Lessiker Business Communication Solution

Selecting Concrete Words

Instructions, Sentences 22-30. Revise these sentences to make them conform to the writing
suggestions discussed in the book. They are grouped by the suggestion they illustrate.

22. We have found that young men are best for this work.
We have found that men under 30 are best for this work.
23. She makes good grades.
She has a 3.9 grade-point average.
Avoiding Camouflaged Verbs
24. John lost a fortune in Las Vegas.
John lost $7,800 in Las Vegas.
25. If we dont receive the goods soon, we will cancel.
If we dont receive the goods by January 15, we will cancel.
26. Some years ago she made good money.
In 2003 she made $125,000.
27. His grade on the aptitude test was not high.
He scored 54 percent on the aptitude test.
28. Here is a product with very little markup.
This product has only a 4 percent markup.
29. The cost of the online subscription was reasonable.
The cost of the online subscription was only $39.
30. We will need some new equipment soon.
We will need new equipment before September 1.