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Example Candidate Responses

Cambridge IGCSE
First Language English

0500
For examination from 2015

Copyright Acknowledgements:
Paper 1:
Questions 1 & 2
Question 3
Adapted: Will Randall; Botswana Time; Abacus; 2005/6. Permissions applied for.
Adapted: Stephen Moss; Tracking wild dogs in the Okavango Delta; Guardian News & Media Ltd 2008.
Paper 3:
Question 1 Adapted: Fleur Britten; Sunday Times Style Magazine; Times Newspapers Ltd; 18 October
2009.

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Contents
Introduction ........................................................................................................................... 2
Assessment at a glance ........................................................................................................ 3
Paper 1 Reading Passages (Core) ......................................................................................... 4
Paper 2 Reading Passages (Extended) .............................................................................. 36
Paper 3 Directed Writing and Composition ......................................................................... 69

Introduction

Introduction
The main aim of this booklet is to exemplify standards for those teaching Cambridge IGCSE First Language
English (0500), and to show how different levels of candidates performance relate to the subjects
curriculum and assessment objectives.
This booklet contains a range of candidate responses to the 2015 specimen papers, which have been
marked by Cambridge examiners. For the Core Curriculum (Paper 1) candidates are eligible for grades CG
so two examples are given for each question. For Paper 2 candidates are eligible for grades AE and for
Paper 3 candidates are eligible for grades AG, so three examples are given for each question, for these
papers. Each response is accompanied by a brief commentary explaining the strengths and weaknesses of
the answers.
The following format for each paper has been adopted:

Each question is followed by an extract of the mark scheme used by examiners. This, in turn, is followed by
examples of marked candidate responses, each with an examiner comment on performance. Comments are
given to indicate where and why marks were awarded, and how additional marks could have been obtained.
In this way, it is possible to understand what candidates have done to gain their marks and what they still
have to do to improve their grades.
Past papers, examiner reports and other teacher support materials are available on Teacher Support at
http://teachers.cie.org.uk

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Assessment at a glance

Assessment at a glance

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Paper 1 Reading Passages (Core)


Introduction
The main change to this paper in the syllabus from 2015 onwards is that there are two reading passages
(although the total length of these is similar to that of the single passage in previous papers). Understanding
of Passage A is tested by the sub-questions in Question 1 (including one question testing appreciation of
the writers use of language) and the Directed Writing task (Question 2) which is now worth 10 marks for
Reading and 5 for Writing. There is also a discrete Summary question that is based on Passage B and which
is marked for both Reading and Writing. 10 marks are available for identifying key points relating to the
Summary Question 3(a), and 5 marks are available for Writing Question 3(b).
The sub-questions in Question 1 test a range of reading skills, including understanding of both explicit and
implicit meanings, knowledge of vocabulary and appreciation of a writers use of language. As always, it
is important that candidates read the passages and questions carefully before writing their answers and
ensure that they focus their responses closely on the specific requirements of each question. The final
sub-question 1(g)(ii) requires comment on how the writers choice of vocabulary achieves a particular effect
on a reader and marks are awarded for the quality of the explanation of how this is achieved (through a
consideration of the associations contained in key words and phrases) and not for a definition of a words
meaning (which has already been tested in 1(g)(i).
Question 2 tests overall understanding of Passage A and a good response should contain more than
simply a re-telling of the passage. To achieve a high Band mark, candidates should develop in detail their
response to the bullet points in the question but also ensure that the points they include are firmly grounded
in the passage. For the Summary Question it is important candidates focus their response on the details
specifically asked for in the wording of the question and avoid irrelevant or extraneous details.

