Student: Rebecca Amavizca Professor: Lynda Haas Course Name: Connect Composition 3.

0 Section Name: WR 37 33057 Saturday, Mar 15, 3:53 AM

Rebecca Amavizca Lynda Haas Writing 37 20 February 2014 Modern-day Lestrade "The detective story is such a pervasive phenomenon of the contemporary worldnot only in books but in many other media" (Theory and Practice of Classic Detective Fiction). Twenty Rules for Writing Detective Stories adds that this particular fiction has "definite lawsunwritten, perhaps, but none the less binding." These laws, or conventions, tend to be a lead detective, his sidekick, a crime scene, a criminal, and a police inspector. Sir Arthur Conan Doyle's prominent Sherlock Holmes stories helped establish these conventions. Specifically, his well-known character, Lestrade, is Conan Doyle's main police detective who has influenced other modern-day texts. These include author Agatha Christie's 20th century police detective versions such as Miss Marple and Inspector Jabb. An online article states that the Golden Era of Detective Fiction in the 60s embraced the "development and popularity of police detectives" including Christie's characters which have in turn "starred in their own television series or film adaptations" ("From Sherlock to SVU: The History of Detective Fiction"). Conan Doyle's influence of his police detective Lestrade has stretched all the way up to modern-day television shows as well. Distinctively in BBC's Sherlock originally aired in England in 2010 and is still ongoing present day. BBC's Sherlock is based on many of Conan Doyle's Holmes stories but offers a twist: struggling "'with the most modern of our "ripped from the headlines" fears and [imposing] the order that we hope and demand of technology and logic'" (Sherlock vs. Sherlock: A Study in Holmes). In Season Two Episode Two "The Hounds of Baskerville," Sherlock and Watson join Henry Knight in Dartmoor to attempt to solve the murder of Henry's father in connection to the Baskerville laboratory and the mysterious and supernatural "Hound from Hell." In the midst of their trouble, Holmes and Watson bump into Detective Inspector Lestrade who claims that he's at the same inn because he's on vacation. In this modern-day adaptation, Lestrade from Scotland Yard is played by actor Rupert Graves and is tall and of medium weight compared to stories' physically small Lestrade. However, BBC's Sherlock, remains as a modern-day revision of Conan Doyle's Sherlock Holmes stories, updating the genre conventions for its 21st century audience; in particular, the police

detective convention is an update of Conan Doyle's character Lestrade, with specific revisions such an not being as incompetent and less regarded as one of Sherlock's friends. Through the use of character dialogue, BBC's audience can note that this modern-day Lestrade is not as inept as the character in Conan Doyle's stories. A surprise visit from Lestrade sends Holmes complaining in exasperation, however, as Watson points out that Lestrade "could be just the man [they] want." Watson invites the "nice scary inspector from Scotland Yard" to join them on the case because he knows that Lestrade "might come in very handy." Although scripted, the audience understands that Watson views Lestrade as beneficial to solving the case because he posses an intimidating personality to efficiently interrogate the suspicious innkeepers. In contrast, Holmes tells Watson in Conan Doyle's The Hound of Baskervilles to invite Lestrade to join in the case stating that "he is the best of the professionals, I think, and we may need his assistance" (243). So whereas both the stories and the television show eventually portray Lestrade as a useful inspector, at the current time in BBC Sherlock, Holmes is still resentful and has a prejudice towards the inspector. In the same scene, the camera perspective is focused on the quarrel between Holmes and Lestrade. By the close up of his face, the audience can clearly see Holmes's opposition in his annoyed facial expressions. Holmes shouts "why the hell are you here" at Lestrade, something that he would not say in the novels. Maybe at the time in the television show they were not friends, but in the following episode in Sherlock, Lestrade in formally invited to Holmes's apartment for Christmas, otherwise counted more as a friend than just an occasional partners that don't get along. Furthermore, in Conan Doyle's "The Adventure of Norwood Builder" and "The Adventure of the BrucePartington Plans," Watson begins referring to Lestrade as "our old friend Lestrade" (Redecorating Middle-earth in Early Lovecraft - On Holmes, Lestrade, Conan Doyle, and the BBC's Sherlock). In short, there are differences between Conan Doyle's and Sherlock's character Lestrade but ultimately not many because the show is intended to allow "the luxury of developing characters and storylines" while remaining "true not only to the spirit and plots of the original texts, but also to their thematic interests" (Sherlock vs. Sherlock: A Study in Holmes). Thus the audience is allowed to view Conan Doyle's stories come to life with his characters modeled after the original but set in modern-day London making this television series very appealing to modern-day viewers. Works Cited Delamater, Jerome and Ruth Prigozy, eds. Theory and Practice of Classic Detective Fiction. NewYork: Praeger, 1997. "From Sherlock to SVU: The History of Detective Fiction." Breaking Character. N.p., n.d. Web. 20 Feb. 2014. .

