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AuthorIntrusion
Itsoneofthosethingsthatsometimessneakintothe
narrativewithoutthewriternoticinganditsnotuntilan
editorpointsthemoutthatyourealiseyouhavea
problem.
A LL WR IT E FICT ION
A DVICE
IsBackstoryNecessary?
CreatingLastingImages
TrustYourMemories
ReadingYourMSSOutLoud
SortingFactfromFiction
Butwhatexactlyisauthorintrusion?
Primarily,itiswheretheauthorpersonallyintrudesthe
story,quiteoftenunwittinglytheyplacealargeproportion
ofthemselveswithinthenarrative,eitherthrough
description,actionsorthroughtheircharactersand
dialogue.
Authorintrusionisverycommon.Intruth,thereisalways
atinybitofusinourcharacters,buteverycharacter
shouldbeindividualanddifferent.Andmoreimportantly,
theyshouldbeverydifferentfromthewriter.
Theykeytospottingthemistounderstandwhattheyare
andhowtheyaffectyourwriting.Thereareseveralways
intrusionhappens.
Firstly,writersveryoftenusetheirownpersonalopinions,
personalprejudices,theirjudgementsorsubconscious
thoughtsintheirwriting.Opinions,likes,dislikes,
passionsandpetpeeveshavenoplaceinfictional
writing.If,forinstance,youarevehementlyantismoking,
youmustnotletyourpersonalviewsonitpervadeyour
charactersbyhavingthemspoutantismokingviews,
(unlessyouspecificallyhaveacharacterwho,byhisor
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WE LCOME T O A LL WR IT E
Soyou'veembarkedonyour
fictionwritingjourney.
It'soneofthehardestthingsto
docreateawhole,believable
worldforotherpeopletoenjoy,
especiallyifyou'renewto
writing.It'salsooneofthe
loneliestjobs,especiallywhen
thereisnohelporadviceor
support...sorightheretherewill
behandyarticles,examplesand
simplestepbystepguidesto
helpmakethecreativeprocess
thatmucheasier.
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FA T A LE S
Thisnewdeliciouslydark
anthologyisoutnow,witha
rangeofstunningfemalewriters
toscareanddelightinequal
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hernature,isthatwayforavalidreasonconnectedwith
thestoryandonlythentheirviewsshouldnotinvade
thestory).Thisisthemostcommontypeofintrusion.
Dontlikecertainreligions?Thatsfine,butdontletyour
personalviewintoyourwritingbyhavingallyour
charactersdislikingreligion.Cantstandsport?Dontlet
yourdislikespillintoyourcharacters,theiractionsorthe
surroundingstory.
measure.Iamprivilegedto
haveeightshortstories/poems
publishedinthisbook,soifyou
likeyourdamesalittledarkand
dangerous,thisisthebookfor
you.
Remember,youarenotyourcharacters,andtheyshould
certainlybenothinglikeyou.Thatmeanshaving
charactersthatarereligiousorspiritual,ortheylove
sport,andthattheydoandthinkthingsverydifferentlyto
whatyoudo.
Neverletyourcharactersbecomeyourpersonal
mouthpiece.Ifyouhavecharactersspeakingyourdirect
opinionsandviews,thenyoullfindyourselfmoulding
othercharacterstosuit,becauseallofyourcharacters
aredefinedbyactionsandreactions.Thatmeansyoull
havecharactersrespondingtothingsthatwould,
essentially,seemoutofcharacterforthem.Andthe
momenttheystartdoingthat,youstarttolosethe
cohesionandintegrityofyourstory.
Thekindofthingsthewriterreallylovesorispassionate
aboutmightalsocreepintothecharactersheorshehas
created.Apassionforcarsmightmanifest,oraloveof
animalsetc,andthenbeforethewritercancontrolit,
charactershaveturnedintosomeonecompletelydifferent
theircreator.
FebruaryFemmesFatalesThe
Book
Writingislikebeingmarried
youhavetoworkhardat
maintaininghappinessand
equilibrium,butinvariablyone
alwaysendsupinthedog
house.
A BOUT ME
A J HUM PA GE
UNIT E DK INGDO M
Justbecauseyoumightlovedifferentthings,doesnt
meanyourcharacterswill.Thiskindofintrusionis
indulgence.