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Question 1(a)

Examiner comment
This is a clear, fully explained response that was awarded both available marks. The candidate identifies the
two necessary details (i) that both boys and girls arrived similarly dressed in their neat clothes and (ii) the
boys became increasingly untidy while the girls remained looking smart. The use of own words is a clear
indication of the candidates understanding.
Mark awarded = 2 out of 2

Question 1(a)

Examiner comment
Although this response shows some straightforward understanding of the passage it is not fully focused on
the requirements of the question and fails to identify the two distinct points as it does not make clear the
initial similarity between the boys and girls is that they both arrived smartly dressed. It is important when
answering these sub-questions in Question 1 that what may seem the more obvious points in an answer
are clearly stated and not taken for granted. This response was awarded one mark.
Mark awarded = 1 out of 2

Question 1(b)

Examiner comment
The response clearly identifies both languages referred to in the passage and was awarded the one mark
available for this question.
Mark awarded = 1 out of 1

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Question 1(b)

Examiner comment
As above, this response clearly identifies both languages referred to in the passage and was awarded the
one mark available for this question.
Mark awarded = 1 out of 1

Question 1(c)(i)

Examiner comment
The response identifies the two appropriate points that the national anthem was sung with pride and the
children stood to attention. It is important to note that as this is a question testing the candidates reading
(and not writing) ability there is no penalty for the error of expression (great solemn).
Mark awarded = 1 out of 1

Question 1(c)(i)

Examiner comment
The response gained the one mark available for this question by quoting the appropriate statement that the
ceremony was conducted with a simple dignity and pride. Please note: there is no requirement for answers
to this question to be written in the candidates own words.
Mark awarded = 1 out of 1

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Question 1(c)(ii)

Examiner comment
In this response the candidate has focused closely on the wording of the question and identified two
appropriate details about the effect of the childrens singing on the writer (he was deeply involved; like
them he stood to attention) and gives a full explanation of them, using the candidates own words.
Mark awarded = 2 out of 2

Question 1(c)(ii)

Examiner comment
In this response, the candidate answers this question by lifting selectively from the passage and achieves
both available marks. Although this answer does not strictly use own words, understanding is clearly
conveyed through selecting phrases which contain appropriate information and then indicating them as two
discrete points. Such an approach is acceptable in questions of this type - in those that require explanations
of specific vocabulary usage, however, repetition of words from the passage would not be credited.
Mark awarded = 2 out of 2

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Question 1(d)

Examiner comment
Own words are used to express the candidates understanding of the two points made by the writer, about
the way in which the piano player spoilt the effect of the national anthem. Both strands of the answer (both
the volume of the piano players singing and its effect on the singing of the children) are clearly explained
and the response was awarded both available marks.
Mark awarded = 2 out of 2

Question 1(d)

Examiner comment
This is an incomplete response in which it would appear that what the writer said about the performance of
the piano player has been poorly understood. The passage states that it was the piano players singing (not
playing) that drowned out the singing of the others. One mark was awarded, however, for the second part of
the answer as the result of the piano players performance has been understood.
Mark awarded = 1 out of 2

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Question 1(e)

Examiner comment
Although the phrase profoundly fascinated is not an exact explanation of deeply impressed, it is a clear
attempt at own words from the candidate and the concluding part of the answer, explaining why the writer
was impressed, is evidence of secure understanding and justifies the award of both marks for this question.
Mark awarded = 2 out of 2

Question 1(e)

Examiner comment
This answer does not gain any marks as it does not respond precisely to the wording of the question which
requires an explanation of what the writer means by the phrase deeply impressed. Rather than supplying
such an explanation, the candidate describes the reason contained in the passage as to why the writer was
impressed, which implies that the question has not been read closely.
Mark awarded = 0 out of 2

Question 1(f)

Examiner comment
The question asks for an explanation of why the writer was surprised that the football team had played in
Ghanzi and the response focuses closely on this point and provides an answer which clearly answers this
question and gains the one mark available.
Mark awarded = 1 out of 1

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Question 1(f)

Examiner comment
This answer does not directly relate to the question which asks why the writer was surprised at the football
teams playing in Ghanzi. As it stands, the answer here does not make it clear to the marker that the
candidate has understood that the isolated area is a very long distance from the school in which the writer
will work. The answer did not gain the mark available for this question.
Mark awarded = 0 out of 1

Question 1(g)(i)

