LESSON DRAFTING II: COMPLETING THE DRAFT
8 Add Details
INFORMATIONAL TEXT • DESCRIPTIVE ESSAY
LEARNING OBJECTIVES
• Use features of informational text
in writing.
• Add details to informational text.
• Language Discuss writing tasks with
academic language.
MATERIALS Online
Anchor Chart W00: Elements of
Informational Text
Display and Engage 2.5b
Writer’s Notebook p. 2.8
LEARNING MINDSET:
Curiosity
Model Explain to children that it is
normal to try out different ways to
organize the details in their draft. My draft
is an early piece of writing. At this step in the
process, it is good to use my curiosity to
experiment with organizing the details,
descriptions, and examples. Sometimes I
read my draft out loud to see how it sounds.
Then I make adjustments if it sounds better a
different way. Being curious about the order
of sentences in my essay helps me write a
better essay. As you circulate the room,
encourage children to move sentences
around to experiment with flow.
TEXAS ESSENTIAL KNOWLEDGE AND SKILLS
2.1A listen actively/ask and answer questions;
2.11B(i) organize with structure; 2.11B(ii) develop idea
with specific/relevant details; 2.11C revise drafts by adding/
deleting/rearranging words, phrases, or sentences; 2.13C
identify/gather sources and information to answer questions;
2.13E demonstrate understanding of information gathered;
ENGLISH LANGUAGE PROFIENCY STANDARDS 1H
develop/expand learning strategies; 1E internalize new
basic/academic language; 3B expand/internalize initial
English vocabulary; 5G narrate/describe/explain in writing
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• As children complete their drafts, project or display Anchor Chart W00:
Elements of Informational Text and remind them that their descriptive essays
should contain these elements.
• Revisit Display and Engage 2.5b. DISPLAY AND ENGAGE
Point out descriptions, details, and
examples. Explain: When writers work
on an early draft, they revise it by adding
new details to make their writing more
interesting.
• Model how to add a detail to a draft.
THINK ALOUD First, I can go back
through my notes and chart and see if I
have another detail to add. If I need to, I
can consult another resource and make
a new note. Next, I’ll think about the
best place in my draft to put this new
detail so that it makes sense.
• Write this new detail on the board,
then read it aloud: They sell the food
right on the street! Explain that this
sentence was not in the essay in the
beginning. But, after feedback, the
writer added it to the essay. Point out
where the author added this sentence
in the essay. Read the essay without
this sentence and then with the
sentence. Discuss how adding this detail develops the idea selling food from food
carts with specific and relevant information.
Finish the Draft
• Have children continue to identify and gather resources about their topic, including
their prewriting notes, books, or the Internet. Tell them they can use these
resources to gather and identify information to help them add details to their
essays. Provide assistance with sources and information gathering as needed.
• Have children demonstrate understanding information gathered by writing a draft
of their essay on Writer’s Notebook page 2.8 or in their own notebooks.
• Have children work with partners to read their drafts and identify where they can
add more detail. Guide them to use sentence frames: I like your . I would like
to know more about . Allow children time to work on adding a new detail to
their drafts, circulating the room and offering assistance as needed.
MODERATE
INTERMEDIATE
Have children work independently to add a new detail to the draft. Then have children exchange
ENGLISH LEARNER SUPPORT: Support Editing drafts with a partner and offer feedback on the placement of the new detail.
BEGINNING
SUBSTANTIAL ADVANCED/ADVANCED HIGH
LIGHT
Encourage children to add two new details from two different sources. Have children explain
Assist children in finding information in their prewriting notes or in a new resource to use as a
new detail in their writing. Read their drafts aloud with them, and guide them to identify where why they placed each new detail where they did in their drafts.
they think the new detail should go.
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