Name:

Mr. Farrell

Date:
ELA 9

UNIT 1 TASK - Identity Explanatory Essay

Write an explanatory identifying how your identity has been influenced by your community and/or by a pivotal
experience.

I growup in a community of salybia in Trinidad an Tobago in the Caribbean.In salybia there are many forest
trees ,fresh air,lots of fruits an vegtables. Many people of different religion and nationaltlys live there .the thing i
like about my community is there's are a beach,river and waterfall walking distants from my house.There is
also a middle they.Every day I would go on the beach with my friends we would play cricket on the sea
shore .Than buy fresh coconuts from the venders .we then go surfing.I always cought the biggest wave.after
surfing we then go kyaking up the river.we would go so far up we would meet the waterfall.I love the water
fall.after kayaking we would go boat ride with my friend father's boat. We would go down the islands.when we
were finish boat riding we would play soccer in my village savanna .I love playing soccer.I love my community
so it impacted on a lot.

good work 3

Explanatory Writing Rubric

Standard Addressed

INTERPRETATION:
Groups information into
useable (logical) pieces
and draws conclusions.

I can use my
working outline
to create an
explanatory
personal
statement,
making
connections
and developing
insights
between my
identity and my
community or
pivotal
experience.

I can use my
working outline
to create an
explanatory
personal
statement,
making
connections
between my
identity and my
community or
pivotal
experience.

COMMUNICATION:
Incorporates ideas and
supporting evidence
purposefully using
structures that
demonstrate the line of
reasoning.

I can create a
new, highinterest
narrative
opening for my
explanatory
personal
statement
using a blend

Even with help,

With help, I
I cannot use
can use my
I can use my
my working
working outline
working outline
outline to
to create an
to create an
create an
explanatory
explanatory
explanatory
personal
personal
personal
statement,
statement,
statement,
making
explaining
making
connections
details about
connections
between my
my community
between my
identity and my
or pivotal
identity and my
community or
experience.
community or
pivotal
pivotal
experience.
experience.

I can refine my I can write a

introduction for
simple
my explanatory introduction to
personal
my explanatory
statement
personal
using multiple statement to
strategies from introduce the
class.
topic.

With help, I
can refine my
introduction for
my explanatory
personal
statement
using multiple
strategies from
class.

Even with help,

I cannot refine
my introduction
for my
explanatory
personal
statement
using multiple
strategies from

Comments

of strategies
from class.

COMMUNICATION:
Incorporates feedback to
make appropriate
revisions.

class.

I can utilize
peer feedback
With help, I
I can utilize
I can utilize
and
can utilize peer
peer feedback peer feedback
independent
feedback to
to improve my to improve my
strategies to
improve my
work for style
work for
improve my
work for style
and precision.
precision.
work for style
and precision.
and precision.

Through
Through
cause-andcause-andeffect
effect
transitions and
COMMUNICATION:
transitions, my
added insight,
Constructs an explanation
paper indicates
my paper
based on valid and reliable
how my
indicates how
evidence obtained from a
identity is
my identity is
variety of sources
influenced by
influenced by
(including students own
external
external
investigations, theories,
factors,
factors,
simulations, peer review)
including
including
community
community
and/or pivotal
and/or pivotal
experiences.
experiences.

Even with help,

I cannot utilize
peer feedback
No comments
to improve my
from peers
work.
evident.

With help, my
My paper
paper indicates
implies that my
Even with help,
how my
identity is
my paper does
identity is
influenced by
not indicate
influenced by
external
how my
external
factors,
identity is
factors,
including
influenced by
including
community or
external
community or
pivotal
factors.
pivotal
experiences.
experiences.

I can write,
PRECISION:
I can write,
I can write,
revise, and
Assures that the final
revise, and
revise, and
publish an
product meets all
publish an
publish an
explanatory
discipline-specific
explanatory
explanatory
essay,
standards for language,
essay,
essay,
attending to or
terms, expressions, rules,
attending to all attending to
exceeding all
terminology, and
aspects of the some aspects
aspects of the
conventions.
task.
of the task.
task.

With help, I
can write,
Even with help,
revise, and
I cannot write,
publish an
revise, and
explanatory
publish an
essay,
explanatory
attending to
essay.
aspects of the
task.