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MASNAH

1. CORRELATION BETWEEN AGE AND PARITY WITH THE INCIDENCE OF


PREGNANCY AT SIAK HOSPITAL 2014
THE CORRELATION
because Correlation is a noun.
IN
because of Wrong preposition
POSTTERM PREGNANCY
because It is in the title.
AT SIAK REGIONAL PUBLIC HOSPITAL
because It is for RSUD.
IN THE YEAR OF 2014
because it is needed to complete the explanation.
2. Postterm pregnancy is a pregnancy that lasts up to 42 weeks (294 days) or more,
calculated from the first day of the last menstrual period according to the formula naegele
with an averge menstrual cycle of 28 days.
occurs up to 42 weeks (294 days) or more
because it is a fact, so we use present tense.
After the last menstrual period
because of using wrong word choice. It has different meaning if we use
preposition of.
an average menstrual cycle of 28 days
because of miss typing, not averge.
3. Pregnancy continues beyond 42 weeks has a good risk to the fetus and the mother.
The pregnancy that
because Pregnancy is a noun, and that is a conjunction.
continues more than 42 weeks
because using wrong word choices.
Has a dangerous risk for
because It is not a good risk but definitely a dangerous risk, and the choice of
preposition.
4. The research is done in the area regional siak hospital with mean for know the
relation ship age and parity with events in postterm.
This research
because The research is clearly this research, thats why we use this there.
was conducted
because the research has done by the researcher, and using wrong word choice.
In the working area of Siak Regional Public Hospital
For completing the sentence
In order to find out the relationship between age and parity in the incidence of
postterm pregnancy.
because of Using wrong word choice

5. The type of this research is quantitative analytic design with cross sectional approach,
with a sample of 92 respondents.
This research is an analytical quantitative research using cross-sectional approach
with 92 respondents as the sample.
because No long explanation needed, and also using wrong word choice.
6. The sampling technique is done by sampling random.
The sample is chosen by random sampling technique.
because No long explanation needed
7. This research was conducted by using a checklist sheet, and analysis using univariat and
bivariate analysis by chi square test and OR to determine the relationship of each of the
variables examined.
The writer used checklist sheet to collect the data, and used univariate and
bivariate analysis with chi square and OR test to analyze the data in order to find
out the relationship between each variable.
because of Using many words that will make the reader confused.
8. The result showed that there was a correlation with the incidence of gestational age
postterm with P value = 0.004 and the value OR = 4.549 and no association with the
incidence of posterm pregnancy parity with P value = 0.088 and the value of OR = 3.470.
The research findings indicated that there was a relationship between age and the
incidence of postterm pregnancy with the value of P=0.004 and OR=4.549, and
no relationship between parity and the incidence of postterm pregnancy with the
value of P=0.088 and OR=3.470.
because This sentence needs more details (crucial part of the research) and simple
explanation.
9. The conclusion of this research relationship with the incidence of gestational age
postterm with P value<0.05, and a lack of correlation with the incidence of postterm
pregnancy parity with P value>0.05.
The writer concluded that there was a relationship between age and the incidence
of postterm pregnancy with the value of P<0.05 and the absence of parity with the
value of P>0.05.
Because this is more simple that the first one or easy to understand.
10. Therefore, health personnel should provide information and counseling about the
importance of prenatal care.
The health
Because it needs article the
Counselling
Because of using wrong spelling
11. Keywords : Age and Parity of Pregnancy, Postterm Pregnancy
Age and Parity of Pregnancy Mother
Because of missing a word

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