Examiner comment
Rather than attempt to provide a one word synonym for encouraging, the candidate opts for the perfectly
acceptable approach of using a longer description to exemplify the meaning of the word (the teacher was
being reassuring but also enthusiastic).
The explanation of animated is precise and clearly gains the mark.
As with the attempt to define encouraging, the candidate chooses to use a phrase rather than a single
word; although showing much interest whilst being exuberant may not be an absolute explanation of the
word, it shows more than sufficient understanding to gain the mark available.
Mark awarded = 3 out of 3

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Question 1(g)(i)

Examiner comment
The candidates statement that the word smug shows that the head teacher is proud, almost cocky,
knowing his schools abilities shows clear understanding of the vocabulary and gained the mark despite the
colloquialism (almost cocky). However, the attempted definitions of animated and enthusiastic are both
insufficiently precise for further marks to be awarded.
Mark awarded = 1 out of 3

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Question 1(g)(ii)

Examiner comment
This is one of the more challenging questions in the Core exam and this candidate does not gain full marks
here. The key word in the wording of the question is how, and although the candidates comments on all
three phrases show evidence of appreciation and understanding, none is sufficiently focused on the specific
words used by the writer to explain fully how he has produced his required effect. For example, although
the candidate identifies the word thump in the first explanation, the response does not go beyond this
to explain how the suggestions in this particular vocabulary choice capture the effect of the piano players
response to the writer, and consequently the candidate gains only one of the two available marks. The
remaining two explanations also contain similar glimmers of appreciation of the effects of the language used
but are insufficiently developed to gain more than one mark in each case.
Mark awarded = 3 out of 6

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Question 1(g)(ii)

Examiner comment
The explanation of the smug satisfaction quotation was awarded one mark because although it does not
give a definite comment of the writers use of language, overall, the answer implies an awareness of the
writers attitude towards the head teacher.
However, the explanations of the other two quotations are both lacking in focus on the requirements of the
question and tend to describe the situation the author observed, rather than making any convincing attempt
to explain how the language he uses conveys the atmosphere of enthusiasm that he is describing. No
further marks were awarded.
Mark awarded = 1 out of 6

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Passage A

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This is a Band 1 response for both the Reading and Writing elements of the question. The essay is well
organised and shows a good overall understanding of the scenario presented in the question. In the first
part of the response the candidate skilfully links points relating to the first two bullets of the rubric of the
question and this conveys a secure and holistic understanding of the writers thoughts about the school
and why he would be happy to work there. The points made are closely grounded in the original text and
developed convincingly. The response does more than simply make passing reference to the third bullet
but contains a carefully thought out paragraph in which the candidate develops fully convincing comments
as to the possible concerns the writer might have about committing himself to working in the school.
The complete response shows a full and perceptive understanding of both the stimulus passage and the
question that is being answered.
Although there is some uncertainty in the paragraph divisions, the writing, overall, communicates clearly
with more than adequate vocabulary, a range of varied sentence types and structures, and a secure use of
the full stop to separate sentences. This answer is certainly in Band 1 for Writing as it fulfils all the criteria in
the mark scheme descriptors for a Core Tier Band 1 Writing response.
Mark awarded
Reading = Band 1
Writing = Band 1

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Examiner comment Band 3/2


The response tends to re-tell the passage and is over-reliant on the language of the original. There is a
fairly consistent awareness of the writers thoughts and feelings but with only a limited attempt to develop
them. For example, the candidate refers to the way that the pupils sang the National Anthem but does not
relate this to being impressed by the patriotic pride that the pupils showed. Similarly, reference is made to
the distance travelled by the schools sports teams but the opportunity this gives for a comment on the
writers thoughts about the dedication of the schools staff is not developed. The overall impression given
by this response is that it tends simply to re-tell the events of the passage rather than focus closely on the
requirements of the question as is illustrated by the perfunctory treatment of the third bullet point. The
Reading mark for this response is Band 2/3 borderline with its comparative brevity suggesting that it would
be marked as top Band 3 rather than low Band 2. Despite the lack of paragraphing, the writing, although
limited, communicates clearly enough to be awarded a Band 2 mark for writing, although it is very much
on the Band 2/3 borderline. It is also important to bear in mind that this response is assessed on what the
candidate has written and not on the appearance of the handwriting.
Mark awarded
Reading = Band 3
Writing = Band 2

