~ ERROR KEY CODE ~

PLAGARISM Not your words

GRAMMAR / AP STYLE / FACT ERROR

WIND-UP / DOING TOO MUCH Says who?

You are posing hypotheticals/trying to make/get to/talk around
a point w/o stating opinion, when a quote from a source would do!

UNATTRIBUTED FACT / OPINION / POINT OF VIEW =

ASK YOURSELF: SAYS WHO? HOW DO I KNOW THAT?
You state a fact that is not common knowledge.
Your wording expresses or adopts a point of view.
Your wording shows agreement/disagreement with the source.
You employ creative writing style and/or modifying adjectives.
You include your HOPES & DREAMS FOR A BETTER WORLD.

YOUR VOICE HIGHLIGHTING YOU Says who?

You are narrating the action OR speaking directly to the reader.
Your facts/ thoughts/analysis/conclusions = essay style.

MIND READING WWW pg. 187 & 329

How do you know what your source thinks? Believes?

AWKWARD PHRASING
Stiff or confusing wording you would never use in conversation

Vague / Unclear / Confusing / Wordy

Confusing / Wordy

ORGANIZATION
Problem with ordering of information

Michigan State University student transfers to be a PRSSA Warrior

On reflection:
Does it really matter where she came FROM?
How many people will know what PRSSA is?????

What about:

Student transfers to Wayne State to be PR Warrior

by Olivia Pearson

Twenty-three year old

We need a new sentence construction to avoid starting with her age.
Whats the MOST interesting / fascinating aspect of this student?
THATS where well start!

student, Kierra Dixon, says her transfer from Michigan State University to Wayne State University was an
led to her academic advancement.

Dixon says she is now able to focus on her studies, has noticed an improvement in her academic
performance and joined the Public Relations Student Society of America (PRSSA). < AP style @ acronyms]
all because ____________________________[insert why = complete the thought]
as a Wayne student she now lives with her parents?
she no longer has to __________________.???