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Revision of Lesson 4 Visual Texts

Syllabus Requirements for Paper 1 Section 2
Sample Question, Examination Rubric & Marking Criteria
Elements of a Creative Piece
A Thesis for your Narrative
Homework Writing Scaffold
REVISION LESSON 4 - VISUAL TEXTS

Lets begin with a revision of the visual text questions on the photograph and feature article set for
homework. Discuss your responses and any area of concern.
Text 1: Photo
1.
What aspect of belonging can be perceived in the photo? (1 mark)
Criteria
Marks
Identifies or describes one aspect of belonging in the

photo
Possible answers
The soldiers share a bond or affinity through a common experience, adversity

A positive sense of belonging through mateship, comradeship
A unified group, connected by their humour
Men who feel a sense of belonging to a particular group, i.e. army
An historical sense of belonging, a responder being invited to connect with soldiers of the
past who are displaying their bravery
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How does the photographer use 2 visual techniques to create certain impressions of
belonging? (3 marks)
Criteria
Marks
Explains or makes known in detail how two visual

techniques create an impression of belonging
Explains or makes known in some detail how one or two

visual techniques create an impression of belonging
Explains or describes in a limited way how an impression

of belonging is created
Possible answers
3.
The body language and facial expressions of the soldiers gives the impression of mateship
and camaraderie. This is represented by arms on each others shoulders and smiling faces
The impression of belonging is achieved through proxemics. The four men have bonded for
the photo and are physically close to each other. They have shared a common experience of
personal loss caused by war
The use of black and white photography gives an historical perspective on belonging. A
responder will reflect on a past event that displays the collective bravery of the four men
The photographers use of contrast creates a sense of unity and strength in a time of
adversity. The background of what appears to be primitive and abject conditions is
juxtaposed with the good humour and positive body language of the soldiers
Explain how the visual text supports the written text. (2 marks)
Criteria
Marks
Makes known in detail how at least two visual features

support ideas in the written text
Makes known in some detail how at least one visual

feature supports ideas in the written text
Possible answers
The photo of Kylie Kwong with a happy facial expression and relaxed body language supports
the text that states she is drawn to Australias lifestyle and appreciates her environment.
Both the visual feature and text reinforce her positive sense of belonging
The background panoramic shot of the Tasmanian wilderness supports the descriptive detail
of the text. Superlatives such as physical beauty, paradise, Beautiful orange rocks and
amazing air, reinforce the image of Kylie Kwong standing happily in the environment that
she belongs
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Evaluate how effectively these TWO texts examine the relationship between identity and
belonging. (5 marks)
Criteria
Marks
Analyses and explains in detail how two texts successfully

explore the relationship between identity and belonging
Supports ideas with a variety of well-chosen textual
references from two texts
4-5
Explains in some detail how two texts are effective in

exploring the relationship between identity and belonging
Supports ideas with some textual references from both
texts
2-3
Describes how one or two texts relate to belonging in a

general sense
Supports ideas with little or no textual reference
Possible answers
Text 1
The composer successfully illustrates a sense of belonging and identity by juxtaposing an
image of four soldiers in good humour with a background image of primitive and abject
conditions. The composer has effectively captured the men in a moment of mateship despite
their adversity
The composer has effectively captured a significant historical moment by clearly identifying
the bravery of four soldiers. The personal loss caused by war is represented by the makeshift
artificial limbs and walking aids, and yet their bravery is illustrated by their bond and
collective sense of identity with arms on each others shoulders
The composers use of black and white photography provides an historical perspective on
identity and belonging. The four men obviously belong to a war from many years past and
can be identified by a contemporary responder as men who have dealt with their adversity as
a unified group

