Matt Ganguzza

Grammar and Style Activity 1

Paragraphs
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Intro to my paper, discusses both sides of the argument and my stance

Body paragraph number 1, talks of why we are addicted
Body 2, talks of how technology is remapping our brain
Body 3, problems faced for college graduates because of technology
Body 4, how technology can be useful
Body 5, my stance on how technology is useful but should be used with caution and
conclusion built in
Connections and Summaries
My paper flows with multiple arguments showing both sides of the topic and then
finds a compromise in between both sides, which is my stance. The intro gives both
points of view towards the dilemma of how technology is impacting society and then
gives my stance on it. The first body discusses how it has become harder and harder for
us to concentrate now a days because of technology. Then expands on how we have
developed techniques to combat our lowering attention spans. Transitioning into the
second body paragraph, the argument of how technology is reshaping our brains is
brought up. The effects of this conditioning transitions into the third body paragraph, on
how it is effecting college graduates. This paragraph brings up how it is detrimental to
the work place, as college graduates lack the attention and older skills to complete tasks
the employers desire of them. Then a rebuttal of how the internet is helpful is brought up
using Pinkers ideas and how it connects the entire world. Finally this ties together my
argument where I advocate for the use of technology, while taking caution towards its
less desirable effects.
Reflection

After my reflection I find that my paper is relatively coherent and has a nice flow
to it. I want to add more information and develop a stronger argument within the
paragraph about the college graduates. I will add more data from research to make it as
strong as my other paragraphs. I also want to add in some personal experience into my
stance that will further benefit my argument. Finally I revise for corrections due to
grammar and the flow of my sentences.