Draft Essay on Lego Ad

by Hoang Nguyen

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T IME SUBMIT T ED 05-NOV-2016 11:58PM WORD COUNT 1064
SUBMISSION ID 732654502 CHARACT ER COUNT 5064
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WC
collocat ions

verb t ense

verb t ense

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collocat ions WC
8

WC

9
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10

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SV

Wrong part of speech

Draft Essay on Lego Ad
GRADEMARK REPORT

FINAL GRADE GENERAL COMMENTS

Instructor

89
Good structure, ideas and development, just some
language/phrasing/wordiness

/100
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QM Awk.
Awkward:
T he expression or construction is cumbersome or dif f icult to read. Consider rewriting.

Comment 1
Which advertisement.

QM WC
Word choice error:
Sometimes choosing the correct word to express exactly what you have to say is very dif f icult
to do. Word choice errors can be the result of not paying attention to the word or trying too
hard to come up with a f ancier word when a simple one is appropriate. A thesaurus can be a
handy tool when you're trying to f ind a word that's similar to, but more accurate than, the one
you're looking up. However, it can of ten introduce more problems if you use a word thinking it
has exactly the same meaning.

QM collocations
rescue someone f rom something

QM verb tense
T he tense/voice/aspect you have chosen is not the best choice here.

Review the use of each tense (past, present, f uture); voice (active, passive); aspect (simple,
progressive, perf ect). T hen, determine what is the best combination f or this sentence.

Comment 2
 wrong transition

QM verb tense
T he tense/voice/aspect you have chosen is not the best choice here.

Review the use of each tense (past, present, f uture); voice (active, passive); aspect (simple,
progressive, perf ect). T hen, determine what is the best combination f or this sentence.

Comment 3
wrong adj. cl.

QM Awk.
Awkward:
T he expression or construction is cumbersome or dif f icult to read. Consider rewriting.

QM Awk.
Awkward:
T he expression or construction is cumbersome or dif f icult to read. Consider rewriting.

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QM Awk.
Awkward:
T he expression or construction is cumbersome or dif f icult to read. Consider rewriting.

Comment 4
wordy

Comment 5
I don't quite f ollow what you mean here.

Comment 6
instead of

Comment 7
interesting observation

QM WC
Word choice error:
Sometimes choosing the correct word to express exactly what you have to say is very dif f icult
 to do. Word choice errors can be the result of not paying attention to the word or trying too
hard to come up with a f ancier word when a simple one is appropriate. A thesaurus can be a
handy tool when you're trying to f ind a word that's similar to, but more accurate than, the one
you're looking up. However, it can of ten introduce more problems if you use a word thinking it
has exactly the same meaning.

QM collocations
rescue someone f rom something

Comment 8
navy blue

QM WC
Word choice error:
Sometimes choosing the correct word to express exactly what you have to say is very dif f icult
to do. Word choice errors can be the result of not paying attention to the word or trying too
hard to come up with a f ancier word when a simple one is appropriate. A thesaurus can be a
handy tool when you're trying to f ind a word that's similar to, but more accurate than, the one
you're looking up. However, it can of ten introduce more problems if you use a word thinking it
has exactly the same meaning.

Comment 9
interesting observation

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QM WC
Word choice error:
Sometimes choosing the correct word to express exactly what you have to say is very dif f icult
to do. Word choice errors can be the result of not paying attention to the word or trying too
hard to come up with a f ancier word when a simple one is appropriate. A thesaurus can be a
handy tool when you're trying to f ind a word that's similar to, but more accurate than, the one
you're looking up. However, it can of ten introduce more problems if you use a word thinking it
has exactly the same meaning.

Comment 10
wrong transition

Comment 11
wordy

Comment 12
wordy
 wordy

QM SV
T he subject must match its verb in number, so plural nouns, of ten ending in "s" should have a
plural verb, with no -s.

Singular and non-count nouns use singular verbs, which end in -s or -es.

QM Wrong part of speech

wrong part of speech--Analyze the rest of the sentence to identif y whether you need a noun,
adjective, verb or adverb here. You have used the incorrect part of speech.

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