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Text 2
This text is most effective in establishing the relationship that exists between belonging and
identity. Clearly, the photograph is well supported by the text in persuading the responder
that Kylie Kwong has a strong sense of belonging to Australia as well as her cultural heritage
in China. Firstly, her dual sense of identity is conveyed in the photograph, depicting her
positive connection with the Tasmanian environment. Her smiling face and relaxed posture as
she leans against a rock with the panoramic shot of the wilderness in the background is
reinforced by the word choice in the text, including superlatives such as beautiful, amazing
and liberating.
Secondly, the article successfully explores what it is to belong and what gives people a sense
of identity. The fact that she has found a connection with two places (Australia and China)
suggests that ones identity is not just based on where you live, but how you interact within
the various environments you may encounter. Kylie Kwong has found a positive connection
and enhanced sense of who she is by accepting and understanding two diverse environments.
Her connection with Australia is established through the comfortable pose in the Tasmanian
wilderness in the photo, followed immediately by the text that states that Sydney is always a
homecoming. The incorporation of the quote It reinforced my love of eastern philosophy is
cleverly placed to then suggest she has found a comfortable sense of her cultural heritage.
SYLLABUS REQUIREMENTS FOR PAPER 1 SECTION 2

In this section of the exam you will be required to write a creative piece about the concept of
belonging. This can often be a daunting or difficult task for many students, as they dont consider
themselves creative or imaginative enough to complete a successful story. This inadequacy can be
overcome by doing a number of specific things:
Read and analyse a number of short stories that are highly regarded (like All Summer in a
Day)
Understand what elements can be used to write an engaging story
Write a series of short stories that can be proofread and appraised for their accuracy and
creativity
Have a sound understanding of the concept of belonging
This section of the exam is worth 15 marks and you should spend approximately 40 mins on the task.
Therefore, it is a good idea to ensure that your practice sessions are of equal time.

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SAMPLE QUESTION, EXAMINATION RUBRIC AND MARKING CRITERIA

SAMPLE QUESTION
The question in the exam will determine the type of response you are required to write and give
direction in terms of audience, purpose and context. Lets have a look at a typical question:
The need to belong can lead to conflict, but also unexpected benefits.
Use this statement as the basis for a narrative that would be suitable for a High School publication
on Belonging.
This question provides you with a thesis (a theme) on belonging, an audience (high school students),
a purpose (write about the positive and negative effects of belonging), and a context (a narrative).
What you will find is that the question will often allow you to explore the notion of belonging in a
wide variety of ways. This is why it is worthwhile to have the basis of a generic story on belonging
mapped out before you do the exam. You will find in most cases you can gear your ideas to the task
at hand.
EXAMINATION RUBRIC
The rubric will be written on the question page and gives you an outline of the skills you will be
marked on.
In your answer you will be assessed on how well you:
Express understanding of belonging in the context of your studies

Organise, develop and express ideas using language appropriate to audience, purpose and
context

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MARKING CRITERIA
The following criteria are a guideline for how your creative piece will be marked. Discuss each point in
terms of what they mean and require of you.
Criteria
Marks
Demonstrates excellent writing skills for the audience and purpose of

a high school publication
Displays highly developed skills in using sophisticated stylistic devices
with accuracy, originality and imagination
Maintains a consistent use of appropriate form and language features
for the text type
Explores insightfully how belonging can be conflicting as well as
beneficial
13-15
Demonstrates sound writing skills for the audience and purpose of a

high school publication
Displays well-developed skills in using stylistic devices with accuracy,
originality and imagination
Uses the appropriate form and language features for most of the task
Explores perceptively how belonging can be conflicting as well as
beneficial
10-12
Demonstrates satisfactory writing skills for the audience and purpose

of a high school publication
Displays the ability to use stylistic devices that illustrate some
imagination, but not necessarily original
Uses suitable form and language features, although lacks consistency
Explores some ideas on how belonging can be conflicting as well as
beneficial
7-9
Demonstrates inconsistent writing skills, with little recognition of

audience or purpose
Attempts to use some stylistic devices, but with limited imagination
Uses some satisfactory form and language features, but lacks
consistency
Mainly discusses belonging in general terms, with little or no
reference to conflict or benefits
4-6
Demonstrates limited writing skills, with little or no recognition of

audience or purpose
Little attempt to use stylistic devices or imagination
Uses inappropriate form and language features
Limited comprehension of belonging
1-3

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ELEMENTS IN A SHORT STORY

The essence of a successful creative piece is the ability to engage your reader. This can be achieved by
being attentive to three key aspects. The first is to incorporate a range of techniques that allow your
story to be told in a seamless and interesting manner. The second is to have a clear thesis in mind
that dictates the central theme of your story. A combination of these two aspects will go a long way
to ensuring your story will be well received. The third aspect is to practise your skills as much as
possible and continue to refine your creative piece through collaboration with teachers/tutors and
other readers.
In order to acquire the skills necessary for a successful narrative, you first need to become proficient
in utilising a range of techniques. Using an extract from All Summer in a Day as an example, lets
observe how Bradbury ensures an engaging narrative.
EXERCISE 1 READING & WRITING

