Informal Essay Self and Peer Revision

Name of writer: __________

Name of peer editor: __________________

1) Complete the chart below by following the directions in the proof
column and identifying the examples in your work. Be honest and
thorough. Ask questions along way to ensure you have met all Success
Criteria.
2) Have a peer read your work and give you feedback on what was
done well, and how you could improve the quality of your work.

Success Criteria: Proof

My essay is written in
first person narrative, and
the point of view is
consistent throughout the
writing.

I have used pronouns in my writing such as I, We etc.

Circle 2 examples in blue

Comments from peer:




I have organized my
essay into a beginning,
middle and end.
I can clearly select the beginning, middle and end paragraphs.
Circle and label the beginning paragraphs, middle paragraphs
and end paragraphs.

Comments from peer:




My essay reveals
something in the
introduction that catches
the readers attention.
I have thought about and included a clever hook.
Using yellow, underline the catchy hook in the introduction.

Comments from peer:



I have made my
message (thesis) clear in
the beginning of my
essay.

My message is
meaningful and makes
my reader think.
One sentence in the introduction states the message either directly or
indirectly.
Copy the message here:





Comments from peer:


I have enhanced my
writing by using literary
devices.
I have incorporated 3+ literary devices to add interest within my writing.
Copy three device examples here and explain their purpose:

1)

Purpose:

2)

Purpose:

3)

Purpose:
Comments from peer:




When explaining my
personal experience, I
have used many specific
details and facts about
the 5Ws (who, what,
when, where and why).

I have tried to express my ideas clearly by referring to specific details
and facts.

In the essay, use the colour red and circle 5 specific details that
are given to enhance clarity.


Comments from peer:





When writing, I have
used descriptive
language to describe the
5 senses.
I have made an effort to use many descriptive adjectives and concrete
nouns.

Find 5 descriptive adjectives and list them below:

___________________ ____________________

___________________ ____________________

___________________

Comments from peer:






The focus of my essay is
on my personal
experience.
Circle:

Definitely
Somewhat
Not really

Comments from peer:


I have used a dictionary
to check the spelling in
my essay, and made an
effort to use a variety of
words.

Circle in green any words that need to be double-checked for
spelling.

Underline words in green that could be substituted for a better
word.

Comments from peer:




Peer:
What did you like about this essay?

1)


2)


3)



Peer:
What could be improved with this essay? List three specific things.

1)


2)


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