Notes, Comments, Suggestions:

1. Do not append:
a. Final Minutes
b. CAS-AVR Reservation Form
c. Main Library-AVR Reservation Form

2. Look for a grammarian-Ms. Irish preferrably.

3. Put general implications on words indicated in the results (Chapter4), for the:
protagonist: vengeful
1st antagonist: wicked
2nd antagonist: vile
2nd antagonist: deceptive

4. Define Radical Feminism

5. Remove the apostrophe from the nouns “De Guzmans’ and Manlozas’” from the
second statement of the acknowledgment page
6. Align all the page numbers
7. Align all chapter numbers along with the 1st content of the T.O.C down to its very
last content.
8. Align all the CHAPTER names along with the Subheadings of each chapters
9. Indicate all the subheadings under Chapter IV
10. Avoid citations from the 1st paragraph in the Introduction. Paraphrase the whole
paragraph.
11. Paraphrase the second paragraph in the Introduction.
12. It should be Mencimer (2001), not Stephanie Mencimer’s article, remove the
word “article” and the title of the article itself.
13. Remove “ per se” in the paragraph.
14. It should be Raysond and the year he wrote such review, no need to put the
hometown of the author at the same the date he stated for it is already reflected in
the Reference page. Paraphrase Raysond’s review statement.
15. Connect the contents or the statements on the first paragraph (about Films) to the
2nd paragraph (Feminism) as well as the 2nd paragraph to the 3rd paragraph, and 3rd
paragraph to the 4th paragraph.
16. Remove the “Chair” on the Approval Sheet.
17. Paraphrase the 4th paragraph on the Introduction. Indicate “Furthermore” on the
noted sentence.
18. Revise the content of the Research Procedure. Expalin how the process of the
research was made from the beginning until the end under each subheadings.
Follow Garlitos and Buentipo’s format.
19. Remove the figure 6, Terrestrial outline of the research procedure.
20. On the Research Instrument, instead of Hannah Erpestad, it should be Erpestad
(2006). Remove as well the last sentence of the paragraph.
21. Remove the (see Women suffrage) phrase from one of the RRL paragraphs.
22. Replace “…Argon (1965), as cited by Wilson (2001)…” to “Argon (1965), cited
in Wilson (2001). Review all the other statements having the same form of the
citation explanation.
23. From the paragraph “Representations of Feminity and Masculinity”, the
beginning sentence of the 1st paragraph should be “According to Wilson……”
because he wrote the whole article. The same form goes with the other articles
written by the authors whose names were indicated at the last part of the sentences
of each last paragraphs.
24. On the journal, “Women’s Roles in World Wars” place each illustrations after
every paragraphs. Discuss some brief explanations on the illustrations.
25. Remove “Thus” on the last part of the paragraph in the article “Reflections on
Women in Films”.
26. Restate Emile Durkheim. Paraphrase the article by Ancax.
27. Replace Wilheim Reich to Reich (1945) on the subheading Character Analysis
Defined.
28. Paraphrase the Related Studies. It should be Dawal, et.al. (2006). Indicate the
findings of the researchers for every study under Related Studies…ex.:finding of
Braza, et. al., Dawal, et.al. (2006) about “Virginia Woolf’s Novels: A Study …..”
and the Viewers Perceptions on Reality TV Shows. Lacoff’s claims can be
indicated at the Theory Base and Simone’s claims indicated in the RRL.
29. The Content of the Related Studies must have the findings, similarities,
relationships of the other studies to the researchers’ present study. Compare and
contrast the present study from the other studies. Be able to relate each other’s
studies.
30. Recast the reference page, follow the APA Reference format.
31. Indicate the Formula of the Frequency Distribution in the statistical treatment.

32. On the introductory sentence of Chapter IV, remove the “findings” because it
belongs to Chapter V. It should be “This chapter discusses the results of this
study.
33. Indicate the Introductory Sentence of the 1st Subheading between the 1st
Subheading and the title of the 1st subheading’s table. Same thing goes with the
details for the 2nd subheading and the third subheading of Chapter IV.
34. For the 1st table, the title should be “Table 1 Viewer’s Perception of the Female
Protagonist”. Remove the period in beside number 1.
35. Erase all the words which contain “zero (0)” in frequency column of the table as
well as the “0” .These are not necessary.
36. For the Total Row, only “27” in figures must be indicated, do not include the
number in words.
37. For the Percentage column, all numbers should look like this: 16.0 % or 100.0%.
38. Rephrase the discussion on the 1st table. Remove the “by at least one respondent”.
39. Rankings on the most favored words indicated in the table should be from the
highest down to the lowest number of frequency.
40. Indicate the Implications on the 2nd paragraph of the discussion under Table 1.
Remove the assertion “this makes…”, replace it with “this implies that…”
41. The first paragraphs of the explanations after the tables of each subheading should
focus on the highest quency and the percentage of the word’s preferred by the
viewers, the rankings on the table.
42. Second paragraphs of each discussions must indicate the implications of the most
favored words.The third paragraph must support implications with either the
theories under the Theory base, RRL, RRS, and the movie itself.
43. Same thing goes with Chapter V from the Chapter IV format. Must have
Introductory sentence.
44. “This implies that” still instead of “This makes”.
45. The 3 Conclusions should match the three findings.
46. Recommendations should be based from the findings and conclusions suggesting
some actions to be done or things to recommend for the students, the teachers, the
administrators, for future researchers or the parents if there are any.
47. Replace “Antagonist A” to “First Antagonis”….as well as the other antagonists.