"Redecorating Middle-earth in Early Lovecraft - On Holmes, Lestrade, Conan Doyle, and the BBC's Sherlock." Redecorating Middle-earth in Early Lovecraft - On Holmes, Lestrade, Conan Doyle, and the BBC's Sherlock. N.p., n.d. Web. 21 Feb. 2014. . "Sherlock vs. Sherlock: A Study in Holmes." Word and Film. N.p., n.d. Web. 20 Feb. 2014. .

""Twenty Rules for Writing Detective Stories"(1928)." Twenty Rules for Writing Detective Stories (1928) by S.S. Van Dine. N.p., n.d. Web. 20 Feb. 2014. .

Comments
Question 9: Do you have any general comments on this draft? Select some text in the draft to add them. Sullivan, Susanne:

"Maybe"

always be sure when writing Sullivan, Susanne:

"(Redecorating Middle-earth in Early Lovecraft - On Holmes, Lestrade, Conan Doyle, and the BBC's Sherlock)."
Shouldn't be this long. find the author Sullivan, Susanne:

"Works Cited"

Should all be the same font. Use "easybib" to help with citing websites. Question 5: Does the writer introduce the modern-day text with a detailed but brief overall summary and offer some facts of its rhetorical situation? Highlight the area where this occurs (or you think it should if it is missing) and suggest revisions. Sullivan, Susanne:

" Distinctively in BBC's Sherlock originally aired in England in 2010 and is still ongoing present day. BBC's Sherlock is based on many of Conan Doyle's Holmes stories but offers a twist: struggling "'"
This is the introduction to the text. It's good, but its a quote from someone else. Maybe try using part of this quote that talks about Lestrade and then talk about the show in your own words. who is the audience, where it aired,and what year. Nguyen, Hieu:

"Watson invites the "nice scary inspector from Scotland Yard" to join them on the case because he knows that Lestrade "might come in very handy." Although scripted, the audience understands that Watson views Lestrade as beneficial to solving the case because he posses an intimidating personality to efficiently interrogate the suspicious innkeepers. In contrast, Holmes tells Watson in Conan Doyle's The Hound of

Baskervilles to invite Lestrade to join in the case stating that "he is the best of the professionals, I think, and we may need his assistance" (243). So whereas both the stories and the television show eventually portray Lestrade as a useful inspector, at the current time in BBC Sherlock, Holmes is still resentful and has a prejudice towards the inspector."
Good brief summary Question 2: Does the introduction mention the genre convention the writer will be analyzing in the modern-day text? Highlight the area where this is mentioned and then provide advice--is the convention an important one that was also used by Conan Doyle? Suggest revisions. Sullivan, Susanne:

"Detective Inspector Lestrade who claims that he's at the same inn because he's on vacation. In this modern-day adaptation, Lestrade from Scotland Yard is played by actor Rupert Graves and is tall and of medium weight compared to stories' physically small Lestrade. "
This is a part where you talk about Lestrade and I like how you have related his appearance to the books, and how it is different. That is important for the essay. Nguyen, Hieu:

"Specifically, his well-known character, Lestrade, is Conan Doyle's main police detective who has influenced other modern-day texts. "
Use more than one sentence to establish your genre convention. Question 8: Does the writer quote, summarize, or paraphrase from at least three credible sources? Highlight one area where a source is used that could be stronger and suggest revisions. Sullivan, Susanne:

"Conan Doyle's influence of his police detective Lestrade has stretched all the way up to modern-day television shows as well. "
This is good but delete the part about the show and write that in your own words Nguyen, Hieu:

""

A little too many quotes, need more analysis Question 1: Highlight the area in the introduction where the writer defines the mystery genre and lists several important genre conventions. Is this definition accurate and detailed? Are the conventions listed important aspects of the genre? Suggest revisions. Sullivan, Susanne:

"These laws, or conventions, tend to be a lead detective, his sidekick, a crime scene, a criminal, and a police inspector."

