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Dr. Hartman
April 26, 2015
Dear Dr. Hartman,
I really appreciated your feedback on my WAD assignment earlier. I knew my
weakest area would be the assessment. Assessing a workshop, to me, will always be a
difficult thing primarily because all of the workshops I have participated in have never
been assessed. In light of your comments concerning my lack of strong assessment, I
would say that every single workshop I attended at work was missing this very critical
piece. My Co-workers and I would attend, participate (they usually were very engaging)
and receive a certificate then leave. I never thought about assessments and workshops
even being related. Your comments to my submission makes sense, though, that a
certificate is a nice take away for the participant, but how can the participant and
presenter know that any learning and growth has occurred without any legitimate
assessment?
I think the assessment part of this course has been one of the most instructional
for me. During my brief stint teaching, the assessment was provided for me, so I did not
realize there was really anything to it. The same with deciding what the goals, objectives
and outcomes a course should have. I was simply handed a syllabus, which listed
everything I needed to get my students through the class. Upon reflection, I think this
might be one reason I like training more than teaching. I feel I have more control over
the content of the material and how it will be presented.
I have not made changes to all of my WAD, only those areas you suggested,
which follow below. I will outline here the changes I am making and my reasoning.
1. Assessment: I have included an Email Etiquette Rubric. Using only a checklist of
objectives and outcomes would only meet minimal assessment needs. The items listed
are not necessarily black and white, yes or no type of learning outcomes. Some
participants may come close, but still need improvement. I would use the rubric to
assess the in class assignment after the workshop and provide feedback to the
individuals and their supervisor.
2. Assignment Feedback: As described above, the final feedback would be done
through a rubric assessment. Comments may be added directly to the assignment
document, but I would refrain from marking through the assignment so as not to
discourage the participants.
Email Assignment
Directions: Rewrite the following unprofessional emails so that they are more
professional.
Example 1.
Ms. W
Wazzup? girl tell me what we have to do for Friday cuz i take 3 claeses and werk 15
hrs/wek and i dont have time 2 git to a computer and look n e thing up I rlly like ur class
bcuz ur funny well let me know cuz im a rlly gd stdt and need a A in ur cls.
Correction of Example 1.
Subject Line: Assignments for Friday (insert date)
Hello Ms. W (spell full last name),
Could you tell me what assignments I have in your class on Friday?
Please get back to me at your earliest convenience.
Thank you,
(Students full name)
Example 2.
You really irritated our client yesterday. We need to talk about it.
Correction of Example 2.
Subject Line: Clients Appointment Yesterday
(Mr. or Mrs. Last Name),
Could you come to my office at your earliest convenience to speak about our client
yesterday?
Thank you,
(Senders full name)
Example 3.
(Sent as a REPLY TO ALL)
I dont like the decision you made to go forward, Marcus.
Correction of Example 3.
Date: 4.26.15
Category
2 Approaching
Expectations
3 Meeting
Expectations
4 Exceeding
Expectations
Subject of Email
Unclear/inappropriate
subject line
Somewhat unclear or
inappropriate
Salutation and
Closing- Was the
Salutation and
Closing of the email
friendly and
informative?
Salutation and/or
closing are missing.
Salutation is friendly
and closing includes
some contact
information, but not
all that is pertinent
Salutation and
closing are respectful
and accurate
Accuracy
Are all specific
dates, times, events,
data, etc. provided?
There is significant
inaccurate or missing
information.
All important
information is
included and is
accurate.
Grammar,
Spelling,
Capitalization,
Punctuation
(conventions)- The
email has no errors
in grammar,
spelling,
capitalization,
punctuation
Writer makes no
errors in grammar,
spelling,
capitalization,
punctuation.
TOTAL
Score
23