Economy: Is this a title?

Economy for me is a new important way of increasing the way of life

in some cities. It can also Also this can tell us how well is going your
own city over the different problems they are going through.
Economy nowadays has an amazing value when it comes to money,
as it is also known, economy can make other cities or countries
want to? trade clothes, food, textiles etc. Also economy makes
your own social status in the city, it also depends on the amount of
money you have or in the place you are living.// For commercialisers
the economy is the center of a country because this can make the
city make a lot of movement with the shops, also this can be related
with to the productivity of the city. This things they make can me
exported to other countries that may need their things. When the
economy comes to an important level, for example here in
Colombia, (?? What do you mean here) we produce jewels that are
exported to other contra that does no have the same process of
exploiting this mines where the jewels can be found. They need to
be in have a special process of cleaning, and polishing. As well as
and also having it ready for the commerce, and also being ready o
be exported. Economy moves all the first necessities like food and
clothing. economy resources will be always limited. this has an
special value because it has a limited value. ?? not sure where you
where going with this, but it didnt get there.
Economy in Colombia:
It The economy in Colombia is based in the part that we export the
most important things for other countries in terms of the minerals
part which . By this I means that we export: carbon, gold, emeralds,

petroleum. even do Venezuela i the first country in the petroleum

exportation. Colombia is an special and important country because
it is the only country that contributes with has do oceans, the
Pacific and Atlantic Oceans with means that for Colombia it is easier
being able for exporting and importing products because of the hits
on the two oceans ??. Colombia is a country that has all the
climates even though do we don't have seasons, we can produce
products from different climates of all weather thanks to the variety
of weather.

Colombia has an important place in south america

because it is the first country found we you are getting closer to

south america. ? It play an important role for all the different
products ordered in different countries and cities.
Juanita paramo 8B
Well you have a good basis for an essay here. However it does not
cover all the things that were requested from you (introduction,
body, and conclusion.) To be honest, it looks like you wrote it, but
didnt proof read it after?
You have errors in spelling, using word form (conjugation,) word
choice (sometimes your using words that dont mean what you
want them to,) sentence construction is at times choppy and mixed
up, and some sections very hard to understand exactly what you
are trying to say.
Area
Task Response

high
fully addresses all parts of the task
presents a fully developed position in
answer to the question with relevant, fully
extended and well supported ideas

Coherence and
Cohesion

uses cohesion in such a way that it

attracts no attention
skilfully manages paragraphing
uses a wide range of vocabulary

Lexical Resource

low
barely responds to the
20-0
task
does not express a
position
may attempt to present
one or two ideas
but there is no
development
has very little control of 20-0
organizational
features
uses an extremely limited 20-0

Grade
16

15
14

with very natural and

sophisticated control of lexical
features; rare minor errors occur
only as slips
Grammatical Range uses a wide range of structures with
and Accuracy
full flexibility and accuracy; rare minor
errors occur only as slips
Formatting
Emails have name, class, and title in
subject line.
Essay has a title, name, and class.
Other formatting guidelines are followed.
Paragraphs
Student uses paragraph structures.
Forming them correctly based around
subject
Capitalization and
Student uses both competently and
punctuation.
fluidly.

range
of vocabulary; essentially
no
control of word formation
and/or
spelling
cannot use sentence
20-0
forms except in
memorized phrases
Student fails to use
10
formatting
Student fails to use any
form.

13
10

Student fails to use any. 5

doesnt use sentence
structure

100-0

total
78