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But if not the collides with one of the; the unstated and incorrect complete
thought is, He has to be the stupidest people in TV news. To smooth out this
disjointed sentence, introduce the superlative first in a complete thought, and then
retreat to the milder criticism in a following modifying phrase: He has to be if not the
stupidest person in TV news, then one of the stupidest.
Note that a comma does not follow be, because doing so would imply that two
commas are necessary to set if not the stupidest person in TV news off from the
basic sentence He has to be then one of the stupidest, and thats a faulty
grammatical analysis. This sentence is constructed from a simple if, then
foundation, so use a single comma to separate the two propositions.
4. He kept a house there as well as homes in rural Oxfordshire, England, and
Miami.
This sentence implies that the subject kept three additional homes: one in
Oxfordshire, one in England, and one in Miami. (It also incorrectly suggests that, as in
the second example above, a single adjective applies to all nouns that follow.) What
the writer meant, as we determine momentarily which is one moment too late is
that one additional residence is located in Oxfordshire, England, and another is in
Miami.
When one or more city, state or city, nation constructions are associated with a
city reference, the sentence must be revised to clarify the hierarchy of referents.
One solution is to distance the two objects with proprietary prepositions: He kept a
house there as well as homes in rural Oxfordshire, England, and in Miami. Another,
clearer choice is to do so but also place the simpler referent first: He kept a house
there as well as homes in Miami and in rural Oxfordshire, England.
5. The company was to be paid between $300 and $400 million.
This you know what I meant bungle is inoffensive but incorrect, and should be
corrected on principle because a similar but more egregiously ambiguous construction
would definitely merit revision, so why be inconsistent and excuse one but not the
other? The two figures in question are $300 million and $400 million, and for the sake
of clarity, the first instance of million should not be elided: The company was to be
paid between $300 million and $400 million.
The same principle applies if the range is separated by the word to: The company
was to be paid $300 million to $400 million. However, when the sentence does not
apply to orders of magnitude Compliance ranged from 50 to 75 percent the
operative word need not be repeated, because no ambiguity about the relation of the
first number to the second one exists.