2008

Busan IDP IELTS Institute

Greg

[BEGINNERS’ ESSAY WRITING]

Essay writing basic with helpful subjects & sample answer sheets
 Contents

A. Structure step by step

1. Develop a paragraph by following the topic sentences. 3

2. Brain Storming for Body

 Brain Storming 1 4
 Brain Storming 2 5
 Brain Storming 3 6
 Brain Storming 4 7

3. Introduction of Essay
Type A 8
Type B 9
 Practice 1 10
 Practice 2 11
 Practice 3 12
 Practice 4 13

4. Conclusion 14~15
 Practices 1 to 3 16~17

5. Introduction
 General statement 18
 Thesis statement 19

B. Skills for the Writing Module – Task 2 20, 21

C. IELTS Essay Writing Checklist 22

D. Linking words or phrases 23~25

E. Essay practices with answers

 Agree / Disagree 26
 Cause & Solution 26
 Advantage & Disadvantage 27
 Compare & Contrast 27
 Answer 28~30

Appendix: Sample IELTS Writing Answer Sheets

 Task 1 Sample Sheets 31, 32
 Task 2 Sample Sheets 33, 34

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I. Structure step by step
1. Develop a paragraph by following the topic sentences.

Example

If people are allowed to carry guns, the number of murders will increase. The link between
guns and murders has been consistently proved by world crime figures. There are more people
murdered in America than in Europe, largely because guns are readily available. It stands to
reason that if people can easily obtain guns, they will use them. Therefore, the only way to
control gun-related crime is to make it extremely difficult for ordinary people to own a gun.

1. Television watching should be minimized to a certain extent if we want to live a more

meaningful and happier life.

2. There is justification for war in some cases.

3. Overpopulation in China can lead to many serious problems.

4. Computers can bring us a lot of disadvantages as well as benefits.

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2. Brain Storming for Body

1. International magazine, TV, and other media have exerted great influence on our life, and this is
a negative development.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Brain storming

Thesis statement
_______________________________________________________________________________

Body

Topic 1
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Supporting/ example
1
2
3

Topic 2
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Supporting/ example
1
2
3

Topic 3
_______________________________________________________________________________
Supporting/ example
1
2
3

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 2. It has been said: “Not everything that is learned is contained in books.” Compare and contrast
knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which
source is more important? Why?

Brain storming

Thesis statement
_______________________________________________________________________________

Body

Topic 1
_______________________________________________________________________________
Supporting/ example
1
2
3

Topic 2
_______________________________________________________________________________
Supporting/ example
1
2
3

Topic 3
_______________________________________________________________________________
Supporting/ example
1
2
3

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 3. Modern technology such as chemical fertilizers and machinery can provide us with cheap food.
However, it also has some negative effects on people‟s health. What is your opinion?

Brain storming

Thesis statement
_______________________________________________________________________________

Body

Topic 1
_______________________________________________________________________________
Supporting/ example
1
2
3

Topic 2
_______________________________________________________________________________
Supporting/ example
1
2
3

Topic 3
_______________________________________________________________________________
Supporting/ example
1
2
3

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 4. In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as
completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and
taking responsibility. What are your opinions?

Brain storming

Thesis statement
_______________________________________________________________________________

Body

Topic 1
_______________________________________________________________________________
Supporting/ example
1
2
3

Topic 2
_______________________________________________________________________________
Supporting/ example
1
2
3

Topic 3
_______________________________________________________________________________
Supporting/ example
1
2
3

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3. Introduction of Essay

- TYPE A -

Should dangerous sports be banned?

Every year, thousands of people are injured or killed in sports such as boxing or
Sentence 1
motor-racing.
Because of this, many people are opposed to such sports, and want them to be
Sentence 2
stopped or controlled.
Sentence 3 This essay will look at some of the arguments for and against banning dangerous
(Thesis) sports.

Does Aid to Poor Countries Work?

For the last fifty years, poor countries have been receiving huge sums of money
Sentence 1
from rich donor countries.
Some of this money has improved lives, while much of it has disappeared or made
Sentence 2
no difference.
Sentence 3 In this essay, I will discuss some arguments for and against foreign aid.
(Thesis)

Who should take care of our old people?

Sentence 1 In my country, most old people live happily with their children.
Sentence 2 Increasingly however, many families cannot take care of their parents.
Sentence 3 This essay will describe some of the problems involved with taking care of old
(Thesis) people, and discuss who should be responsible.

