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WRITING TASK 1 The figures below show the survey related to the adult study.

The bar chart compares why people take or continue their study and the pie diagram illustrates the proportion of costs that must be shared in every course.

It is clear that bot interesting subject and getting qualification dominate the reason adult people take the higher degree. By contrast, meeting new people become the lowest as well as to find the other jobs. The precentage of costs predominantly by individual with little different from employer.

The proportion of the people that want to continue their study because interest in subject peak at 40%. It remained at a similar level with to get qualification for their proposal which is at 38%. Follow by helping current job, prospecting for promotion, and enjoying study stand in the middle position at about 20%. On the other hand, both changing jobs and meeting people become the last choice giving motivation to catch-up their education. Beside of that, every course fee produce insignificant difference among the ways of cost to be shared. A peak of cost experience by individual at 40$, while employer and tax payer stand at 35% and 25% respectively.

Questions: 1. I rather confuse if there are two different type of chart in Writing Task one, how to combine it in each paragraph moreover when only there is little correlation between them. 2. how many paragraph should be written? If there are 4 paragraph with paragraph 3 and 4 as detailed paragraph, what is the different between 3 and 4?

Thanks a lot Mr. Adi for the answers and correction.

Writing Task 2 It is true that we rely music gives us such of spirit when we listen on it. Moreover, when what we heard is our favourite genre. Music tells us how to adore with artwork. In addition, music is not merely for adult people or prince, yet we can called it Universal.

We also need to take into consideration of the fact that globalization brings anything become possible. For instance, international singer such as Justin Bieber, Bruno Mars and so on make their own character of musics. Many people argue that international music nowdays more valuable than traditional music from their country. However, I believe that traditional music take different part in my heart. Traditional music indirectly will keep our tradition and culture. For example, when I heard javanese traditional music from my hometown abrupt I remembered a lot kind of my traditional culture like dancing, exhibition, etc. furthermore, giving more yearning within gathering time to discuss what will we do for our country in future. Beside of that, cultural music reinforces our identity that means although our tribes are variated, but we are still Indonesia.

On the other hand, we cant be denied that international music brings different colour in music and become such of benefit to listeners. Firstly, international music indirectly teach us how important to learn english. Of course, because it is the number one languange that we used. So that every people in each country can understant each other. Secondly, it will gives opportunity to a talented person especially in music to go to international and inspiring any kinds of people.

In conclusion, I would argue that the important of traditional music outweigh the international music within the reason that I have mentioned.

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