Complete the following exercise by linking the technique with the appropriate example from the
extract, followed by completing the table to explain its effect. An example has been done for you.
"Now?"
"Soon.
Hook
Dialogue
"Do the scientists really know? Will it happen today, will it?"
"Look, look; see for yourself!"
Figurative language
Third person narration
The children pressed to each other like so many roses, so many weeds intermixed,
peering out for a look at the hidden sun.
It rained.
Short sentences / paragraphs
Repetition
It had been raining for seven years; thousands upon thousands of days compounded
and filled from one end to the other with rain, with the drum and gush of water, with
the sweet crystal fall of showers and the concussion of storms so heavy they were
tidal waves come over the islands. A thousand forests had been crushed under the
rain and grown up a thousand times to be crushed again. And this was the way life
was forever on the planet Venus, and this was the schoolroom of the children of the
rocket men and women who had come to a raining world to set up civilization and
live out their lives.
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Verb / adverb choice
"It's stopping, it's stopping!"

Adjectives
"Yes, yes!"
Reactions
Margot stood apart from them, from these children who could never remember a
time when there wasn't rain and rain and rain. They were all nine years old, and if
there had been a day, seven years ago, when the sun came out for an hour and
showed its face to the stunned world, they could not recall. Sometimes, at night, she
heard them stir, in remembrance, and she knew they were dreaming and
remembering gold or a yellow crayon or a coin large enough to buy the world with.
She knew they thought they remembered a warmness, like a blushing in the face, in
the body, in the arms and legs and trembling hands. But then they always awoke to
the tatting drum, the endless shaking down of clear bead necklaces upon the roof,
the walk, the gardens, the forests, and their dreams were gone.
Anecdote
Point of
view
Personification
Complete the table overleaf.

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Technique
Dialogue
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Example
Now?
Soon.
Effect
The writer begins the story with dialogue
to create a sense of immediacy. A reader
will want to know what the characters
are expecting, who and where they are,
etc.

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What we can observe in this extract is the writers ability to make the action of the story as vivid as
possible. This has been achieved through the careful sequencing of events, the appropriate
techniques, and the ability to show the reader what is happening rather than telling. For example, in
the final paragraph of the extract you would have noticed that Margot is shown to be an isolated
figure through her actions and memories, rather than telling us that Margot was different to the
other children because she could remember the sun and they couldnt. In other words, some of the
characteristics are implied by the way the character acts and thinks. Readers like to make connections
to become more involved in the narrative.
The narration is also driven by the careful selection of verbs and adverbs. These action words are
particularly important in narrative writing in painting a vivid picture for the reader. Consider the
words pressed and peering out to illustrate the sense of unity among the children; crushed to
show the effect of the rain on the landscape; and stood apart, dreaming and remembering to
establish Margots isolation.
Comparisons are also used to ensure that the action of the story is vivid. There are numerous
examples from the extract that reinforce the impressions we get from the more direct descriptions.
They include like so many roses, so many weeds, the sweet crystal fall of showers, and it showed
its face [the sun] to the stunned world.
The reactions of the characters within the extract also help us to be engaged in the story. The
sentence that begins, She knew they thought, helps us to see the events from the point of view of
the main character. Including a characters perspective enhances the third person narration.

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A THESIS FOR YOUR NARRATIVE

Having built a foundation in terms of techniques it is now important to consider a thesis for your
narrative. You need to establish a main theme that you will sustain throughout the story. Obviously,
for our purposes here, your main theme will be belonging, but you need to work out what particular
aspect you wish to consider. Of course, the question or stimulus you are given in an exam situation
will determine the theme you need to incorporate into your response, however, it is wise to have the
basis of a narrative that you can manipulate to suit the task. It is very difficult to go in totally
unprepared and be highly creative in 40 minutes, unless of course you have a great talent in this
regard. The tasks tend to be generous in this section and give you plenty of scope to incorporate
some of your preconceived ideas.
EXERCISE 2 BRAINSTORM ACTIVITY