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 - TYPE B –

Does space exploration benefit mankind?

Sentence For Many people are excited about space exploration.

Sentence However, others feel it is a massive waste of money.
Against
Sentence 3 This essay will look at some of the arguments for and against space exploration.
(Thesis)

Does space exploration benefit mankind?

Space, for many people, really is the final frontier.

Sentence For
They are excited by the exploration and potential of space.
Sentence However, not everyone agrees that this money is well-spent. Many people feel that
Against we should solve problems here on earth before beginning our journey to space.
Sentence 3 This essay will look at some of the arguments for and against space exploration.
(Thesis)

Do Athletes deserve their high salaries?

Everyday, we read about new record contracts and salaries earned by sportsmen
Sentence 1
and women. Some people do not agree with these huge payments.
Sentence 2 Others believe that our sports heroes deserve every penny.
Sentence 3 This essay will look at some of the arguments for and against the high salaries of
(Thesis) athletes.

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 PRACTICE
1.
Nowadays, young people tend to rush into independence. Many of them leave home to study or
work while still in their teens. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this.

Firstly, it goes without saying that earlier independence helps young people to better understand the
people around them and the world as a whole, and to accumulate more social experiences, which
are invaluable for their future life and career. Moreover, living on their won means, to a large
degree, that young people have to face and overcome difficulties by themselves. Therefore, it may
help to mold in them a sound and unyielding character during the crucial period in which a person‟s
temperament is largely formed.

However, as there are always two sides to every coin, we cannot turn a blind eye to the unavoidable
disadvantages of early independence. First, people in their teens are generally still immature. If
they are exposed without proper protection to all the temptations and evils of society, they are more
likely to fall into a life of crime than people of the same age who still live with their parents.
Second, they are inclined to allot their time and energy inappropriate, for they may have to spend
the lion‟s share of their time earning their own living.

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 2
Scientific and technological advances have improved our daily lives. However, in many fields
scientists cannot solve the problems they have created themselves. Do you agree or disagree with
this opinion? Give your reasons.

Firstly, the creation of a new scientific and technological product is a purely academic matter, but
its application may be affected by political and military factors, and the like. For example, the
original purpose of cloning was simply scientific – to change undesirable genes at the embryo stage,
and to alleviate pain and illness. However, some people with ulterior motives may take advantage
of this technique to clone human genes. This is sure to cause serious moral uncertainty and chaos
for the human race.

Secondly, sometimes it is impossible for researchers and scientists to foresee the future application
of the product they are working on. Atomic energy is a case in point. Its study and research are
conducted with the aim of saving the world‟s limited energy resources and optimizing the use of
current energy sources, such as water. Yet people are saddened by the news that atomic technology
is used to manufacture dangerous weapons for the purpose of threatening or even destroying other
countries and innocent people.

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 3
Statistics show that cities are becoming bigger and bigger. What do you think are the causes and
possible consequences?

Firstly, the most immediate factor that has given rise to this phenomenon is the extensive use of
farming machinery, such as seeding, harvesting and grain-drying machines, in the process of the
modernization of agricultural production, which has, in turn, freed more farmers from the land to
seek better opportunities in cities. With more immigrant workers swarming into them, many cities
have been forced to expand into the neighboring countryside, so as to accommodate the swelling
population.

Secondly, an equally important factor that deserves our attention is the rapid development of public
facilities, such as shopping centres, parks and highway networks, in the course of urban progress,
which has consequently led to the fast growth of cities. With more skyscrapers rising on the
outskirts and more freeways connecting nearby towns, many cities are experiencing an exceptional
period of expansion, so as to keep pace with the increasing demands of their burgeoning
populations.

In view of the factors I have listed above, I believe that some measures should be taken so as to
rein in the situation. Otherwise, many of today‟s prosperous cities may fall victim to problems of
severe water shortage, land crisis, energy scarcity, and – even worse – a more polluted environment.

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 4
Many people believe that the zoo should be closed because it is cruel to keep animals locked up.
Moreover, the zoo does not have a positive role to play in society. Write an essay expressing your
point of view.

On the one hand, the zoo provides recreation and refreshment for fatigued urban dwellers. People
relax when appreciating an elegant swan or a playful chimpanzee. This kind of relaxation is
something that can not be obtained through modern entertainment means, such as Karaoke or
discos. It‟s purely natural sensation.

