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Connie S. Douglas

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I believe ttrat you must treat others how you would want to be trcated. This has always
been my philosophy of dealing with people in school"

it

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see,ms simple e,nougfu to achieve this, the importance

and everyday interactions. Althougft

of this cotrc,pt is often overlooked. By

living by &is philosophy aad following it closely, I have leamd gready what being treated
and not

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well is like. Eve,n if one wene to be nrde to you it is always bst to heat the,m with the

rrymost rcspect Although, seeking revenge may seem ideal, it may not be

tre smart thing to do.

I always feel that if people were to treat one another wi& the other person in min{ they could
come to a common mderstanding of onc another.

It is a well known fact that evryone isn't the

same and that we all have our differences. Howerrer,

if we look past our differences we could

all at last make an attempt to understand mch o&er and make the world a better place. For
examlrle, if

ygwere

nrde to someotre, would you expect them

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retum with kindoess? I find

Rule" that most people can relate to and abide by.

Following &is rule may help one become a more litable persotr trat
to be aromd. By respecting ottets' digpiU,

resFt lis gives$

pridgrnd

the opporhrnity to be the

benefitby allowing oneto

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possessionsnone could gain tnrst alrd

ti"a orn"rso{u@can tnrly be. This

become closerwithpeople andtheywouldbe more

atso

likelyto help in

retum. The nicer and more helpful you are to people in general they become more inclined to

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return the favor. Why would anyone help you if you weren'tthere to help them out? *showing
gratitude is one of the simplest yet most powerfrrl +hing$ humans can do for each othed'conveys
the idea that treating people rvell is a must (Pausch). This is always seen in movies where the

hero spares the viltain when situation favors the protagonist due to hero being kindhearted. For

examplq discussing questions aboutrrycoming assignments or concenr about class matrial to

classmates allows for the *golden nrle" to be put in play.

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I have always livedby this nrle

and not just my elders. As

as a

child. Mypaents raisedme to bepolitetopeople

I got older 6is became advantageous

whene the outcome dpeoded on how

whe,n I was put into situations

well I heared others. By the time I was 16 I stafied

working for a car wash that had employees that would detail fte custome,r's car. I would always
be nice to customers and always did what they asked in the most polite form. Wheo meeting my

girlfriend's parents for fte first time, they hapipened to be a customer from the car wash I was at
They told me about how most of the e,mployees there wene not polite or

di&'t

do a good job on

detailing the cars. They soon told me ftat I had washed their car before and became their
recommendation for wheoever they needed a car wash. I felt as

if I gained

liking me based on pmevious e'rcormters with the,m. I was coofirmed of this

texted me later that day sayrng

bw

aa advaotage t9 rhem
as

my Srlfriend

much her pareirts liked me. This exarnple shows that by

Sving respect and superior sewice, I get the frvor refirmed

as

well

as the

ability to grow

as a

person.

Since

I have worked in

a service

will helpyoubome abefierperson

job before I know firsthmd on how fieatingotrers well

and gain more

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job I usually get tipped more and get more customers

my service. By getting all these

compliments I have gaircd a raise in my wage. It also helped me socially at work since I would

knorr a good amormt of the customers who would come in. I would often have engaging
conversations with the,m and either end up laughing or learning something new at the end of the
day. Bybeing openand socialwiftpeople, you startto make bonds withthem andhave abetter

rmdershnding of them- Who loows, being nice to someone could have made their day. As my
father would say "The people who will benefit you the most arc not your close friends, but the
people you've just

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In school I would try my bestto be nice to my teachers. Although some tffichers

we,rre

not

very nice, I fiied my best to be polite to the,m. They started to like me and my frie,nds would
ofteir call me a teacher's pet when all I wanted was to be treated with rcspect from my teachers.

Horrever, myhardwork inthat class and goodpenonalitytowards my teacherreflected inmy

oppommity to getbumped up to ahigher letter grade. My rcacher saw my hard work in class ard
liked me, so she bum@ me up &om a92.4 to a 92.5 that gave me an A that I worted hard to
achieve.

In conclusion" I believe &at one mu$tted o$em like wtat he or she would like to be
treatd- This is the

*Golden rule"
that I think most peo,ple should attempt to live by. One's life

could be much asierthis way.

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I believe that you must treat otherS hbw you would want to be treated. This has always been my
philosophy of dealing with people in school, work, and everyday interactions. Although it seems
simple enough to achieve this, the importance of this concept is often overlooked. By living by
this philosophy and following it closely, I have learned greatly what being treated well and not

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well is like. I always felt that if people treated one another with the other person in mind, they

o9l,v"r^rBfitacome to a common understanding of one another. It is

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well known fact that everyone

at*b isn't the same and that we atl have our differences. However, if we looked past our diflerences
a8*46r"could alllat least make an attempt to understand each other and make the world a better place.
For example,

if you were rude to someone, would you expect them to refurn with kindness? I

find this to be the "Golden Rule" that most people can relate and abide to.
Following this rule will help make you a likable person that people would want to be
around. By respecting others' digmty, pride, and possessions one could gain trust and respect.

This gives you the opportunity to be the kind of person you can truly be. This also benefits you
since you can become closer with people and they would be more likely to help you out

in

situations. The nicer and more helpful you are to people in general they become more inclined to
return the favor. Why would anyone help you if you weren't there to help them out? This is
always seen in movies where the hero spares the villain when situation favors the protagonist due
to hero being kind hearted.

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a..rrlt{.lpeople

and not just my elders. As I got older this became advantageous when I was put into situations

where the outcome depended on how well I treated

working for a car wash that had employees that

the time I was

16I

I the customer's car.

I would always

conversations with them and either end up laughing or learning something new at the end of the
day. By being open and social with people, you start to make bonds with them and have a better
understanding of them. Who knows, being nice to someone could have made their day. As my
father would say "The people who will benefit you the most are not your close friends, but the
people you've just mef'.

In school I would try my best to be nice to my teachers. Although some teachers were not
very nice, I tried my best to be polite to them. They started to like me and my friends would

I fut

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often call me a teacher's pet when all I wanted was to be treated with respect from my teachers.
However, my hard work in that class and good petsonality towards my teacher reflected in my

opportunity to get bumped up to ahigher letter grade. My teacher saw my hard work in class and
liked me, so she bumped me up from a 92.4to a92.5 that gave me an A that I worked hard to
achieve.

In conclusion, I believe that one must teat others like what he or she would like to be
*Golden rule" that I think most people should attempt to live by. One's life
heated. This is the
could be much easier this way.

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