Grislean Palacios

Dr. Lynda Haas

WR 37
January 20, 2015
Domestication of Animals
Although animals are all animals, society, for example, has segregated
domestic pet cats from wild cats, like bobcats. Interesting way to start your intro it
captures the readers attention. Size could be an answer for a large cat, like a tiger instead
of a bobcat, but that cannot be true since some wild cats are nearly the same size of
pet cats. The key word here is pet. Scholars in the fields of animal studies state that
the idea of a pets was not simply given to an animal instantly but instead people grew
to understand the idea that animals could possible be more than just wild; Leslie Irvine
and Dennis Venema both agree with the idea that animals over time have become
pets, although some are mistreated, for the most part they have been loved and
cared for and were chosen due to their unique characteristics however, Louise
Eccles and Harry Mount, as well as Grant Morrison and Frank Quitely, do not
believe people have fully embraced this idea of animal as pets and animal rights.
For your controlling idea you were able to bring in the sources without being to
overwhelming with too many facts and were able to successfully give background as to
what they were supporting. However this is a lengthy sentence maybe find a way to break
it up into two sentences.
The idea of pets has changed vastly from centuries ago when only the elite
could afford to own them, versus the general population much like it is today. Assistant

Professor of Sociology at the University of Colorado, Boulder and author of the

book If You Tame Me, You were able to bring in how credible the author is. Leslie
Irvine, also questions the use of only a few certain animals as pets, yet she
understands that the term pet has quite some historical background. Irvine goes
quite into depth with felines, good transition into your next point who were first
domesticated by the Egyptians as a tool to hunt rodents and protect the grain that held up
their economy (16). To the Egyptians, a cat's death would lead to mourning for the loss of
their cat. Archaeological digs have revealed numerous remains of mummified
cats,(16) good quote which were only done to wealthy humans as a mean of preserving
their body for the afterlife. Cats were not just animals to the Egyptians, as Irvine explains,
the catsy were another family member.part of the family. Similarly, shows that these two
scholars agree Professor of Biology at Trinity Western University in Langley, British
Columbia and staff writer for the Biologos Forum, Dennis Venema, bringing in the
credibility of another scholar also supports the idea that animals slowly domesticated into
pets. Venema focused on the domestication of dogs, where he determined that certain
breeds were chosen to be domesticated in the early domestication process were chosen
because of for their unique suite of characteristics. Although gray wolves and dogs are
believed to be related, their genomes only resemble extremely close relatives.
Pets have changed not only their role in society but also physical appearance and
how they are perceived by humanshumans perceive them. Daily Mail news reporter,
Louise Eccles, and english author and journalist, Harry Mount, showing their
credibility investigated the breeding situations dogs are faced with in hope of having the
rarest, most bizarre mixes. Although cross-breedscrossbreeds began as an aid to a

friend, who was allergic to most breeds available to the use of his blind wife, I think
this could be deleted, it doesnt seem necessary crossbreeds have become a horror for
animals who face ill health and abandonment. Crossbreeds have made dogs an item more
than a pet, putting their health at risk if it means resulting in good looks. This idea is
similar to comic book writer and animal activist, Grant Morrisons, shows how these
scholars agree and comic book artist, Frank Quitelys, weaponized pets in We3. The
animals are seen as items (weapons, objects, etc.) instead ofpets, meant to be cared for
and loved by definition. We3 shows a more extreme side to animal abuse and tries to
warn from the creation of monsters, in this case, to fight in war in place of soldiers.
The story is told in the perspective of the animals to express a message: animals
have feelings, thoughts, and emotions as well as the desire to search for safety and
love. Good summary of We3 Morrison and Quitely aim to prevent projects being
attempted, with scientific experiments on animals for inhumane motives, by showing in
their comic what would happen if the project was completed; the animals would
suffer greatly, like they do with the current project of crossbreeding. Good way of
connecting the two points together
Although the word pet is a simple one syllable word, theres more to the
word than one syllable. This is a bit confusing to put as your beginning sentence Leslie
Irvine and Dennis Venema both support the idea restating your other points that
animals they have been loved and cared for and that they were only chosen due to breed
differences in characteristics, some were more willing to be domesticated than others.
However, Louise Eccles and Harry Mount, along with Grant Morrison and Frank
Quitely, all reject this idea showing the other points and chose to support the idea that

people treat their pets as items instead of embracing animal rights. I agree with Wally
Conron, the creator of cross breeding, when he says pets have become items
victimized by pandoras box turning them unwillingly into frankenstein dogs. You
shouldnt put your own opinions into this literature review, you are just supposed to tell
the conversation not be a part of it.

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Works Cited
Eccles, Louise and Mount, Harry. "The Hidden Suffering of the Dogs Bred to Be Cute:
Adorable Looks. Cuddly Names like Labradoodle. But the Trend for Cross-breed Dogs
Raises Disturbing Questions." Mail Online. Associated Newspapers, 13 Nov. 2014. Web.
29 Jan. 2015.
Irvine, Leslie. If You Tame Me Understanding Our Connection with Animals.
Philadelphia: Temple UP, 2004. Print.
Morrison, Grant, and Frank Quitely. WE3. New York: DC Comics, 2005. Print.
Venema, Dennis. "Evolution Basics: Artificial Selection and the Origins of the Domestic
Dog." BioLogos.org, n.d., Web. 29 Jan. 2015.