I'vebeenwritingfor
over25yearsand
startedoutinthe
Anothersortofintrusiontakestheformofknowledgeand
awarenessthekindofknowledgeonlythewriterwould
possess,notthecharacter.Thesekindsofintrusions
allowcharacterstoknowpreposterousthings,suchasa
characterhavinganintimateknowledgeofcomputer
technology,whensheismerelyanordinaryhousewife
bringingupbaby.Orperhapsalowlycabdriverthat
knowsallabouthitechweaponrybythetimeheturns
reluctantheroinchapter12.
publishingindustry.I've
publishedarticles,studyguides,
poems,flashfiction,short
storiesandanovel.Ialsowork
fulltimesoI'mALWAYS
working.
V IEW MY CO MPL ETE PR O F IL E
BLOOD OF T HE FA T HE R
Ifitsoundsridiculousandunbelievable,thenitlikelyis,
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andthereaderwillspotthisstraightaway,evenifyou
dont.Ifyoustepovertheboundariesofwhatisnormal
andlogicalwithinacharactersexperienceinrelationto
thestorythenyouriskwritingsomethingthatisneither
believablenorcredible.
HowdoyouidentifyandcontrolauthorIntrusion?
Sometimesitisdifficulttospotbecausewedontreally
lookforitwheneditingweretoobusylookingatplot
flaws,characterisation,grammar,dialogueetc,butthisis
whereeditingbecomeanimportantandintegralpartof
thewritingprocess.Youshouldlookoutforthefollowing:
Socialviewsviewsthatyouasthewriterhaveinthe
realworldfindtheirwayintothefictionalworldandhave
nobearingonthestoryorthecharacters.Thatmeans
political,religious,strongsocialviewsetc.Whenthey
becomeprevalent,thatsauthorintrusion.
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A NT HOLOGY
Knowledgeandawarenessdonthavecharactersknow
amazingthings(unlesstheyactuallyworkinajobthat
requiresspecialistknowledge)justbecauseyouarean
expertinsomething.Avoidthesameifyouhaveperiod
charactersfromasetera.Peoplein1911wontknow
aboutstuffthatyoudo.
DialogueUsingthekindofwordsandphrasingthatyou
useineverydaylife,ratherthanthecharacterwoulduse
howtheywouldtalkandreact.Makingthemyouwont
work.
IndulgenceLavishingyourknowledgeofsomethinginto
thenarrative,eventhoughitdoesntfitthestoryor
characters,likealoveofart,orbyendlesslygoingonand
onaboutyourloveoftreesforexample,butdonethrough
yourmaincharacter(whoprobablywouldntcaremuch
forecosystemsanyway).
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FalseimpressionsByhavingcharacters,usuallythe
villain,thatbecomegrosslyignorantandespecially
foolishbecauseofyourownopinionsforinstancea
blackcharacterbeingmadetoseemstupidorcriminalin
contrasttothewonderfullyangelic,Godlike,whitemain
characterrunstheriskofmakingthemhorrible,hideous
caricaturesthathavenoplaceinreality,letalonefiction.
Narrationyouaretellingastory,notpreaching,not
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teaching,notconverting.
Yourpersonalopinionsoryourpersonalagendasshould
neverfindtheirwayintoyourfiction.
Apartfromdamagingyourcredibilityasawriter,such
intrusionsarequitedistractingforreaders.Some
intrusionsmightseemdistasteful,disrespectful,outof
place,disproportionate,toomuch,andsomewhatjarring.
Theresultwillbethattheeditorwontbotherandyou
wontbepublished.Thegoldenruleofthumb:Narrate,
keepitsimpleandtellthestory.
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CreatingImmediacy
Inordertocreateimmediacy,awriterneedstounderstand
whatitmeans,howimmediacyworksandhowitimpacts
notjustthewriting,butalsothereader.
Immediacyisthedelicateandintimateconnectionbetween
thestoryandthereaderifawriterlacksimmediacywithin
thewriting,thenthereadermightnotbeabletoemotionally
connectwiththecharactersorthenarrative,andifthat
happens,thereaderisunlikelytoenjoythestory/novel.
Itisoneofthoseelementslargelyoverlookedbymany
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HowdoIcreateimmediacy?
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Immediacymeanscloseness.Inotherwords,itslookingat
October(4)
theclosenessofyourcharactersandyourstorytoyour
September(3)
reader,andhowtomakethereaderfeelasthoughtheyare
August(3)
notjustreadingyourstory,buttheyareapartofit.
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Tocreateit,youhavetounderstandthatyourreaderwants
June(5)
tobecometotallyabsorbedbythefictionalworldyouhave
May(4)
created.Theywanttobeabletolovethehero,fallinlove
withtheheroineandhatethevillain.Theywanttobeswept
upbytheemotionandaction,theywanttofeelthetension
April(4)
AuthorIntrusion
andconflict,theywanttoenjoythedescriptionsthatbring
CreatingImmediacy
placesandscenesalive.Thewantthewholethingtoleap
Takinginwritingadvicewill
helpyoubecomeabe...
offthepageatthem.
