IMS_Extended Definition

by Isabel Serrano

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excellent one sentence def

Beautifully written intro provides background

and importance, good.
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Can you say more about the "game" box?

Does this mean "rate of infection," for
example?
I can think of one way to make this paper even more digestible for a
general reader: describe a time this model was used. For example,
maybe mathmeticians have used it to predict epidemics of avian flu
or another disease? Your descriptions are very easy to follow, even
for a math-challenged reader.
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GRADEMARK REPORT

FINAL GRADE GENERAL COMMENTS

Instructor

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Text Comment. excellent one sentence def

Text Comment. Beautif ully written intro provides background and importance, good.

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Text Comment. Clear history and distinction of this model f rom others.

Text Comment. Can you say more about the "game" box? Does this mean "rate of
inf ection," f or example?

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Text Comment. I can think of one way to make this paper even more digestible f or a
general reader: describe a time this model was used. For example, maybe mathmeticians have
used it to predict epidemics of avian f lu or another disease? Your descriptions are very easy to
f ollow, even f or a math-challenged reader.

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