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Question 3(a)

Examiner comment
In this response each point made can be found in the mark scheme for this question and the response gains
all ten marks available. It is worth noting that this candidate does sometimes make more than one point per
line. They are credited for each point they identify on each separate line. As there are more points in the
passage than are needed for this question, the candidate is still able to achieve full marks.
Mark awarded = 10 out of 10

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Question 3(a)

Examiner comment
This response gains five marks. Although the candidate correctly identifies six points from the mark scheme
(6, 12, 4, 11, 10, 5), points six and 12 are both mentioned in the same line of the response, and therefore
only one mark was awarded. Although point 10 is not made exactly as expressed in the mark scheme, the
response shows sufficient understanding to be credited.
Mark awarded = 5 out of 10

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Question 3(b) Band 2

Examiner comment Band 2


The summary is clearly written in the candidates own words and is mainly focused on the requirements
of the task. It shows a sound understanding of both the passage and question. There are some slight
blemishes in the structure of the answer and there is also a redundant introduction which contributes to the
response exceeding the suggested word length by 15 words. For these reasons, this answer was placed in
Band 2 rather than Band 1.
Mark awarded = Band 2

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Question 3(b) Band 3

Examiner comment Band 3


Although the candidates summary contains points about wild dogs it loses focus on the question as it
progresses and contains only limited reference to the writers thoughts and feelings for the animals. The
points that it makes could be more effectively organised and at times the response becomes digressive and
verges into speculation rather than focusing on details contained in the original passage. Because of this, the
response is over-long (183 words) and is a good example of a Band 3 Writing performance.
Mark awarded = Band 3

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Paper 2 Reading Passages (Extended)


Introduction
Candidates answer three questions on two passages which may be on a similar topic. Candidates write
all their answers in the spaces provided on the question paper. Passage A will be 650750 words and
Passage B will be 550650 words in length. Candidates should spend approximately 15 minutes reading the
passages. These passages will be printed in the Reading Booklet Insert. Dictionaries may not be used.

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Examiner comment Band 2


The candidate answers all three bullets, though not equally well. A1 is not fully explained, explored or
exploited but there are a number of developed ideas elsewhere and some integration evident. Supporting
detail is used frequently. Competent reading is evidenced, though the response is not sufficiently thorough
or sustained to be considered Band 1.
The response is mainly well-structured. Some attempt at voice is evident, with some ambition in vocabulary
compensating for the very occasional borrowing from the text.
Mark awarded = Band 2
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Examiner comment Band 3


This response does not have the detail or complexity of the original, but it offers a straightforward range
of points. Opportunities for development are rarely taken, though a little reaction in A2 helps to lift the
response to the top of the band.
There is some awareness of audience to balance occasionally awkward expression. Clear, factual and
adequate explanations.
Mark awarded = Band 3

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Examiner comment Band 4


There is a reliance on lifting here and the response leans on the text throughout. This cut and paste
approach does manage to show some general grasp of the material. The answer does not however deal
with the third bullet of the question.
Fairly frequent copying from the text is evident but the perspective has been altered overall and the
response does not lack clarity. Own words are used initially.
Mark awarded = Band 4

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The response offers effect in both parts of the question. The candidate goes some way towards explaining
images, but is not unpicking them. The answer is not sufficiently precise for Band 1.
Mark awarded = Band 2
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Examiner comment Band 3


One half of the question is answered better than the other the response is better in (a) than (b). Choices
with very general effects are offered in (b). Some weak attempts at effect take the response to the top of
Band 3.
Mark awarded = Band 3

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Choices are insecure or incomplete in (a) particularly. The candidate attempts to label devices and only offers
slight, very general explanation.
Mark awarded = Band 4

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(a) Reading: Note repetition.
Mark awarded = 11 out of 15
(b) Writing: The response includes a redundant introduction but is mostly concise and clear. Own words are
used and the candidate attempts variety in vocabulary, though choices are not always successful. Focus on
the text is evident.
Mark awarded = Band 2

