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Akash Bhardwaj
Professor Blandford
UWRT 1103
7 November 2015
Critical Analysis of Literacy Memoir

My literacy memoir contains everything about my life and how it has affected my literacies.
Overall, I think I picked a good topic of my life to focus on, which was my nomadic childhood. I
thought it was the best way to portray the reason why I am who I am today. However, I also saw
some flaws and some room for improvement as there always is. The first idea is I did not give
myself enough time to include the entire story of my life in this memoir. Another problem is that
I did not include enough examples of literacy in my life. Although I was on topic most of the
time, I feel like the writing did not have too much flow or transition. I just included what I
needed to include in the essay because I did not have enough practice with the fluency in my
writing. I can blame this in part on my high school teachers because due to them, I was terrified
of writing to actually be able to get my ideas and my voice flowing.
Not including enough of the entire story was a big mistake because I realized that I could
have written more about a big event that happened in my life. I was involved in a car accident in
2007, which had changed my whole perspective of life. I originally thought of not including it in
the literacy memoir because it sounded like a morbid topic to discuss. However, including it
would have shown how I was limited in doing certain activities such as playing certain contact
sports such as football. This accident made me more cautious and skeptical about my

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surroundings and thus would have been a prime example of how my life events affected my
literacy.
The second problem was not adding enough examples throughout the whole paper. For
example,s my paragraph about reading in middle and high school lacked specific examples. I did
include To Kill a Mocking Bird and I said it may have been extreme for a middle school
student, but I did not talk about why it would be extreme and how it may have disturbed me
because I was not fully mature yet. In the paragraph about my first writing class in college,
which is this class, I should have talked about one of the daybook responses or discussion posts
to show how the assignments in the class are actually affecting my literacy. Through those
assignments, I became a more reflective learner and everything I do, I reflect on. With this
content, I could have added more specifics of how my literacy has been affected even in such a
short period of time.
The third and possibly the most important part was not having fluency in the paper. It was
in chronological order but it seemed like I was slightly jumping from one topic to another within
the paragraphs. Maybe what I could have done was see how each sentence relates to each other
and then rearrange the sentences to also be more fluent. Possibly rewriting certain paragraphs
would have helped me have more flow in my paper too.