: ​only engaging thing is the info on
it

Interest: ​Does the piece keep you interested, 1 2 ​3​ 4 5

even if you do not agree with writer? Cite Example of Where:

Conclusion: ​Does the conclusion stick to the 1 2 3 ​4​ 5

belief and drive the point home? Suggestion: ​conclusion gets write to the point
but seems lazy

Editors Only:

Favorite Part:​ What is yours? Summarize:

The example or the little bit of info he gave on the statistics about death row and how
many people are in it

What are two things overall you thought this writer did well:
(1)​told us right away what he was thinking

(2)​the example used that states that 106 people on death row are innocent.
What are one or two suggestions for the writer:
(1)​rewrite most of the paper

(2)​add more depth to your story