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c li bi - hai bc nh bng bi essay

Hng dn cch t sa bi vit. Vit xong, bn c c li bi

khng?

y l mt thi quen bt buc cn phi rn luyn, nu bn

mun nng cao im Vit trong k thi IELTS. Xa hn na,
y s l mt thi quen v cng hu ch bn nn rn luyn
v mang theo trong sut cuc i.

Tuy nhin, t c v t sa bi ca mnh l mt cng vic

kh khn lc ban u; c hai bc sau y bn hy lm theo
nh:

1. Sa nhng li n gin:

Li chnh t
Chm cu v d: however ng gia cu th
nht nh phi c chm phy lin trc, du phy
lin sau (clause A; however, clause B).
Cch dng gia cc paragraph (y l cch cc
n gin ly cm tnh ca examiner)
Chia ng t s t, s nhiu

2. c li v tr li trung thc cu hi: bi vit ca bn

c din t c CHNH XC 100% bn mun ni
khng? Hy qun ht s ho nhong bng by ca
ngn t i, hy qun ht s iu v cu trc cu i.

c li on mnh vit v tr li trung thc:

Liu ngi c c b mt tp trung v cu qu di khng?
C ch no mch vn ang tri chy t ngt b mc li khng?
C ch no tha thi khng?
Nu mnh ang miu t biu th liu ngi c hay chnh mnh c hnh dung c mnh ang
miu t ci g khng?

3. Copy mt cm Ch ng - V ng ca mnh v paste vo Google UK; sau , th lt cc kt qu

tm kim xem thc s Ty h vit nh th no. Nguyn tc: bt chc 100%.

Sau hy sa li lm sao on vit ca mnh sng t nh mt tri ngi c khng cn phi hi

thm g na, h cng khng b vng mc ch no na.

Hy coi examiner l khch hng v i tc VIP ca mnh v ghi nh nhng nguyn tc sau:
VIP khng c nhiu thi gian c.

VIP cng s chng bao gi b cng ra ngi ngh xem n ca cha ni ny l g u.

Nhng...

....VIP s BT LI cc k kht khe.

V vy, hy nh nguyn tc: chnh xc, d hiu v i thng vo vn nh.

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Bi hc ct tit g | Cch dt im mt trong 3 cu

Examiner l g th sinh l ngi ct tit. Vic ca th sinh l lm sao ha kip ch g cho nhanh v gn;
vic cn tuyt i trnh l nhay i, nhay li con dao, g n khng cht, m n in ln, nhy ra m vo mt
y.

Li khuyn: Khi vit, th sinh cn din t xong mt trong nhiu nht l 3 cu. Vic ny s khin cho th
sinh trnh vic vit di, vit dai...vit di. Hn na, vic ny cng yu cu th sinh phi tm nhiu hn, m
nhiu hn th th sinh s d nng im Task Response (Tr li cu hi ca ) - mt trong bn tiu ch
chm bi IELTS Writing.

d hiu, chng ta li phn

tch cch trin khai ca mt
hc vin trong v d sau y.

bi: In some countries the

average weight of people is
increasing and their levels of
health and fitness are
decreasing. What do you
think are the causes of these
problems and what measures
could be taken to solve them?

V d v vic vit lan man (Ct mi m g khng cht)

First of all, one of the reasons to discuss is the development of fast food or convenient food. It can easily be
seen that there are many fast food stores on the high streets in Western countries. People usually choose
to go to these stores instead of cooking a healthy meal at home. The reason for it is that fast food might be
cheaper than a healthy meal with vegetables and it is also really convenient for working people who are
really busy. However, fast food has a negative effect on peoples health because it increases the .in your
body and makes them become fatter and fatter. For example, the number of people in Western countries is
higher than in Eastern and Asian countries because Asians usually have more vegetables in their meal and
there are just a few fast food stores, such as KFC and McDonald, in these countries.

Moreover, exercising might also be a reason that leads to the increase in the average weight of people.
Exercising plays a really important role in level of health and fitness because it makes people become more
active, healthier and keeps them fit. Nowadays everything has been becoming more developed, which
means people have more activities to do. This might lead to the fact that they do not have time or they
prefer to do another activity instead of exercising. (229 words)

Nhn xt v on vit trn: Th sinh dng 2 paragraphs v dng ti 11 cu v 229 t cn ngi c th

cm thy ri lon, khng bit th sinh ang nh x l phn no ca .

Cch sa ct tit g mt nht xong lun, i bn cng h x: sa, chng ta cn xem li

nm chc hi g. Sau khi c li v on vit ni trn, chng ta kt lun rng , ha ra l bn y
ang ni v cc nguyn nhn ca vic tng cn v gim st sc khe.

V di y l phng n sa, rt gn t 229 words xung cn 57 words. Hy rng, trong on sa

di y, ti s dng k thut nhc li key words trong to ra focus, khin cho ngi c khng
b mt tp trung (hy ch nhng ch in nghing).

bi: In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness
are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to
solve them?

Convenience food has been considered one of the most important causes for the increasingly popular

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overweight issue, for its high levels of calorie and cholesterols. What exacerbates the situation is the
decreasing popularity of physical activities, which is especially true to the white-collar workers who spend
most of their time sitting in the office instead of exercising. (57 words)

Nu cn thi gian, bn cng c th tham kho cch din t thng, gn, sc qua mt s bi cha di
y.

Hai cu rt xung mt cu
Bn gc: Firstly, as the cities develop, the road for getting a job is likely to become tougher and severer, the
employment market become more and more competitive. Newly graduates do not have experience that
meets the demand of employers.

Bn sa: Firstly, as the labour market gets more competitive than ever, many fresh graduates fail to meet
employers expectations and end up without a job.

Nm cu rt thnh hai cu
Bn gc: First of all, it is not easy for young people to find jobs. The growth of major city brings more job
opportunities to habitants and attracts well-training people. This makes labor market becomes more
competitive and thus young people find it difficult to have a job due to lack of experience. Newly graduates
do not have experience that meets the demand of employers. Some graduates holding bachelor degrees
have to find blue-collar jobs so as to earn their livings.

Bn sa: While the growth of cities brings about a world of employment opportunities, the ever tougher
competition leaves many young people without jobs. This means many have to accept handy or poorly paid
jobs; in many cases, what they are offered to do totally fail to match their qualifications and academic
achievements.

Tm dng thnh ba dng

Bn gc: Secondly, the society's morality in the fast growing cities is corrupting which is having bad effect
on the young generation. In those cities, where there is huge demand of foods, in order to earn more
money, some people use the decayed raw materials like died pork to make foods or use the forbidden
chemical substances to make vegetables and fruits, like durians to grow bigger, ripen faster, look and smell
better. As a result, the young living there will withdraw a lesson that to achieve our target, any price can be
paid, without a certain care about others' safety or interest, which can lead to a very bad and dangerous
effect on their characteristic building.

Bn sa: The decreased social morality in fast growing cities has direct negative effects on young people.
For example, unethical ways of doing business can be copied by young people who are desperate to find
shortcuts to success.