Body Paragraphs

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What should your subtopics be?
Decide which notes will go with what subtopics.

What could the subtopics be for these two

paragraphs?

The hype began when Lord Carnarvon, the person who funded the dig of King Tuts
Tomb, died shortly after the discovery. The path to his death began in the spring of
1923 when he was bitten on the cheek by a mosquito. During his morning shaving
routines, he further aggravated the mosquito bite. It soon became infected and
Lord Carnarvon found himself ill. He suffered a high fever and chills. A doctor was
sent to examine him but medical attention arrived too late and Lord Carnarvon
died. At that exact moment the lights in Cairo mysteriously went out.

Once Carnarvon died the media went wild with stories of his death. They claimed
King Tut wanted vengeance and announced a mummy's curse, which targeted
those who had entered the tomb. Not only did the death of Carnarvon get all the
people in an uproar but other stories began to surface as well. Of the stories that
surfaced, two remain prominent. One of the prominent stories is that a cobra killed
Howard Carter's (explorer who discovered King Tuts burial place) pet canary after
the discovery of King Tut's tomb. The other story is that Lord Carnarvon's dog
howled and dropped dead at two in the morning when Carnarvon died.
What is in your body paragraphs? five to eight sentences
1. facts about your topic
a. a subtitle
b. a variety of information
c. a theory with evidence
d. add elaboration for every fact Elaborations
e. use writers toolbox/authors craft (5+ tools)
f. two word-for-word quotes in quotation marks
g. use transitions between ideas and paragraphs
h. you MUST CITE EVERYTHING THAT COMES FROM YOUR
RESEARCH
i. may be two-three paragraphs
Body Paragraph(s):

How did he die?

Scientists have been coming up with theories about King Tuts demise
ever since his tomb was opened. The theories include he died from a broken leg,
possibly an aneurysm, and even he was murdered (Reuters)! Research
however, has proven malaria was the cause (Reuters).

The Proof is in the Research!

T he first piece of evidence came when scientists from all over the world
came together (Reuters). They compiled results from genetic and radiological
testing performed on King Tut between 2007 and 2009 (Reuters). The data
concluded that a weakened body and a malaria infection led to his death
(Reuters). The second piece of evidence was found in scientific data that revealed
King Tuts body was weakened by many disorders (Study). The final piece of
evidence came from Egyptian scientists who studied King Tuts DNA (Roberts).
The scientists discovered the malaria parasite in his blood (Roberts). Dr Hawass
and his team said: "Seeds, fruits and leaves found in the tomb, were possibly
used as medical treatment, support this diagnosis" (Roberts). When he
contracted malaria, his already poor health could not keep up (Study: Malaria
Killed King Tut, Not Murder).

Transitions Citations

ELABORATION
What are we missing?
Lets find out more about it!
Tips for expanding on your facts with ELABORATION:
1. Play the devils advocate. Read each of your paragraphs as a skeptic, finding
every opportunity you can to ask Write your
questions in the margins or on another piece of paper, and then go back and
answer them. Add in your expanded details, as you write your paper.

Example:

Fact: The research came up with three pieces of evidence that supports
malaria as the Pharaohs demise (Reuters).

Question: What is Malaria?

Expanded details: Malaria is a serious and sometimes fatal disease caused

by a parasite that commonly infects a certain type of
mosquito which feeds on humans. People who get malaria
are typically sick with high fevers, shaking chills, and
flu-like illness (Disease).

Fact: The data concluded a weakened body and a malaria infection

led to his death (Reuters).

Question: What could cause a weakened body?

Expanded details: Science and medicine were pretty basic during Egyptian
 times. Many things that are trivial health issues to us
could have been major problems back then. Things that
could have weakened a body during this time period
include: untreated cuts and broken bones, minor infections,
poor dietary habits, and passed down genetic conditions
(Reuters).

Body Paragraphs With Elaboration:

The researchers came up with three pieces of evidence that supports malaria as the
Pharaohs demise. The first piece of evidence came when scientists from all over the world
came together. They compiled results from genetic and radiological testing performed on
King Tut between 2007 and 2009 (Reuters). The testing took three years, what a rigorous
process! The data concluded that a weakened body and a malaria infection led to his death
(Reuters). Two possible reasons for the pharaoh's weakened body may have been due to
inherited genetic conditions or poor nutrition.

The second piece of evidence came from Egyptian scientists who studied King Tuts
DNA (Roberts). The scientists discovered the malaria parasite in his blood (Roberts).
It is unclear how Tut may have contracted the parasite. The likely scenario is he was
bitten by an infected mosquito (Malaria). So, What is Malaria? Malaria is a serious
and sometimes fatal disease caused by a parasite that commonly infects a certain
type of mosquito which feeds on humans. People who get malaria are typically sick
with high fevers, shaking chills, and flu-like illness (Disease).

Further proof of a grave illness was found in the tomb by several researchers. Dr
Hawass and his team said, "Seeds, fruits, and leaves found in the tomb, were possibly used
as medical treatment, and support this diagnosis" (Roberts). Some common medicines
at the time were honey, coriander, and acacia (Egyptian Herbs, Tut). Egyptians used
plants, seeds, and fruits for all types of health problems including, migraines, skin
conditions, sore joints, and even infections (Fadl). So it was not uncommon to find these
types of remedies in a tomb.

The final piece of evidence was found in scientific data that revealed King
Tuts body was weakened by many disorders. When he contracted malaria, his already
poor health could not keep up (Study: Malaria Killed). This was one sick kid, said Emily
Teeter, an Egyptian specialist at Chicago University (Tut). But medical historian
Howard Markel, of Michigan University, points out: It makes him all the more human
and all the more fascinating (Tut).
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