Butinordertoachieveallthat,youhavetoaccomplisha
numberofthings:
UseofConjunctions
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Characterisationfullydevelopedcharacters,completewith
flawsandfoiblesandwellresearchedbackgroundsthekind
ofcharactersthereadercanidentifywith,tohelpthereader
bondemotionallytothem.
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2011(50)
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WatertightplotAfullydevelopedplot,withsubplots,
helpstocreateacompleteandflawlessstorywithoutthe
kindofplotholesthatcanjarthereaderandputthemoff.
ConflictTheresnothinglikeconflicttogetthereaders
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attention.Everystoryshouldhaveplentyofdifferent
conflicts,becausethatinturncreatesournextitem
EmotionNostoryiscompletewithoutthis.Emotionisa
verypowerfulforceeverybodyfeelsthis,whetheritslove,
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throughtheirownemotions.Yourreadershouldfeelwhat
yourcharactersfeel.
EmpathyTiedinwithalltheaboveelements,thisiswhat
youwantyourreaderstofeel.Greatroundedcharacters,
tightplotandinterestingsubplots,fantasticstorywithlots
ofconflictandemotionallmeanthatthereaderwill
understandthecharactersjourney,theywillempathise.This
createsimmediacy.
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Viewpoint1stperson,3rdpersonetc.Firstpersonisa
greatwayofcreatingimmediacymoreintimatelythan3rd
person,itspeaksdirectlytothereader.1stperson,
however,shouldonlybeattemptedonceawriteris
experiencedandconfidentenoughtotackleanovelorlong
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storybecauseoftheverbandtenseconfusionsthatarise.
Howdoesimmediacywork?
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Itcreatesaconnectionforthereaderemotionallyand
Chapter&NovelLengths
mentally.Itsthedifferencebetweenthemlikingyour
readerwillendupdislikingyourstory.
Justhowlongshouldachapterbe?
Whatsthebestlength?And
doesanovelhavetofitintoa
setamountofwords?Theseare
justtwoo...
Inanutshell,itkeepsreadersfullyimmersedinthestory.
Flashbacks
Immediacydoesthefollowing:
Whatisaflashback?Flashbackis
oneofthoseusefultoolsthata
writercanusetoenhancea
story.Itenrichesand,ina
sense,nourish...
charactersorbeingcompletelyuninterestedanddetached
fromthem.Ifthereaderbecomesdetachedfromthestory
andthecharacters,thenthereisnoimmediacythere.The
Itcreatesemotionalattachmenttothestory
Itcreatesempathybetweenyourreaderandyour
characters
Itallowsthereadertoengagewithyourcharacterson
Subplots
anintimatelevel
Imoftenaskedbynewwriters
howsubplotsshouldevolve.
Somewritersfindsubplots
difficulttogettogripswhile
othersareputofftry...
Itcreatesasenseofbeingthererightinthethickofit
forthereader
Writersdontalwaysthinkaboutthingslikeimmediacy,but
itreallyissomethingthatwritersshouldpayattentionto,its
thedifferencebetweensomeonelikingyourstory,orhating
it,andmoreimportantly,itsthedifferencebetween
acceptanceandrejection.
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ThrillersChillers'n'Killers
It'sworthrememberingthatifaneditororagentcant
connectwithyourcharactersandstory,thenthegeneral
readingpubliccertainlywont.
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Takinginwritingadvicewillhelpyou
becomeabetterwriter
Everyoneneedsadvice,especiallywhenyouarefairlynew
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tosomething.Itsalwaysgoodtoknowthatthereissupport
andexperienceavailabletoyou.
Thosenewtowritingneedlotsofadvice,supportand
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encouragement,andthereisplentyoutthere.Theamountof
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PA GE VIE WS LA S T MONT H
almost30yearsagowhenIfirststartedout.Therewasno
suchthingandinstantaccessthroughtheinternet,since
21,564
therewasnointernet.EverythingIhavelearnedhasbeen
throughthreedecadesoftrialanderror,readingcountless
novels,gainingtheexperience,dealingwitheditorsand
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publishersandofcourse,dealingwiththatcharacterbuilding
thingcalledrejection.
GOOGLE + BA DGE
Whethertheadviceyoureceivecomesthroughwriting
magazines,throughbooks,viateachers,oreventhrough
blogarticlesetc,itisworthtakingnoteofthatadvice,
integratingitandlearningfromit.
