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The third document is the original editorial with comments from the instructor.
This had been submitted and was revised by the instructor, who put comments throughout
my paper to let me know where I needed to fix my mistakes and where I needed to add
some more information. One of her comments was for me to put in the beginning of my
editorial was to restate my opinion in my thesis. She also pointed out towards my third
paragraph to make another argument and put research facts. Another comment she put
throughout my paper was to add numbers of how much water was being wasted in order
to prove my case. The student learning objective for this document was also collaboration
just like the previous documents.
The last document is the revised editorial, which demonstrates my final work. In
this paper I presented organized paragraphs, images with captions and citations, and lots
of claims and evidence to persuade the reader. After looking through the comments from
the peer review rubric and the original editorial. I went back to the editorial and corrected
the mistakes I had done. In this revised editorial for the first paragraph I restated my
opinion in my thesis to make sure that my point of view was given. Another thing that I
fixed throughout my paper was adding the numbers of how much water was being wasted
to help support my case with evidence. I fixed the third paragraph by adding research
facts and I also moved some of my paragraphs around to have a better organization. The
SLOs that best fit this document are rhetorical focus, ethical citation, persuasion,
organization, and academic language and design. All these SLOs were presented
throughout my improved writing skill document.
Sincerely,
Cristal Meza