On the other hand, the zoos are important to small children. If the zoos are places of recreation of
adults, then they must be dreamlands for small children. Do you remember the first time you were
taken to a zoo? I‟m sure it was something you‟ll remember all your life. Small children learn how
to protect animals through observing them and this will also add to their knowledge something they
will never acquire in the classroom.

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4. Conclusion

Linking words
: In conclusion, To summarise, In brief, To sum up

Pattern
[Conclusion linking words, + topic sentences in body paragraph. +
Thus, / Therefore , my opinion…]

Example 1.
Vegetarianism is necessary in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people are consistently in favor of red meat, but other people are interested in becoming a
vegetarian. In fact, vegetarianism‟s several advantages influence a society to be better. In this
respect, vegetarianism should be widely spread through our society.

To start with, vegetables are good for our health. We can get vitamins and fibre from fruit and
vegetables. In addition, vegetables contain less fat than meat. For instance, in recent US study 40%
less heart disease was shown in vegetarians but the outbreak of heart disease increased by 20% to
60% in a group of people, who is in favor of red meat.

Second of all, becoming a vegetarian is regarded as the good method to protect animal‟s rights. For
instance, in UK more greater than 500 million cows are slaughtered per year. Also, raising them
with artificial food and drugs in dark sunless sheds seriously arrogate their right to live freely.

Finally, it is cheaper to eat vegetables and fruit. In Asia the price of meat is three times higher than
the price of vegetables. It is cheap to raise them compared to raising animals to eat.

In conclusion, it is well known that eating vegetables is helpful for our health. Furthermore,
to protect animal’s rights becoming vegetarian is essential and vegetable guarantee the price
competitiveness with a variety of nutrients. Thus, I totally believe that people should become
a vegetarian.

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 Sample 2

Body

First of all, students are likely to miss some chances to learn essential but unattractive knowledge if
they have only home schooling instead of traditional schooling. In other words, schools provide
diverse subjects with properly divided class time for students regardless of students‟ will. However,
students with home schooling can avoid some subject that they don‟t want to learn although the
subjects are essential and significant in their curriculum. It means that home schooling might cause
partial or learning education but for appropriate control.

In addition, children could have difficulties in their socialization unless they go to school. The main
functions of traditional schooling are not only giving knowledge but also socializing students.
Though some of parents overlook its importance, socialization is one of the most essential parts in
their future social life, where interpersonal relationships can have influence on their business. If
students study at home, they are unlikely to experience and learn socialization.

Conclusion

To sum up, I am opposed to the view that students should study on the Internet at home instead of
going to school. My objection is based on two main reasons. One is a chance of neglecting
important but unattractive knowledge for students‟ future; the other is difficulty in their
socialization.

Read carefully the body paragraphs and rewrite the conclusion paragraph.

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 PRACTICE

1. The advantages of using mobile phones outweigh the disadvantages of using it?

Body:

To begin with, using mobile phones can cause some serious interference, which can be a risk for
particular people. For instance, when operating, a mobile phone near medical equipment can cause the
equipment to malfunction, this puts patients at risk. Moreover, the malfunction of aviation system in
airplanes can cause serious disaster.

However, it is tangible that mobile phones help people live better lives. For example, in Korea
mobile phones contain a location trace system. It can help Korean parents find their lost children. In
addition, people don‟t have to try to find a public telephone booth when they have a medical emergency.

Conclusion:

In conclusion,

2. A healthy person is often described as someone who has a good diet, gets lots of exercise, and
avoids stress. What do people do to stay healthy in your country?

Body:

In the first place, most Koreans are willing to become vegetarians for their health. In fact, it is easy
for Koreans to become a vegetarian because their typical meal is made of vegetables. Obviously, it is
readily affordable to insist that the Korean typical meal, which consists of a variety of vegetables is a
sort of main cause of keeping Koreans healthy.

Second of all, Koreans consider the advice of doctors as essential. For instance, in a recent survey the
majority of Koreans preferred to consult their health with doctors regularly. Interestingly, more than half
of them tended to think that they can become healthy by following the doctors‟ suggestions.

Last but not least, the government‟s effort makes citizens healthy in Korea. To illustrate, a regular
complex health examination for citizens has been conducted over the past 7 years to improve people‟s
health. The government in particular has invested 20 billion won‟s worth of budget in building public
health care centres for their people. It results in the significant enhancement of people‟s health.

