Professional Documents
Culture Documents
by Robert Ontiveros
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17-MAR-2016 09:18PM
WORD COUNT
1724
SUBMISSION ID
646953484
CHARACT ER COUNT
8906
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engaging
style--OK, I
see two
criteria?
this is kind of
backwards--one
way he engages
his readers is
with the
immersive
narrative.
"Engaging" can
be a criteria for all
well-constructed
argument
great transition
your "grey"
example belongs
here, I think--build
with an example.
good P
try a new
conclusion: this one
introduces
something brand
new--the scientists.
Untitled
GRADEMARK REPORT
FINAL GRADE
GENERAL COMMENTS
93
Instructor
/100
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wonderf ul opening!
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engaging
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S/V Agreement
Subject-verb agreement:
Subjects and verbs should match in number and person. Singular subjects require singular
verbs; plural subjects require plural verbs.
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as he describes the ?
S/V Agreement
Subject-verb agreement:
Subjects and verbs should match in number and person. Singular subjects require singular
verbs; plural subjects require plural verbs.
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I'm not sure if you're trying to prove his narrative is "engaging" here or if
you're trying to praise his style? You should separate these and build each.
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well-constructed argument
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great transition
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good P
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citation add
You need a citation here.
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scientists.
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9 3.25 / 10 0
100 / 100
Write f ormally and inf ormally, in-class and out-of -class, f or a variety of audiences and purposes.
ABSENT OR BELOW Audience's needs are of ten not recognized: terms and ideas need explanation and
BASIC
language needs adjustment f or the audience. Purpose (to evaluate a book) isn't clear
(60)
or achieved.
DEVELOPING
(70)
Shows some attention to audience's needs, sometimes def ining necessary terms and
ideas and using audience-appropriate language. Purpose (to evaluate a book) may be
unclear at times, and it may not be achieved convincingly.
PROFICIENT
(85)
Shows attention to audience's needs, def ining necessary terms and ideas and using
audience-appropriate language. Purpose (to evaluate a book) may be implied, but it's
clear and achieved.
ADVANCED
(100)
Shows sophisticated attention to audience's needs, def ining necessary terms and
ideas and using audience-appropriate language. Purpose (to evaluate a book) is clear
and achieved with style.
70 / 100
Using the appropriate majors customary citation style, ethically cite and communicate inf ormation f rom a
variety of discipline-appropriate sources.
ABSENT OR BELOW Audience's needs are of ten not recognized: terms and ideas need explanation and
BASIC
language needs adjustment f or the audience. Purpose (to evaluate a book) isn't clear
(60)
or achieved.
DEVELOPING
(70)
PROFICIENT
(85)
Correctly uses MLA- or APA-style parenthetical citations, quotation marks, and works
cited list. May have 1-2 citation errors. Usually introduces sources in the text (MLA
only). Cites f rom a variety of discipline-appropriate sources.
ADVANCED
(100)
Consistently and correctly uses quotation marks and MLA- or APA-style in-text
(parenthetical) and end-of -text (ref erence list) citations f or all sources, whether
quoted directly or paraphrased. Always introduces sources in the text (MLA only).
Cites f rom a variety of discipline-appropriate sources. Never over-reliant on a single
source.
PERSUASION (35%)
100 / 100
Compare, evaluate, synthesize, and communicate caref ully, objectively, and persuasively the relative merits
of alternative or opposing arguments, assumptions, and cultural values.
ABSENT OR BELOW Fails to support claims with specif ic evidence. Objectivity and a controlling idea may
BASIC
be lacking.
(60)
DEVELOPING
(70)
Attempts to support claims with evidence, but specif icity and/or objectivity may be
lacking. A controlling idea may be missing or implied.
PROFICIENT
(85)
Usually supports the controlling idea and paragraph claims with relevant, thorough,
and specif ic evidence. Usually maintains objectivity.
ADVANCED
(100)
Supports a clear controlling idea and paragraph claims with relevant, thorough, and
specif ic evidence. Maintains objectivity.
85 / 100
Organize, f ocus, and communicate ones thoughts clearly and ef f ectively to address a rhetorical situation.
ABSENT OR BELOW Organizational devices (controlling idea/thesis, headings, subheadings, topic
BASIC
sentences, transitions) may be absent, unrelated to the prompt, or illogically
(60)
connected. Criteria may be absent. Ps contain multiple topics or are disorganized.
DEVELOPING
(70)
PROFICIENT
(85)
ADVANCED
(100)
100 / 100
Recognize, evaluate, and employ the f eatures and contexts of language and design that express and
inf luence meaning and that demonstrate sensitivity to gender and cultural dif f erences.
ABSENT OR BELOW Spelling, syntax, diction, or punctuation errors impede readability. Language may
BASIC
ref lect a gender or cultural bias. Design does not conf orm to the chosen publication,
(60)
or a publication may not be specif ied. T he design may be inef f ective.
DEVELOPING
(70)
PROFICIENT
(85)
Spelling, syntax, diction, or punctuation errors are f ew and do not distract f rom
meaning. Language respects gender and cultural dif f erences. Design conf orms to the
chosen publication and is ef f ective.
ADVANCED
(100)
100 / 100
Improve ones own and others writing skills through the assessment and critique of written works.
ABSENT OR BELOW No ef f ort appears to have been made to unif y the review's style and substance. It
BASIC
looks like multiple writers pasted their work together.
(60)
DEVELOPING
(70)
Some ef f ort to unif y the review's style and substance is evident, although it is clear
that multiple people composed it.
PROFICIENT
(85)
Review's style and substance are usually unif ied. It usually appears as though one
writer composed it.
ADVANCED
(100)
Review's style and substance are unif ied. It appears as though one writer composed
it.