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Examiner comment Band 3


(a) Reading: There is some blurring of points in the suggestions offered resulting in the precise sense of
those ideas being lost at times particularly in the earlier part of the answer. Repetition of points later on
also limits the range of the answer.
Mark awarded = 8 out of 15
(b) Writing: There is occasional loss of clarity in expression, though the candidate mostly uses own words.
Mark awarded = Band 3

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(a) Reading: Incomplete sense in first and seventh points offered means they are not awarded. Some
explanations are becoming a little long but are clearly focused on the point therefore credited. There is
repetition of the apes point.
Mark awarded = 9 out of 15
(b) Writing: There is limited focus on both the task and text in this answer. The response does not offer the
candidate the opportunity to demonstrate the range of ideas or vocabulary required.
Mark awarded = Band 5

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Introduction
Candidates answer two questions, one from each section. Candidates write both their answers in the
spaces provided on the question paper. Dictionaries may not be used.

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Examiner comment Band 2


Writing: The response has an appropriate style, is coherently structured and an awareness of the audience
is shown. The writing is accurate and clear, with a few errors of sentence separation and occasionally weak
choices of vocabulary. The language used would need to be more varied and fluent for Band 1 and the
sense of audience would need to be more consistent for a higher mark.
Mark awarded = Band 2
Reading: The response shows some evidence of evaluation, especially towards the end. A good range of
the ideas in the passage and the fact file is reproduced, with some development in places. Some reference
to the specific circumstances of the child in question is made towards the end, with an attempt to consider
whether home-schooling would be appropriate. These glimpses of a more evaluative stance would need
to be extended to more of the ideas in the passage, more consistently through the response, for a mark in
Band 1.
Mark awarded = Band 2

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Examiner comment Band 3


Writing: The style is clear and competent. There is some awkwardness of expression in places and
punctuation to separate sentences is sometimes wrongly used, although there is a clear structure to the
response. More secure control of sentence structures and a more polished style is needed for a mark in the
higher band.
Mark awarded = Band 3
Reading: A reasonable range of points from the two passages is covered and presented coherently, showing
an understanding of the ideas in both. The candidate has adopted the voice of a home-schooled student,
as in the passage, and while this approach is not precluded by the task, the response tends to echo and
reproduce the points in the passage rather than evaluate the ideas. Some development of the ideas, with
more specific focus on weighing up the potential benefits and disadvantages of home-schooling, would
improve the mark here.
Mark awarded = Band 3

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Writing: The letter is clear and most sentences show some control. The language is simple and there are
basic errors of punctuation, such as the misuse of capital letters. There is some basic structure but the letter
format is not consistently adhered to. For a mark in a higher band, the sentence structures, vocabulary and
style would need to be more wide-ranging, with more secure punctuation.
Mark awarded = Band 4
Reading: A general understanding of some of ideas in the passage is shown. The coverage of points in
the passage is thin and some of the main ideas, especially those given in the fact file, are not addressed
adequately. Some points are broadly relevant to the topic but are not derived from the passage. For a higher
band mark, there would need to be a more secure focus on what the two texts say about home-schooling
and a wider range of points in them would need to be addressed.
Mark awarded = Band 4

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Content and structure: The response is sustained and organised, with a wide range of interesting images
and ideas, most of which are effective in evoking the atmosphere of a funfair. Paragraphs are used to vary
the focus of the writing and some images, such as the personification of the machinery, are sustained and
provide some cohesion for the piece as a whole. Sensual imagery is used effectively throughout. For a
higher mark in the band, a little more engagement with the details selected, perhaps through description
of particular characters in the scene described or the reaction of the narrator, would have added a more
evocative element. Stylistic devices to provide a little more cohesion overall would also have improved the
mark.
Mark awarded = Band 1
Style and accuracy: The writing is consistently fluent, with a high degree of accuracy throughout. Vocabulary
is wide-ranging and precisely used. Sentence structures are controlled, although for a higher mark, some
variation of structures, used to create specific effects, would be expected.
Mark awarded = Band 1

