Name: Jayson S.

Patalinghug
Subject: Creative Writing
Gold
I am shiny and beautiful
I attract the eyes of people,
They admire me for my glory
They worship me all day.
I shine under the glaring sun
A jewel that can be compared to none,
Does someone really see?
Who I am before I become me?
I was a just a dust in the mountains,
Broken, filtered, and endure pains.
I was placed in the lake of acid
The burning fire becomes my bed
I have to go through the process,
Endure all pains and from the ashes,
I rise anew - shining and glittering
Later comes in many forms like a ring
Beautiful yet soft
I am the jewel of the kings.
They call me Gold a name so bold.

Jayson Patalinghug

Analysis on Patalinghugs Poem Gold

The poet wrote the poem in free verse hidden in a form of

rhymes. It has four quatrains and one tercet. It projects the image of
shining and glittering jewel which is also the persona of the poem.
Patalinghug used simple modern words to express the thought of the
poem in serious tone. Its vision is based on the philosophy that one has
to endure pains and suffering before he / she can achieve a state of
success.
In this poem, the gold is talking to himself thinking how people
vainly look at him and worship him They admire me of my glory, they
worship me all day. The gold in this poem is reflecting on his true
nature and character Does anyone really see? Who I am before I
become me? He is questioning why those people think of him as
beautiful and proud and not thinking of what things he had been
through before he achieved his current state. He expresses the things
he experienced, the suffering and pains that he has to endure in order
to become strong, pure and beautiful I have to go through the
process, Endure all pains and from the ashes, I rise anew - shining and
glittering
Later comes in many forms like a ring
As a whole the poem is written in a non conventional manner as
a result of making three lines in the last stanza which is a deviation of
the four lines in the first four stanzas. It emphasizes more on the
content or message rather than the structure.

Poetic Vision / Theme of the poem

The poetic vision of Patalinghugs poem is based on the principle that a
certain person should undergo hard work before we savor success.
Conflict (problematic situation)
The persona in the poem gold is proud of its beauty and all the
luxury he currently have. While the people around him felt envy for the
success he is experiencing. These people speak of bad words, trying to
destroy gold. They always thought that gold is lucky to have such a
wonderful and successful life. But gold on the other hand proves
them wrong by showing / telling them what difficulty and hardship he
has gone through before he achieved his present status in life. The
conflict in this story is between one character towards other character
(man vs. man)

Firs Person point of view

1. 1st person observer
2. 1st person participant
3. Innocent eye
Third
1.
2.
3.
4.

Person point of view

Omniscient
Selective omniscient enters mind of some character only
Objective omniscient observed ht is plainly visible
Editorial record on character and comments on them

Part of story
Beginning
- Exposition
- Initial incident
Middle
- Rising action
- Climax
Ending
- Falling action

Conclusion
The Golden Elf

My father was the most powerful in the whole elven realm. He held the
power of earth; he can command the rocks and all the metals
underneath. He can make the earth shatter with his voice. I have
admired his power since I was young (not to mention that tomorrow is
my 150th birthday). I was certain before that I will inherit his power and
succeed the throne since I am the eldest in my clan. Anyway, there
were only two of us, me and Biaku my younger brother. Biaku was just
50 years younger than me, well built warrior type and has mastered
the art of magic and war. That night he had just arrived from Mount
Kun-lon where he studied basic magic and art of war. I never had the
interest in learning simple tricks and besides I will inherit the great
power of my father so, why should I bother to learn useless magic.
Father has gathered all the elders in the kingdom, and he said that he
will make a proclamation tonight; he will pass the golden jewel that
gave him great powers to his successor. He asked me and Biaku to
prepare. I was so excited.
Seryu are you prepared to be the next king my brother asked.
I have been preparing myself to become the next king my brother I
happily replied.
The moon will shine bright tonight and I am sure all the royal families
in the earthen kingdom would come, Seryu I will show you something
that I have learned while studying at Kanlaons dwelling Biaku
stepped forward and raised his hands and speaks an incantation:
Ashte Umbra luminous as he spoke these words the fire flies
gathered around sparkling like a magical light.
Circulum lashek igore, the fire flies disappeared but their light
remains encircling the two of us and then he spoke the last word:
Ishnu lashte ivo the lights were gathered on his palm forming a
bright sphere then became a wonderful crystal pendant.
My brother, please accept my gift, a pendant made from the light of
the enchanted fire flies of this forest. Biaku smiled as he handed me
his gift.
You are such a sweet magic elf. What you have learned in kanlaon is
very impressive. If I will be king, I will make you the ruler of the winged

fairies in the forest. I smiled as I took the pendant and placed it in my

ivory neck.
Masters, your father is waiting at the hall the winged elf servant
came to fetch us.
Biaku, are you ready? I asked and lead him to step on the flying leaf.
When we arrived at the hall, there was a large crowd of elves. From the
forest dwellers, to the winged elves. We sat beside the throne of the
king. Then there was a short silence and then the forest elves sang a
magical song as winged elves dancing gracefully in the air. It was
magical and after that there was a silence and the king stood and
stepped forward, and then with a loud voice he cried:
Wingardium Leviosa as he spoke those words there was a wind that
encircled the hall and there were roses and leaves everywhere.
Everybody was amazed and then the king spoke again:
It has been 1000 years since we have gained our independence from
the rest in the magical realm, and for 1000 years we have proven our
selves worthy of the freedom that we are enjoying. We cannot achieve
such peace and independence without the great power bestowed to us
by Emre, and now it is time to pass this great power to one of my sons
who will be my successor. Seryu the eldest and heir to the throne
please come and prove yourself
Father raised his hand and on top of it appears the golden jewel. I
walked towards him and I felt the strong power. I took the golden jewel
in my hand but as soon as I held it, I felt like Im burning. I cant take it,
its too powerful. I felt like I will explode. Then the golden jewel
transformed into a golden dragon and spoke:
You cannot wield my power; you have not trained yourself and learn
the basics of magic. Your body cannot control me thus you are not
worthy of me. You cannot get whatever you want by inheritance young
prince, you have to work hard on it.
The dragon flew encircling the hall and stopped in front of Biaku. You
have trained so hard and your mind is serene, your body has the
discipline and your magic has improved because of hard work, from
now on you will wield my power until you pass me to your successor
the dragon entered into Biakus body and he now hold the great power.
I do not know what to say as I look at my father disappointed and to
my brother who is now holding the greatest power in the realm. Then
Biaku came over and told me:

Dont worry my brother, I will share my wisdom and power to you, I

will train you and when the right time comes, I will pass the jewel in
your hand and you will be the king of the earthen kingdom my brother
said softly, he is still so kind and he always thinks of me. I cant say no
more, my tears just flowed in eyes.

Character okay
Setting needs to be developed