Ofcourse,thestrengthofthatadviceisimportant,because
noteveryonewhodispensestheadviceknowswhattheyre
talkingabout,anditsvitalthatanyadviceisconstructive
andbeneficial,ratherthandestructiveorunhelpful.
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NegativeImpact
TheoneproblemInoticedisthatsometimes,writingadvice
Follow
isgivenbypeoplewhohavenoexperienceortechnical
knowledgetodoso,thereforetheadvicegivenisactually
inaccurate.Thiscanleadtoanegativeimpactonwriting,
becausethewriterwillwronglybelievetheyaredoingthe
rightthing,soitbecomesafalsehood.
Thinkaboutityouwouldntlistentosomeonetellingyou
howtheywouldperformaheartbypassiftheywerenota
qualifiedsurgeon,wouldyou?Youwantsomeonewhohas
successfulexperienceofdoingsoandhasstudiedforitover
manyyears.
So,whenadvisedtotidyyournarrativeandcutdownon
adverbs,thisnuggetofadviceispriceless.Ifyoudont,you
willhaveawful,badlywrittenanduntidynarrative,however
ifyouaretoldthatsallrubbish,andyoushouldwritewhat
youwant,howeveryouwant,thenthatsfinebutitsbad
adviceandyoufollowitatyourownperil.
Doyouthinkthatadverbsarentthatbad?
Doyouthinkthatagentsandpublishersarentbothered
aboutlackofdescription?
Showingnottellingisaloadofrubbish,right?
Characterisationdoesntmatter,really.
WhydoIneedcarewhosepointofviewitis?
Whonoticestensesanyway?
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Therealityofbadadviceisthatyoumightremain
unpublishedorunsuccessfulforaverylongtime.
Badadvicebreedsbadhabits.Itcreatesafalsehood.
PositiveImpact
Adviceistherebecauseagenerationofwritershavebeen
thereanddoneitlongbeforeus,theyhavelearnedfrom
theirmistakesandtheyhavepassedontheirwisdomtous.
Thesearethekindofpeoplewhocanhelpandsupport
fellowwritersintheirjourney,byimpartingtheirvastwealth
ofknowledgeandyearsofexperience,particularlythe
technicalsideofwriting,becausetheonethingthatmany
writersdontalwaysunderstandisthatwritingisaconstant
learningprocess,whichtakesyears(notminutes)of
apprenticeshipandhardworktounderstandandperfectthe
craftofwriting.
Writersshouldlearntotakeconstructivecriticismandadvice
fromexperiencedwriterspeoplewhohavebeenthere,
doneitandwrittenaboutit.Theirinsightwillhelpnew
writersavoidsomeofthepitfallsandmistakesthatthese
experiencedwritersmadewhentheyfirststartedout.
Positiveimpactforwritingcomesfromthefollowing:
Constructivecritiquesfromeditorsorpublishedwriters
canhelppinpointweakareas,improveyournarrative
outputandhelpyoumasterthetechnicalaspects.
Writinggroupshelpfostersupportandadvice,aslong
astheadviceisfromexperienced,publishedwriters.
Writingmagazinesandbooksonwritingarefilledwith
lotsofwellsourcedadvice,writtenbyfellowwriters
whoknoworhaveworkedwiththeindustry.
Writingcourseshelpyoulearnthecraft,taughtby
peoplewhohaveanunderstandingofcreativewriting.
Withtheincreasingpopularityofselfpublishing,thereisa
worryingtrendofinstantwriterspushingoutthekindof
workthatwouldneverpassanEnglishexam,thekindof
writersthatunwittinglymakeamockeryofthecraftof
writing.Sadly,notallwriterscanactuallywrite.
Therearealsopeoplethatalreadythinktheyknowitall
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theydontactuallythinktheyneedadviceorsupport.Ive
comeacrossplentyofnewwriterswhodismissadvice,
thinkingtheyknowbetter.Thatsfine,butsucharrogance
willonlyholdthemback.Weallneedadviceandsupport,
nomatterhowexperiencedweare.
Valuableguidanceissuchanintegralpartofanywriters
journey,becausewithoutit,wewontgroworimprove,and
wecertainlywontunderstandhowhardwritingactuallyis.
Everybodycanwritebuthowgoodyouaredependson
howmuchyouarewillingtolearn,becauseitsuptothe
individualtotakeadviceonboard,ignoreitordismissit.
Ignoresoundadviceanditmayjustbethedifferenceofyou
beingacceptedorrejectedasawriter,butalsowhetheryou
becomeabetterwriter.
Ifyouarepassionateaboutwritingandwanttowrite,then
takethetimetostudyit,gainexperiencefromitandlearn
fromthosewhovebeenthereanddoneit.Therightadvice
isinvaluable.
