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August 17, 2016
Analysis on good and bad story editing
Good story editing
Title: Incentives for the rich harm the poor by Roel R. Landingin, PCIJ
This 2006 story from Philippine Center for Investigative Journalisms news blog is a perfect
example of good story editing. It is the first of a two-part story about how the P13-billion tax
exemptions for the countrys duopolistic telecommunications industry takes away funding for
basic sectors. The headline catches the attention of readers by introducing the conflict between
rich and poor people while making clear that the story is economic in scope.
Underneath the headline, readers get an editorial note giving readers an overview of what they
are about to read:
Our latest report deals with how tax incentives amounting
to billions of pesos are being given to big companies that
have no need for them. It cites the P13-billion in incentives
given by the Board of Investments to telecommunications
companies putting up 3G operations, even if these companies
have decided to carry out the projects with or without
incentives.
The editorial note ends with a reason why the story is relevant at the time it was published:
The storys explanation on tax holidays as financial incentives is written in laymans terms:
Tax incentives are meant to attract and encourage investments. Yet
they are being given mostly to for high-return projects being
undertaken by big, profitable companies that practically own the
entire domestic market for their product or service. These firms have
no need for incentives to encourage them to invest.
The statistics and figures of the stories are organized in charts and tables to make it
more visual and therefore, more convenient for the readers to track down the data as
they are reading the story.
Perhaps, one limitation of the story editing is its placement on the online platform. The
story is tucked into the Business and Economy section of the PCIJ news blog. The story
won the third prize of Jaime V. Ongpin Awards for Excellence in Journalism (JVOAEJ).