Task 1

The pie chart below show the average household expenditures in a country in
1950 and 2010.

Answer

The two pie chartsdata illustrates the spending proportion on several Commented [A1]: Mentioning the type of data can help
households (housing, food, health care, education, transportation, and other) in you to get a better mark on vocabulary aspect

average in a certain country in two different for two periods (1950 and 2010).

Overall, in 1950 the country’s highest spending was on housing while in a half
century later 2010 it changed to food. Moreover, healthcare was the lowest one
infor both years and for the rest of mentionedthe items here were up and down
across the period.
For a more detailed, look at the first chart reveals that Hhousing accounted for
72.1% in 1950 while food compromised seven times lesser respectively.
Commented [A2]: I am afraid theJ words ‘up and down’
are not appropriate to use for describing the trends since
there are only two mentioned years, which means every
feature will only experience ONE CHANGE, therefore it is
impossible for a feature to experience both UP and
DOWN.

Contrastingly, in 60 years expenditure on housing halved while it’s spending on Commented [A3]: Again, it is not clear to what does the
food significantly increased up to 34% from 11.2%. word ‘it’ refer to.

Turning to the remaining itemsWith regards to the remaining items, the country
spent approximately five times higher on other and healthcare and other to
19.2% and 14% and 19.2% respectively. In addition, there was a slightly
increase in health care, mere 2.1% to 4.5%. On the other hand, education Commented [A4]: Since the word ‘slight’ explains noun
generated 6.6% in 1950 which decreased marginally to 6.3% in 2010. ‘increase’ (indicated by the use of article ‘a’ in the
beginning), it should be in adjective form.

Note : Adjective -> explains noun

Adverb -> explains verb, adjective, or another adverb

I finished 80% of the essay in 20 minutes. However, it took 45 minutes to edited

the vocabulary and the wording. Still struggle on timing. 
Editing should only be done within 5 minutes, for both Task 1 and task 2.
Meaning, you should try to do more exercises on it.