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Examiner comment Band 3/4


Content and structure: An attempt is made in this response to evoke the atmosphere of a carnival. There are
some engaging details and the focus on the narrators feelings and reactions is quite effective in creating the
atmosphere. There is some overall structure and the image of the carnival float as a beast is successful.
The piece lacks a clear progression of paragraphs and is brief and under-developed and these features
would need to be improved for a mark in a higher band for content and structure.
Mark awarded = Band 3
Style and accuracy: The response is mainly accurate in spelling and punctuation and there is some variety
and interest in the vocabulary. A few sentences are incomplete and sentence structures lack some variety in
structure and effectiveness. These less secure features of style would need to be addressed for a mark in a
higher band.
Mark awarded = Band 4

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Examiner comment Band 4/3


Content and structure: There is some attempt to evoke atmosphere in this response, with some focus on
the different rides and activities expected at a funfair. The sights, sounds and smells of the fair are described
with some effectiveness. Ideas are apt though often under-developed. The piece lacks some cohesion
and paragraphing is not used to provide a clear overall structure. The response would need to be more
substantial and better organised for a mark in Band 3 for content and structure.
Mark awarded = Band 4
Style and accuracy: The writing is accurate and sentences are controlled, with some effective use of
punctuation within sentences. The style is clear and competent and some vocabulary is well-chosen and
interesting. For a mark in Band 2 for style and accuracy, the range of vocabulary and sentence structures
would need to be wider and the style more consistently linguistically effective.
Mark awarded = Band 3

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Question 3(b) Band 4/3

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Examiner comment Band 4/3


Content and structure: The response creates some interest for the reader in the narrator and the situation in
the opening paragraphs. Some narrative shaping is evident, especially at the beginning, although the ending
is not prepared for and the situation is not clarified sufficiently to sustain the readers engagement. For a
mark in Band 3, the readers interest in the character and his/her predicament would need to be sustained
by more substantial narrative content and a more balanced handling of the different parts of the story.
Mark awarded = Band 4
Style and accuracy: The writing is generally clear and the style is plain but mostly accurate. Some errors in
sentence construction and separation are evident and there is a tendency to rely on repetitive structures in
places. The vocabulary is apt although fairly restricted in range. For a higher mark, the style would need to
be more varied and effective, with a wider and more interesting vocabulary.
Mark awarded = Band 3

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Question 3(b) Band 4

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Examiner comment Band 4


Content and structure: There is some overall narrative shape in the response and events are sequenced
and narrated clearly. The content of the story is simple, however, and the characters and setting are not
created credibly enough to engage the reader. The beginning and ending lack effect and the story is largely a
recording of events with limited substance. For a mark in Band 3, the narrative would need to have a clearer
focus on characterisation and the events described would need to be more credible and engaging for the
reader.
Mark awarded = Band 4
Style and accuracy: The writing is clear and accurate in places and vocabulary selected is plain but
appropriate, on the whole. Some speech punctuation is used accurately. Errors in sentence separation are
quite persistent and there are some basic punctuation errors, such as the omission of capital letters for
proper nouns. For a mark in Band 3, these weaknesses, as well as the limited range of vocabulary, would
need to be addressed.
Mark awarded = Band 4

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Question 3(b) Band 5/6

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Examiner comment Band 5/6


Content and structure: There is some simple chronological sequence of events in the response and the
narration has some partial clarity and relevance to the title. The story is not always coherent and the narrator
and his/her situation is unclear throughout. The events become increasingly indiscriminately narrated with
little sense of the narrators motivations or thoughts/feelings. For a higher mark in Band 5, the story would
need to be more clearly narrated, with some awareness of the need for overall coherence shown.
Mark awarded = Band 5
Style and accuracy: The writing is occasionally structured into sentences with a very simple clarity. There are
persistent and serious weaknesses in sentence construction, however, and the use of tenses is insecure.
These errors are sometimes so frequent and serious as to impede communication. For a mark in Band 5,
the writing would need to be coherent enough for the meaning to be followed.
Mark awarded = Band 6

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