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Mostpoliticiansintoday'ssocietyhavetodebateorgivetheiropiniononclimate
changeandifitisrealornot.Overall,itisasplitwherehalfofthecandidates
believethatitisanissueandothersbelieveit'samyth.Alternatefuelscouldbe
thesolutiontothatveryissue.Thecleanestandsafestenergysourcesare
hydropower,windpower,solarpowerandgeothermal.Eventually,therewontbea
winterorpolaricecapsunlesswestoppolluting.Letsstoppollutionandgogreen.

Hydropowerusesfreshwaterfromriversorlakestocreateenergy.74percentof
WashingtonStaterunsonhydropowerfromtheHudsonDam.

However,peopledidnotalwaysagreetothistypeofalternatefuelproduceras
peoplebelieveditwasdamagingtheenvironment.Thisisprovenbythefactthat
theturbinesinsideofthedamssuchastheHudsonwouldkillfishduetothesharp
bladesinside.Therearetwonewmethodsofhydropowerinsteadofusingatypical
damtopleasethepublicaboutthisissue.Diversionisoneofthesenewmethods.A
diversionusestheflowofarivertocreateelectricity.Astheflowofthewater
turnsaturbineitthensendselectricitycreatedandstoresitinanearbypower
plantorinafacilitynearby.Pumpedstoragehydropowertheothermoreefficient
methodusestheflowoftheriveraswelltocreatepower.But,itcreatesthe
energyduringthelackofpowerusage,whichmostlyoccursduringthenight.The
wateristhenpumpedintoareservoir,whichhasaturbinethatfollowsthesame
processasadiversion.Thereasonwhythismethodissoefficientisbecausemost
oftheenergythatitcreatesisnotusedandisstoreduntilanapplianceneeds
power,whileadiversionhasitspowersentimmediatelytoahomeorfacilitymaking
itsstoragenotfillupasfastanditdoesnotproduceasmuch.Thisishow
hydropowercanbeonesolutiontostoppollutionandGlobalWarming.

Windpowerusesenergybytheflowofthewind.Duetotheflowofthewind,
threebladesintheformofaturbinespincreatingasourceofenergy.Thistypeof
energyisdailyandaslongasthereisthewinditcreatesenergy.Thewind
patternsdontmatterbecausetheturbinesarealwaysmovingevenifwedontfeel
thewind.Thebladesarebuilthigheroffthegroundbecausethehigheryouareon
thegroundthewindieritis,themorewindthefastertheturbinesturnandthe
fastertheturbinesturnthemoreenergythatiscreated.WindfarmsinDenmark
create10.9millionkWhayear.Windpowerisanothergreatwaytostoppollution
andGlobalWarming.

Solarpowerusessolarraystocreateenergyfromthesun.Solarpanelsaremade
upofsiliconaconductorusedtodrawinthesolarrays.Theseraysarethen
convertedintoenergyandsentthroughwires.Thesecablessendelectricity
throughoutthebuildingthatthepanelsareattachedto.Aschoolsclassroomwas
taughthowsolarpowerworksbytheirteacherandtheymadetheirclassroom
solarpowered.TheworldsbiggestsolarfarminCaliforniacreates579MWayear.
SolarpowercouldbeanothersolutiontostoppollutionandGlobalWarming.

Geothermalpowerusesheatedwaterthatisheatedbymagmatocreate
electricity.Oncethiswaterisheateditisthensentupatube.Thetubeleadstoa
tankwherethesteamisseparatedfromthewater.Thenthesteamistakentoa
turbinewhichturnsandcreateselectricity.Finally,itissenttoastorageunitfor
thepowerordirectlytoanapplianceorbuildingthatneedspower.InSan
Francisco,Californiahasamaxcapacityof1,517MWwithacurrentcapacityof
900MWormore.GeothermalpowercouldbeasolutiontopollutionandGlobal
Warming.

Asyoucansee,hydropower,windpower,solarpowerandgeothermalareall
powerfulalternativefuelsthatcanstoppollution.Notonlyistheenergyitself
goodfortheplanetbut,theprocessusedforthesemethodsofalternativefuels
alsodoesnotuseanyfossilfuelsandisn'tharmfultotheenvironment.Stopping
GlobalWarmingisourmaingoalbyusingthesefuelsormore.Soletstryanduse
cleanandsafeenergytosaveourplanet.