Conclusion:

In conclusion,

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 3. People should be encouraged to use public transport due to the serious traffic congestion on our
roads. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Body:

First of all, it‟s possible to reduce the number of cars on the roads by public transport‟s capacity of
commuters. A recent study, for instance showed that if public transport is used by 60% of commuters,
the unfavorable traffic condition to drivers on the roads will happen less than half as often as now.

In the second place, it is obvious that exclusive roads only for public transportation would reduce
traffic congestion. In fact, nobody wants to be stuck in a car in the middle of road, so there will be no
doubt that people are in favor of using public transport instead of using their own car when public
transport gives them a fast way to commute like running on exclusive roads for public transport.

Conclusion:

In conclusion,

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5. Introduction

General Statement

often
claimed/suggested
widely
It is argued/maintained/felt that ….
generally
/believe/held/alleged

claim/suggest/argue/feel/think/that….
maintain/believe/point out/agree/hold that….
some/many/
advocate (+ing/noun)/support the view that….
most people/experts/
oppose the view that ….
scientists/sceptics/
in favour of /against…
critics
are of the opinion that/convinced that…
opposed to …

One (very convincing) point/argument in favour of … / against…,

A further common criticism of … / It could be argued that …,
Over the past few decades, + present P.P (지난 몇세기 동안 ~)
It doesn’t take a rocket scientists to work out that ~
(~을 밝히는데 로켓과학자 까지 필요 없다)
Some have begun to argue that~
In contemporary society, ~ (생활관련)
~depends on private tastes.
 Whether to prefer working by hand or with machines depends on private tastes.

It has long been a controversy whether~

There seems little doubt that~
 There seems little doubt that science is important because science gives us
necessities. However, history is also important that on the ground that history helps
us understand ourselves.

~ could be a controversial issue.

 Whether a university should spend the same amount of money in students‟ sports
activities as on their libraries could be a controversial issue.

속담을 서론에서 쓰는 방법
There is a saying that ~
There is a saying that years know better than books, which means that knowledge from experience
is more important than that from books.

An old saying goes that ~

It has been said that when in Rome, do as the Romans do. The popular proverb means that people
should follow its customs in a new nation.

As the saying goes, ~

As the saying goes, “clothes make the man”, clothes can have great influences on people‟s action.

반대의견
Some people might say that it is better to 반대의견 because ~ 이유,
 Some of the people contend that children should start to study in a school from a
very early age because of having the habit of study.
Whereas others might argue(select, choose) that 다른의견 since ~

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 Thesis statement

I (dis)agree with the statement (idea) that ~ because A and B.

-in my opinion, / From my point of view, S+V because A and B.

-Nevertheless, I think that ~ since it ~ that ~ .

- I think (prefer, have), however, S+V in that(because, since)~.

I have two ways of ~ ing: A and B because ~.

I prefer to choose two traits: A and B because ~.

Since ~, I would rather~ because A and B.

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II. Skills for the Writing Module – Task 2
All too often students begin planning or even writing their answers in the IELTS Writing Module before they
understand what is actually expected of them. Following the steps below will help you to plan a well-
structured and coherent essay or report that addresses the given task.

1. Preparation
You may wish to spend about 5~7 minutes working out exactly what you are going to do. There are five
steps to consider.
 Study the question carefully. Most task statements or questions have a key instructional word
or words telling you what to do. Note these words with a highlighting pen.
There are also key topic words that point to the most important parts of the question.
Underline those words too. Ask yourself how the key words relate to the given instruction.
 Think carefully about the topic. How do you feel about it?
 Establish a point of view and list some points for development. The answer normally takes the
form of a short essay. The word „essay‟ comes from the French verb essayer, which means „to
attempt or try out‟ or „to test‟. In an IELTS Writing Module Task 2 answer, your purpose is to
develop your point of view in a convincing way.
 Decide which points will be written as topic sentences. Think about how they will develop
into paragraphs.
 Ensure that your points are arranged in a logical order.

2. Writing
When you are writing a Task 2 answer, a structure based on the following elements could be used
(summarized in the flow chart opposite).

Introductory paragraph
The introduction of a Task 2 answer should begin with a general statement or idea of your own that
takes into account the key topic words or their synonyms. The last sentence of the introduction should
include a thesis statement, which shows the point of view or direction that will be taken in the answer.