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UseofConjunctions
Aconjunctionreferstoawordthatconnectsorconjoinsparts
ofsentences,phrasesorclauses,andformspartofa
relationshipwithinthesentence.Therearethreebasictypes
ofconjunctions:
CoordinatingconjunctionsTheseareusedtoconnect
words,phrasesandclausesAnd,So,Yetetc.
SubordinatingconjunctionsThesejoinasubordinate
(dependent)clausetoamain(independent)clause,e.g.
Janewentwalkingoverthefields,althoughitlookedas
thoughitwouldrain.
CorrelativeconjunctionsThesecomeinpairswhichlink
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words,phrasesorclauseswithinthesentence,i.e.notonly,
butalso,justas,eitheroretc.
Aswithprepositions,andtheevershiftingtastesofpresent
dayfiction,itissometimesdesirabletohaveconjunctionsto
beginasentence,andjustaswiththecorrectuseof
prepositions,theycanaddacumulative,overalleffecttothe
narrative,dependinghowyouusethem.
Sometimesweusethemforcontrast,sometimestomakea
statement,sometimestheycanrepresentconsequenceand
sometimesweusethemtooffercontrastingideasorintent.
Theymayonlybetwoorthreeletterwords,buttheireffect
canbeconsiderable.
Butwerentwetaughtnottousethematthebeginningof
sentences?
Onceagain,itsacaseofpushingasidethedatedadvice
givenbyyourEnglishteachersaboutstartingsentenceswith
conjunctionsandprepositions,andinsteadusingbothof
thesetoolstoyouradvantage.Conjunctionshavetheability
tomakethenarrativealittlemoreinteresting,itpreventsit
frombeingflat.
Thecommononesusedare:
And
For
But
Or
Yet
So
Allofthese,forexample,mightappearlikethis:
So,theyhadliedtoherafterall.
Forthelongesttime,thesoundoftheplaneshummedabove
them.
Butnowthetableshadturned.
Orwassheimaginingit?
Yet,armedwiththetruth,herealisedtheycouldntbe
trusted.
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ByfarthemostcommonlyusedconjunctionisAnd.Not
onlyisitthemostcommon,butoneofthemostpowerful.
Butwhyshouldthisunassuminglittlewordbequiteso
influential?
Whenusedatthebeginningofasentence,itseffectis
multipliedbyhowitsused.Aswithprepositions,itsnot
justaboutwhereitsplaced,buthowitsusedandwhy.
Andisoneofthosewordsthatbringsbrevitytoasentence,
itcanbreatheasenseofatmosphereintothesentence,but
itsalsoarathereffectivewayofendingachapter,too,
becauseitmakesaneffectivestatementofintent,leading
thereaderintothenextchapter.
Comparetheeffectivenessofthesetwosentences:
Thelightswentout.
Andthenthelightswentout.
Thefirstsentenceisperfectlyacceptable.Itdescribes
exactlywhatitneedsto.Thesecondsentenceisalso
acceptable,buttheonlydifferenceisthatitaddsalittlebit
ofgravitaswiththeadditionofand.Thisadditionalso
changesthewaythereaderreadsandinterpretsthe
sentence.Itsalsoquiteeffectivejoinedwithotherwords,
likeAndsoorAndthenorAndyet.
Thefollowingexcerptisfromashortstorythattakesthe
premiseofandtoaddsomethingextratothenarrativeit
repeatsitthroughout,givingthereaderasenseofthe
passageoftime,anditscalledAndThen.
Legsmoved,andarmsandhands.Hisheadfeltsoheavy.
Theminutesevaporated.
Andthenthatstrangesensationrushedthroughhimagain
whenhetriedtomovehisheadremainedskewed.
Somethingtrickledintohisstomach,floodedhisabdomen
andhewincedagainstthesicklyeddy,triedhardnotto
vomit...
...Thentheminutesstopped.
Amidthesuffocatinginnersilence,hisfinalmoments
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vanishedintotheencroachingdarknessandhisvision
instantlyturnedintoaninfiniteblackness.
Heslumpedbackagainstthecoldtarmac.
Andthen...
Nothing.
Remember,itsnothowmanytimesyouusethemthat
makethenarrativebetter,buthowtheyareused,sothink
carefullyabouttheeffectyouwant,thestatementyoure
makingandtheintentthatyouwanttoshow.Used
effectively,conjunctionsaddthatlittlebitextraandhelp
preventflat,uninterestingnarrative.
Nextweek:Whypayingattentiontoadvicewillmakeyoua
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