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Memorandum
This memo report will discuss the findings conducted from an analysis
of my writing in the business prose style.
I used the business prose style to analyze my research essay titled
The Problems of Global Warming, which goes into detail about the
effects Global Warming has on our environment.
The burning of many fossil fuels creates a gas that is released into the atmosphere
that is known as greenhouse gasses.
There is more carbon dioxide in soil than there is in plants, the reason being that
when the land is farmed; the carbon is released back into the atmosphere. Because
This is an example of how cutting out a phrase can help improve sentence structure.
Desertification has definitely been occurring in some parts in the world because of
climate change.
This is a perfect example of a modifier that has no purpose in this sentence, and being
removed makes the sentence sound better.
In my essay I did not find any examples where I could have replaced
there with a to be verb.
Global warming does not only affect Americans, it also has an effect on
everybody around the world. effects
This sentence contains an example of tightening the verb form to make it stronger.
Removing unnecessary words allows you to make a verb stronger and help create a more
efficient statement.
Humans are the biggest cause of climate change. Human pollution has been the
leading cause in global warming since the end of WWII. Climate change is a natural
occurrence but due to human activity the last eleven out of twelve years have been the
warmest on record since 1850. Although greenhouse gasses are the biggest cause for
earths changing atmosphere, the logging of the trees are also impacting the earths
natural balance. Logging of trees is a problem us as humans continue to contribute to.
This paragraph taken from my essay shows an example of stress emphasis. The beginning
of my paragraph introduces a topic and throughout the paragraph I explain my reasoning
about the topic.
The corals can only tolerate a certain warming of the salt water, when the water
warms too rapidly the corals start to turn a white color, and if the water doesnt cool
down the corals will eventually die
Here is an example of a sentence that is too long for the prose style. Even though this
sentence was beneficial to my research essay, in a prose style essay it would be
considered to long.
The temperature of earth on average rises five degrees, a climatic event that will
annually create problems.
This is an example of a summative modifier that helped create the right emphasis
in my research paper.
There are key things that are being affected in the marine environments.
A revision and the removal of these string prepositions will help make my sentence flow
and sound better.
In my research paper there was no information that would be considered Jargon. All the
facts and data throughout my research helped further elaborate my thesis about global
warming.
Throughout my essay I could not find any examples of breaking any of these grammar
rules. I was able to effectively avoid starting a sentence with: and or but, because, and a
preposition. Even though these are style choice, when excessively used your writing will
start to lack sentence variation. I personally believe I had strong sentence variation
throughout my research paper.
Conclusion
In conclusion, a major weakness I found in my paper was the amount of lard I had. The
amount of words and phrases I was able to remove without changing what I was saying
was quite surprising. A goal I can set for working on this would be being more straight to
the point and concise with my sentences. After analyzing my paper under the prose style I
was surprised how much my writing could be improved and look forward to applying
what I learned in my next writing assignment.