Body paragraphs
Body paragraphs each consist of several sentences that are arranged in a logical way to develop a main
idea. You can expect to write about 2~4 body paragraphs for a Task 2 answer. Each of these contains an
appropriate connective word to ensure a smooth transition between paragraphs. This connective is then
put in a topic sentence, which is the main point of the paragraph clearly stated in a sentence. Every
sentence in the paragraph must be directly related to it. Try to develop every paragraph adequately. This
may be done through the use of examples, explanations, detail, logical inference, cause and effect, or
making comparisons or contrasts. There are many different ways to organize your ideas for body
paragraphs. Be confident of the ideas you choose.

The conclusion
A good conclusion serves several purposes:
It indicates the end of your essay.
It gives your final thoughts and assessments on the essay subject.
It weighs up the points in your essay and should strengthen your thesis statement.

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 Do not simply repeat your opening paragraph. This appears mechanical and superficial.

INTRODUCTION
 General statement
 Thesis statement

BODY PARAGRAPH 1
Topic sentence including connective word
 First supporting sentence
 Second supporting sentence
 Third supporting sentence

BODY PARAGRAPH 2

BODY PARAGRAPH 3

FURTHER BODY PARAGRAPHS

CONCLUSION
 Final assessment with concluding connective

3. Editing (about 3~5 minutes)

In the last few minutes you should check for obvious errors, such as spelling or grammatical errors.
Be sure that you have written what you intended and that there are no important ideas missing.
Study the checklist for editing. It lists points to think about when checking your essay. Become
familiar with the list so that you will know what to check for in the actual IELTS Writing Module.

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III. IELTS Essay Writing Checklist

1) Does the essay have an introductory paragraph?

2) Does it have a clear thesis statement? Please underline it.

3) Does each body paragraph start with a topic sentence? Please underline them.

4) Do the topic sentences relate to the thesis statement?

5) Are there enough examples/supporting points to support the topic sentence? Please number them.

6) Does each sentence in the body paragraph relate to the topic sentence? If not, please remove
them.

7) Does the essay use a variety of transitional expressions within paragraphs? Please underline
them.

8) Does the essay use a variety of transitional expressions between paragraphs? Please underline
them.

9) Does the essay have a conclusion paragraph?

10) Does the conclusion paragraph restate the thesis statement and/or the main points of the essay?
Please underline it.

11) Does the conclusion paragraph offer a solution/suggestion/conclusion?

12) Did the essay make sense? Was it easy to follow? Or was it confusing?

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IV. Linking words or phrases
Personal opinion
In my opinion, / In my view, / To my mind, / To my way of thinking,/
Personally I believe that / It strikes me that / I feel very strongly that /
Linking word
I am inclined to believe that / It seems to me that / As far as I am concerned, /
I think that the world would be much better place without nuclear power.

To list advantages
One advantage of / Another advantage of / One other advantage of / A further advantage
Linking word of / The main advantage of / The greatest advantage of / The first advantage of travelling
to work by bicycle is that it is cheap; you don‟t have to pay for fuel.

To list disadvantages
One disadvantage of / Another disadvantage of / One other disadvantage of / A further
disadvantage of / The main disadvantage of / The greatest disadvantage of / The first
Linking word
disadvantage of traveling to work by bicycle is that you have no protection from the
wind or rain.

To express effect
He passed his exams; thus, / therefore, / so / consequently, / as a result, / as a
Linking word
consequence, / for this reason, / he was able to go to university.

To express reality
It is a fact that / In effect, / In fact, / As a matter of fact, / The fact of the matter is (that) /
Linking word Actually, / In practice, / Indeed, / To tell you the truth, a crash helmet would be quite
useless in the event of a serious motorcycle accident.