Consider the following theses as the basis for a narrative on belonging. Select one (or one of your own
in consultation with the tutor) and brainstorm some ideas in terms of a narrative that you will develop
over the coming weeks. Discuss your ideas within the group once you have completed the activity.
The first thesis is taken from All Summer in a Day.
Possible theses:
Belonging is complex and problematic. Attempting to be part of a new group

or entering into a new environment can be daunting. An individual who
challenges a group can face fear and isolation, but it can also be restorative
and enrich the individual and the group.
Not belonging or rebelling against a societys values can be illuminating and
transformative. Despite the dangers and conflict involved in this process,
individuals can be responsible for breaking down outmoded views and
values.
Belonging to a community can place great pressure on an individual and
compel them to do things they normally wouldnt do. They can be the
possession of a community that requires them to adhere to a strict moral
code that devalues them as human beings.
Belonging to a group that respects the identity and talents of the individual
is empowering and enhances the group as a whole. It creates a dynamic
process of positive interaction and is a cause for celebration. This can only be
achieved through hard work and continuous re-evaluation of values.
What you may have noticed is that all of these lines of thought could be utilised as a thesis for the
sample question discussed earlier.
Brainstorm your ideas for a creative piece. Remember that originality and imagination are key factors
in assessing your response, so you dont have to limit yourself to real situations or people. This is
only an initial sketch; so dont be surprised if you make considerable changes as you go along.

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Elements: setting, characters, narrative stance, plot outline/rising action (linked to your thesis),
conflicts (linked to belonging or not belonging and your thesis), potential stylistic devices
(techniques), climax, resolution. However, dont go overboard with the number and complexity of
your elements, remember you will only have 40 minutes in the HSC exam to write your story that
means your story must begin and resolve itself within 4-6 hand-written pages.
Thesis:
Elements:

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HOMEWORK STREAM OF CONSCIOUSNESS WRITING

Stream of Consciousness writing refers to thoughts and feelings which flow, with no apparent logic,
through the mind of the writer. What you are attempting to do in this exercise is to write without too
much thinking and allow yourself to exercise your imagination.
Look at the following image for a few minutes and then start to write. Think about the people
depicted -who they are, what they are doing (and why), how they got there and why one of them
might be going. Describe them. Have them say something. After considering these ideas start to write.
Dont stop to think, but let the words flow out of you. It doesnt matter at this stage what you write,
the idea is to just do it. Usually after about 15-20 minutes you will find ideas/thoughts coming out
that you didnt know you had.

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Revision of Lesson 4 Visual Texts

REVISION LESSON 4 - VISUAL TEXTS

What aspect of belonging can be perceived in the photo? (1 mark)

Identifies or describes one aspect of belonging in the

The soldiers share a bond or affinity through a common experience, adversity

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Explains or makes known in detail how two visual

Explains or makes known in some detail how one or two

Explains or describes in a limited way how an impression

Makes known in detail how at least two visual features

Makes known in some detail how at least one visual

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Analyses and explains in detail how two texts successfully

Explains in some detail how two texts are effective in

Describes how one or two texts relate to belonging in a

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SYLLABUS REQUIREMENTS FOR PAPER 1 SECTION 2

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SAMPLE QUESTION, EXAMINATION RUBRIC AND MARKING CRITERIA

In your answer you will be assessed on how well you:

Express understanding of belonging in the context of your studies

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Demonstrates excellent writing skills for the audience and purpose of

Demonstrates sound writing skills for the audience and purpose of a

Demonstrates satisfactory writing skills for the audience and purpose

Demonstrates inconsistent writing skills, with little recognition of

Demonstrates limited writing skills, with little or no recognition of

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ELEMENTS IN A SHORT STORY

EXERCISE 1 READING & WRITING

Short sentences / paragraphs

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Verb / adverb choice

"It's stopping, it's stopping!"

Complete the table overleaf.

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A THESIS FOR YOUR NARRATIVE

EXERCISE 2 BRAINSTORM ACTIVITY

Belonging is complex and problematic. Attempting to be part of a new group

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HOMEWORK STREAM OF CONSCIOUSNESS WRITING

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