WILLIAM Criteria Number of points total Students points and comments Thesis and Argument 30 25 William, this is a good {proper location of thesis, paper with a strong thesis and sustained argument you clearly tie most throughout paper, paper paragraphs back into one does not meander from another. However, | would thesis, paragraphs connect have liked to see more back to thesis) connegtion between Standard Oil and Amazon. Also, while the thesis is not about anti-trust per se | would have liked to see you talk more about anti-trust and why or why not it connects to Amazon, Strength of argument 30 28 The paper uses good {use of quotes, use of quotes especially ones from sources, eto) Bazos and there is good analysis of individual quotes. Werk on connecting those ideas back to the thesis of the paper. Organization 20 19 the organization is (Location of paragraphs, generally strong. I would flow, transitions between suggest you work on having paragraphs) stronger topic sentences: which will help to direct the reader. Editing (grammar, spelling, | 10 10 very nice job proper insertion of quotes, proper formatting, etc) Citation (proper use of 10 10 good work. endnotes, proper citation style, paper formatting of endnotes, citing when needed, correct number of sources) Total 100 92