To make contrast point

It may be said / argued / claimed
that , ……..
On the other hand, however,
Others/ many people Oppose this viewpoint (strongly)
still, yet, but, nonetheless,
disagree ……..,
nevertheless, even so,
Claim/feel/believe this argument is
incorrect/ misguided
Opponents of ….. argue / believe / claim that…..
The fact that …. Contradicts the belief / idea that …
While it is true to say that … , in fact …
While / Although …… , it cannot be denied that ….
Although, though, even though, while, whilst, whereas, despite / in spite of (the fact
that), regardless of the fact that, yet, however, nevertheless, but, as the same time, even
Linking word so, still, nonetheless, regardless of the fact that, / on the other hand, / on the contrary, / by
comparison, / where, / compared to , / up against, / balanced against, / vis a vis, /
conversely, / mean while, / after all, / although this may be true, By way of contrast

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Reason & result
Due to / on account of / owing to / because of
He failed his exam [ due to / on account of / owing to / because of ] his lack of revision.
Reason for
The police asked him his reason for speeding through the town.
Prompt Sb to
A persistent cough prompted him to seek professional medical help.
With the aim of
Linking word She started haranguing the crowd with the aim of starting a riot.
In order to
He spend the whole weekend revising in order to pass his exams.
So as not to
They came in quietly so as not to wake anyone.
As a consequence
He failed to send off his application form and as a consequence was unable to enroll for
the course.

To prove
Because, / for, / since, / for the same reason, / obviously, / evidently, / furthermore,
Linking word
moreover, beside, / indeed, / in fact, / in addition, / in any case, / that is

To show exception
Yet, / still, / however, / nevertheless, / in spite of, / despite, / of course, / once in a while,
Linking word
/ sometimes

To show time
Immediately, / thereafter, soon, / after a few hours, / finally, / then, / later, / previously, /
Linking word
formerly, / next, / and then

To repeat
Linking word In brief, / as I have said, / as I have noted, / as has been noted,

To emphasize
Definitely, / extremely, / obviously, / in fact, / indeed, / in any case, / absolutely, /
positively, / naturally, / surprisingly, / always, / forever, / perennially, / eternally, / never, /
Linking word
emphatically, unquestionably, / without a doubt, / certainly, / undeniably, / without
reservation

To give an example
For example, / for instance, / in this case, / in another case, / on this occasion, / in this
Linking word
situation, / the case of, / to demonstrate, / to illustrate, / as an illustration, / to illustrate

To summarize or conclude
In brief, / on the whole, summing up, / to conclude, / in conclusion, / as I have shown, /
Linking word as I have hence, / therefore, / accordingly, / thus, / as a result, / consequently, / on the
whole

To add more points

What is more, / Furthermore, / Apart from this(that), / In addition(to , this), / hence, /
Moreover, / In other words, / as well as, also, not only but also / as well / both … and ,
there is another side to the issue / question / argument of,…. Besides (this), / …. not
Linking word
mention the fact that cars are extremely expensive to maintain.
As mentioned before, / again , / and then, / equally important, / finally, / further, / nor, /
too, / next, / lastly,

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V. Essay Practices

AGREE / DISAGREE

It is important for children to learn what is right and what is wrong at an early age. Punishment is
necessary to help them learn the distinction.
To what extent do you agree, and what sort of punishment should be given?

PROS:

CONS:

CAUSE & SOLUTION

Traffic is developing rapidly all round the world at present. What are the traffic problems in your
country?
What causes these problems? Make some solutions.

CAUSES:

SOLUTIONS:

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 ADVANTAGE & DISADVANTAGE

There are various kinds of media used for communicating information, such as the theatre, films,
comics, TV, radio and books. Which do you think is the most effective?
What are it‟s advantages and disadvantages?

ADVANTAGES:

DISADVANTAGES:

COMPARE & CONTRAST

Many people think that countries have a moral obligation to help each other, while other argue that
the aid money is misspent by the government that receive it, so the international aid should not be
given to the poor countries.
Discuss these two points of views and give your opinion.

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AGREE / DISAGREE

Child education in modern society is attracting much public attention, as parents and society as a whole both
believe that children should learn what is right and what is wrong at an early age. Some people insist that
certain kinds of punishments be adopted to achieve this end. As for me, I think that it is indeed necessary for
parents to resort to certain moderate punishments when a child misbehaves.

Firstly, parents should make their children learn the distinction between right and wrong by slapping their
hands, for instance, when they have touched something they have been told not to touch. Some parents
believe that other forms of physical punishment are also necessary when a child intentionally seems to
behave badly.

Secondly, parents should reinforce the child‟s concept of right and wrong by leaving him or her alone for a
while to reflect and eventually realize the necessity of apologizing. It is true that many parents in Western
culture communicate with their children on equal terms. But they still leave their children alone in a confined
space so as to reflect on their poor behavior.