The definition is accurate and I like how you used the quote to support your claim. You have stated all the conventions that make the detective story and I like that Nguyen, Hieu:

" "The detective story is such a pervasive phenomenon of the contemporary worldnot only in books but in many other media" (Theory and Practice of Classic Detective Fiction). Twenty Rules for Writing Detective Stories adds that this particular fiction has "definite lawsunwritten, perhaps, but none the less binding." These laws, or conventions, tend to be a lead detective, his sidekick, a crime scene, a criminal, and a police inspector."
Might want to define the mystery genre a bit more Question 6: Highlight an area of the analysis of a scene from a modern day text. Do you feel the writer has done a good job of breaking the scene into parts (such as lighting, spacing, focus, editing, camera movement, etc---terms from Yale Film Analysis)? Suggest revisions. Sullivan, Susanne:

"same scene, the camera perspective is focused on the quarrel between Holmes and Lestrade. By the close up of his face, the audience can clearly see Holmes's opposition in his annoyed facial expressions. Holmes shouts "why the hell are you here" at Lestrade, something that he would not say in the novels"
Nguyen, Hieu:

I think this is good analysis. There is mention of the scene, the people, and the lighting.

"n the same scene, the camera perspective is focused on the quarrel between Holmes and Lestrade. By the close up of his face, the audience can clearly see Holmes's opposition in his annoyed facial expressions. Holmes shouts "why the hell are you here" at Lestrade, something that he would not say in the novels. "
Needs more analysis of scene Question 7: Does the writer compare the convention used by the modern-day text to a specific passage from Conan Doyle? Highlight the area where this occurs (or where you think it should if it's not there) and suggest revisions. Sullivan, Susanne:

" in Conan Doyle's "The Adventure of Norwood Builder" and "The Adventure of the Bruce-Partington Plans," Watson begins referring to Lestrade as "our old friend Lestrade" "
Maybe more of a point to relate to would be better. More ideas in how Lestrade has changed and is the same. Nguyen, Hieu:

"In short, there are differences between Conan Doyle's and Sherlock's character Lestrade but ultimately not many because the show is intended to allow "the luxury of developing characters and storylines" while remaining "true not only to the spirit and

plots of the original texts, but also to their thematic interests" (Sherlock vs. Sherlock: A Study in Holmes). "
Need to expand this comparison Question 4: Highlight the area of the essay where the writer introduces the scene from a modern-day text that will be analyzed. Does the writer begin with a brief but detailed summary of the scene and where it occurs within the episode or film? Suggest revisions. Sullivan, Susanne:

"Two Episode Two "The Hounds of Baskerville," Sherlock and Watson join Henry Knight in Dartmoor to attempt to solve the murder of Henry's father in connection to the Baskerville laboratory and the mysterious and supernatural "Hound from Hell." In the midst of their trouble, Holmes and Watson bump into "
This is one text that will be analyzed and are using it because it involves Lestrade. I think it fits well and has a good introduction. Sullivan, Susanne:

This is another scene that I think fits well. Maybe a little more analysis for the scene would help in the essay. give the context of where the scene is. What the people are doing. Etc. Nguyen, Hieu:

"A surprise visit from Lestrade sends Holmes complaining in exasperation, however, as Watson points out that Lestrade "could be just the man [they] want." Watson invites the "nice scary inspector from Scotland Yard" to join them on the case because he knows that Lestrade "might come in very handy." "

" Through the use of character dialogue, BBC's audience can note that this modernday Lestrade is not as inept as the character in Conan Doyle's stories. A surprise visit from Lestrade sends Holmes complaining in exasperation, however, as Watson points out that Lestrade "could be just the man [they] want." "
Good placement at beginning of paragraph Question 3: Highlight the thesis--does it follow the formula provided? Suggest revisions. Sullivan, Susanne:

This is the thesis and I like it for the most part. "specific revisions such as..." the ending of thesis has the concept idea of the essay, but the way it is written is a little weird

"BC's Sherlock, remains as a modern-day revision of Conan Doyle's Sherlock Holmes stories, updating the genre conventions for its 21st century audience; in particular, the police detective convention is an update of Conan Doyle's character Lestrade, with specific revisions such an not being as incompetent and less regarded as one of Sherlock's friends."

Nguyen, Hieu:

"However, BBC's Sherlock, remains as a modern-day revision of Conan Doyle's Sherlock Holmes stories, updating the genre conventions for its 21st century audience; in particular, the police detective convention is an update of Conan Doyle's character Lestrade, with specific revisions such an not being as incompetent and less regarded as one of Sherlock's friends."
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