Thirdly, kindergarten teachers should discipline children who fail to obey them by temporarily depriving
them of toys or isolating them from their friends. For some, this kind of punishment may seem cruel, but
many teachers find that it works well with most children.

In conclusion, there is no denial that parents should love their children and teachers should love their pupils.
However, it is also necessary for both parents and teachers to discipline children from an early age with
justifiable punishments.

CAUSE & SOLUTION

Transportation has been developing rapidly in recent years, especially in large cities. However, it must be
admitted that, along with the benefits of the rapid development of urban traffic, have com certain problems.
One of the biggest problems, in my opinion, is traffic jams in some heavily-populated cities. It has become
common to see passengers and drivers having to wait in long lines of buses and cars moving at a snail‟s pace
on the streets during the rush hours.

On the one hand, there are several reasons for this problem. First, the number of vehicles is increasing much
more rapidly than the building of roads. No sooner has a new road been completed and opened to public
traffic than it is crowded with all kinds of vehicles. Second, there seem to be too many private cars and not
enough public buses. In most cases, a car carries only one or two people, while it occupies almost half the
space a bus does. Third, many people, including drivers, pedestrians and cyclists do not obey traffic rules
properly, especially at busy intersections. And this undoubtedly worsens the already grave situation.

In view of the seriousness of this problem, effective measures must be taken before things get worse. On the
one hand, the government should invest more money in the building of new roads and the repairing and
maintenance of old ones, particularly those in busy areas of cities. On the other hand, the number of private
cars in urban areas should be limited while the number of public buses should be increased. At the same time,
it is essential that stricter traffic rules and regulations be issued to strengthen traffic control and facilitate the
normal and efficient running of all means of transportation.

With such efforts made and persisted in, I am confident that it will not be long before city traffic in Korea
flows in a smoother and more efficient manner.

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It is and undeniable fact that there are all kinds of media used for information communication today, and they
all have their own strong points. Yet, when it comes to effectiveness, TV, in my opinion, outdoes the others.

In the first place, the popularity of TV makes it the most effective channel of communication. Nowadays, it is
common for a TV-broadcast NBA game do have billions of people sitting in front of that little screen
cheering their favorite sports stars. This would have been unimaginable in the days of traditional media such
as books, theatres and films. In the second place, TV has no rival in the speed of information communication.
When a historical event takes place anywhere in the world, TV is always the first convey this message to us.
Last but not least, the interactive way of communication that the latest TV developments have provided us
with also makes it more effective and efficient. Someday, you might be able to do your grocery shopping just
by pressing a button on your remote controller.

However, as there are always two sides to every coin, the magic box also has its weak points. For one thing,
in the crazy pursuit of audience ratings, some low-quality programs flood the TV screen and exert unhealthy
effects upon young people. TV is also sometimes used as a propaganda tool by governments, and this
seriously weakens the authenticity of its messages.

In a word, TV has both its strengths and its weaknesses. Yet this two-sidedness doesn‟t prevent TV being the
most effective of all the media in society today.

COMPARE & CONTRAST

With the economic progress, the world has become better, but many countries like African countries still have
confronted severe problems ranging from slow development of domestic economy to starvation. This fact
convinces advanced countries to help morally such the poor countries, but some people claim that the
international aid for disadvantaged countries should be prohibited on account of the poor countries‟
government misspending it. As far as I‟m concerned, it should continue to be conducted.

On the one hand, the economical difference among countries can be reduced by financial aid from developed
countries. For example, in the recent survey advanced countries annually provided African deprived countries
with more than $6,000 billion. As a consequence, the economical gap between African countries and
advanced countries started to be diminished. Furthermore, the reduction of economical gap between them
helps succeed in taking the economical equality among countries.

On the other hand, it might be true that the aid money was not spent on the people of disadvantaged countries.
However, now the UN inspects regularly the use of fund for them. Moreover, the direct intervention of
developed countries in the use of the fund prevents the countries government from misspending it. Therefore,
it is impossible to say that nowadays the aid from advanced countries is misused.

In conclusion, in the past, poor countries government misspend aid money from rich countries sometimes,
but now stringent inspections about the use of it by the UN and developed countries make that case
impossible. In addition, economical fund for poor countries is the best method to reduce the economical gap
between rich and poor countries. Thus, I‟m convinced that the developed countries should continue to help
economically deprived African countries.

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